"I did not expect a surprise attack from spur forces onto Caesar stand from air." "All I'm hearing is death and destruction and mass domination." "Wait is one helo attacking? Or a couple."
I think that this chapter maybe gave us some of the best characterization of Shayle that I have seen you make to date. Either that or I am so tired that I am easily pleased, even if that does not normally happen, but all nighters does something to the brain after all. I would love to go into details as I normally does, but the clock says that I should have went to bed a hour ago, so no bigger details today. Only thing I can say is that it have something to do with her view on death and how to treat dead zebras and ponies. Must also admit that it got a little snigger out of me with the view that Shayle have on when you should date, even if her reasoning are rather clear and logical when you remember what she knows and have seen about that subject. I do just fear that you put her into a more or less forced romantic situation soon just to prove her wrong, but time must tell about that.
Nitpick: " I stepped back forward silently and placed the necklace in the dirt that covered the grave" How can one step back forward?
2649124 Thanks, I'm glad you liked it Doomande. And about Shayle being forced into a romantic situation just to prove her wrong; why would I do that? It would be too predictable and cliche for me to do such a thing, especially when it wouldn't be in character for her to go into such a thing.
2660365 Yes, Shayle is really bad at choosing places to go. They keep blowing up for some reason Also, I don't plan on using 'disgusting foal killing', because that would be silly. I've got plenty of other, non-predictable ways to keep my story dark if I so desire. Plus I've already killed foals, so I'm ahead of the game
Okay, normally i'd be all like" hmm this story's ok i gess". but rite now i'm like " WTF man! i neva cried wen a character i didnt like that much died!!!!" Seer, i dont kno why, but she always felt like a "NO!" to me. but wen she died, i resorted to cleaning my knives to prevent tears from rolling. this is an exellent story, and has all the feel of Fallout Equestria in it. plz continue, Chap 15 took my heart and pumped it full of and. Keep up the good work. (sry 4 da emote overload, this is my first fimfiction comment and i really wanted to try them out)
2695779 It's alright, I'm glad you're liking the story, and I'm honored that your first comment on the site is on my story! I hope I keep entertaining you, and that I don't ruin the experience
Hoooleeee crap...Gunships are bad news.
"I did not expect a surprise attack from spur forces onto Caesar stand from air."
"All I'm hearing is death and destruction and mass domination."
"Wait is one helo attacking? Or a couple."
I think that this chapter maybe gave us some of the best characterization of Shayle that I have seen you make to date. Either that or I am so tired that I am easily pleased, even if that does not normally happen, but all nighters does something to the brain after all. I would love to go into details as I normally does, but the clock says that I should have went to bed a hour ago, so no bigger details today. Only thing I can say is that it have something to do with her view on death and how to treat dead zebras and ponies. Must also admit that it got a little snigger out of me with the view that Shayle have on when you should date, even if her reasoning are rather clear and logical when you remember what she knows and have seen about that subject. I do just fear that you put her into a more or less forced romantic situation soon just to prove her wrong, but time must tell about that.
Nitpick:
" I stepped back forward silently and placed the necklace in the dirt that covered the grave" How can one step back forward?
2649124
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it Doomande.
And about Shayle being forced into a romantic situation just to prove her wrong; why would I do that? It would be too predictable and cliche for me to do such a thing, especially when it wouldn't be in character for her to go into such a thing.
2660365
Yes, Shayle is really bad at choosing places to go. They keep blowing up for some reason
Also, I don't plan on using 'disgusting foal killing', because that would be silly. I've got plenty of other, non-predictable ways to keep my story dark if I so desire. Plus I've already killed foals, so I'm ahead of the game
Glad you liked it Regolit
Okay, normally i'd be all like" hmm this story's ok i gess". but rite now i'm like " WTF man! i neva cried wen a character i didnt like that much died!!!!"
Seer, i dont kno why, but she always felt like a "NO!" to me. but wen she died, i resorted to cleaning my knives to prevent tears from rolling.
this is an exellent story, and has all the feel of Fallout Equestria in it. plz continue, Chap 15 took my heart and pumped it full of and.
Keep up the good work.
(sry 4 da emote overload, this is my first fimfiction comment and i really wanted to try them out)
2695779
It's alright, I'm glad you're liking the story, and I'm honored that your first comment on the site is on my story! I hope I keep entertaining you, and that I don't ruin the experience
2695362
What kind of trigger warning?
Sorry for the late replies to you guys, I've been out of action for a while now and just got around to it.
*Sits in coner and cries*
;-;