A young pony is unable to stay asleep, her dreams plagued by shadows of everything she fears. Judgment of who she is weighs heavily on her heart - and the confusion of what it means only makes it worse. Princess Luna sees that she is struggling, and comes into her dreams to help her. She may even be more helpful than she thought.
The Sad tag is for heavier subject matter, this is not a sadfic, but it may make you feel some things.
Oh! This is my first attempt at writing in a pretty long time, please let me know if I made any rookie's mistakes.
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Nice work! There are a few typos, but that can easily be fixed.
Capitalize the I.
It seems that the protagonist was is supported by her parents or relatives. If she was a grown-up mare that still acted like a foal, then it is understandable. But in this case, she is still a young filly still discovering the world around her.
Keep up the good work!
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thanks for catching that, and thank you for the compliment .u.
Very nice for a first story, good work!
Great story, and very cute! I like it! Thank you for this!
You should write more often.
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i plan to!!! currently i'm waiting for my elbow to heal bc i broke it 😅 but i have ideas ready to go once i can!
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I hope your elbow heals quickly! 🙏
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Oh god. Best wishes on recovery. You might want to consider trying text-to-speech systems.
the fear of a monster under one’s bed is a bit more rational in Equestria, with the existence of actual monsters about!
oof! have a guess for why the narrator is relieved about their parents not finding the Luna costume here
i know it’s supposed to be a tense scene but i love how cute it is that ponies carry things tightly in their mouths when they’re important
yay, Luna’s in this! makes sense, with the nightmare and all
aww! Luna seeing her dream form reflecting who she is?
so true
aww! i can imagine Luna being very proud here
augh love this so much
love the Princess
oh, how wonderful! such a sweet story, and a wonderful depiction of Princess Luna and why she has a deserved place in her subjects’ hearts, bringing comfort and inspiration to the outcast and the fearful. thank you so much for it!
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omg i somehow missed this comment, thank you so much for all the kind words!!! also i really love your stories hehe. i really want to revisit this and write more, once i can figure out some way to do it more comfortably. this definitely gives me more motivation to try
This story was super super sweet! I've always thought about Luna's dreamscape and about how ponies might use it for different purposes. You've used it to excellent effect here with gender and appearance! A very sweet and inspiring story! I'm sure the next time I look in the mirror, I'll be just that little extra bit happier having read this.
A very interesting depiction of Luna's dream powers.