Biollante never thought her life would change so much since arriving in this world. Nor did she think she met so many new friends. Her Brothers would sometimes visit, through their new jobs kept them busy. But she didn't mind. As long as those two knuckleheads were getting along.
though
"Well, when she first appeared, we mistook her as an evil enchantress because of how different she was. We thought she curse us when we followed her into the Everfree, only to learn it was the Poison Joke that change us." Fluttershy said.
"she would curse" or "she'd curse"
"Oh, she knew. She told me after we ate. What she didn't know was that I was the oldest sister of both Junoir and Xenllia." Biollante said, drinking her tea.
older and junior and Xenilla
Fluttershy nodded in thanks before flying back to Ponyville. Biollante watches fly and smiles. Maybe this world wasn't so bad after all.
"watches her fly" and while technically not wrong, isn't would have sounded better in my opinion.
Other than that, glad to see you're back. Loved your first Biollante fic.
I like it. I'm happy you decided to continue your What-If story. I'm looking forward to Biollante's adventures. I'm hoping she gets to make a lot of friends. And I'm also looking forward to some funny yet loving hijinks with Biollante and her brothers.
though
"she would curse" or "she'd curse"
older and junior and Xenilla
"watches her fly" and while technically not wrong, isn't would have sounded better in my opinion.
Other than that, glad to see you're back. Loved your first Biollante fic.
11156834 Thanks. I'll also go and fix the mistakes you notices. It has been some time since I last wrote on here.
I like it. I'm happy you decided to continue your What-If story. I'm looking forward to Biollante's adventures. I'm hoping she gets to make a lot of friends. And I'm also looking forward to some funny yet loving hijinks with Biollante and her brothers.