It's been five years since her passing. Five years since 'the incident'. Ponies had grown to live without the constant showboating and ego-centric comments. But not all had grown acostomed to the lack of motivational speeches and amazing leadership skills. But most of all, no one had grown used to living without their dear friend, lover, and sister, Rainbow Dash.
A few things to keep in mind:
1. As stated in the long description, 5 years have officially passed since the show canon. Scootaloo now being 15 years old. (I like to imagine the CMCs were 10 in the show proper)
2. The amazing cover art was done by SlayerBVC's
3. (And most importantly) There WILL be death mentioned, doesn't occur on scream, but it will be mentioned. And grieving to said passing. If you are uncomfortable with those topics, this may not be the story for you.
Overall I liked this story. Sure, like you said it wasn't the most original premise, but it was well executed enough to make it worth the read. I especially liked the way used the weather to mirror Scootaloo's feelings.
That being said, I did spot a couple typos:
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Fixed, thanks. Good eye
And about the weather; it's a little something that tied neatly in with the story, adding to the feels a little. I've seen it done before, but never had a fitting opportunity to users. Until now, that is. So, when I saw the chance, I snatched it right up. Glad it didn't go unnoticed
Tanks for reading!
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No problem.
such a sad and beautiful story
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Happy you enjoyed
Wow, another absolute banger of a story. Again you just hit us will all the emotion in the world and that is why you are great at writing sad stories.
PS: I find Scootaloo to be the most interesting of the CMC to read about and that is another reason this story is great.
Sincerely, DynamicDino
I for one thought this was a great story! Sure, not the most original idea in the world, but you made it unique enough to engage people like me! Plus, it’s not that hard to make me read a story if it has to do with Rainbow and Scoots, I just looove their sisterly bond. It’s so sweet ^^
Anyways, great story! :D
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Aww, thanks! Honestly, I've never considered myself a sad story writer, I mainly stuck with drama, which is probably quite obvious at this point. But, yea, glad I'm getting the hang off sad stories. Maybe one day I can write one that'll actually be tear-worthy, let's see.
I personally feel the same way about Scootaloo. I adore her for many reason. And her wide array of stories, and interesting stories at that, is apart of that. My main thing being her determination even against all odds like her disability. Funnily enough, I was considering to make this one of those stories where she did grow up and end up being able to fly. But I wanted this to fit in with canon, so here we are.
Anywho. My nonsense aside: Thanks you for reading! Glad you enjoyed
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I almost cried, when I finished it...
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Glad you think so.
And I agree. Rainbow and Scootaloo have the most interesting of sisterly dynamics, to me, among the entirety of the show, just out of how they ended being sisters in the first place. In simpler words: their both just adorable
Anywho. Thanks for reading!
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Aww, just short of a tear! Maybe next time I can get you to burst by the end? I guess we'll never know, huh?
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perhaps
I liked this story, especially how it explores multiple angles of their relationship, not just a family bond but mentor and student. I really like how it implies with 'taught better' that Dash had served as a moral compass for Scootaloo (and who better to serve as a moral compass)
I also have some errors here I noticed;
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Thanks. Fixed.
And yea, I see them as both rather than just one or the other, hence the story being the way it is. Also, the 'taught better' part was implying just that. A little, thought to go unnoticed, detail, I suppose
Anywho. Thanks for reading! Glad it was worth your little look see!
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Definitely ^^
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Happy to hear you enjoyed
I loved this. Even though it made me cry, it was beautiful and very well written.
Keep up the good work!