You know how evil you are right? Posting a new chapter right now. Right now when I have to wait because I need something to read on Saturday and Sunday because I have two 6 hours trips before me. You know how evil that is right!
both parts of the commentary are up on clouds now. Also, accidentally checked out the hub page without meaning to... *shakes fist with a grin* Good hub page though.
For once do I actually not have something special to say. It was a good chapter like all the others. Even if it felt a little bit like Seer just died so Shayle could get that job.
I know that it is a big loss, and that it is sad in its own way. But Seer had such a useful role that I can´t see why she should go. Sure the plot says so, and the scene with her death is also fine. Ohh and spoiler for this chapter by the way, not like I have ever spoiled something before in my review. But it does still fill a bit wrong with how helpful she was, but that is just me.
Don´t have anything else to say. Or... nice to see that the fetch quest is over, even if it was one of the better ones I have read yet.
Nitpicks: "That is if they weren’t waiting for me to come back" Should it not be past tense was instead if is? "A little grin tried to curl on the corners of my mouth" You have a double period before this sentence "I had already seen my friends’ corpses before since travelling into the Wasteland." Are there not something wrong with this sentence? Either something are missing or to much.
And yeah, I know it's a bit nuts that Seer died with how helpful she was to Shayle and Felix, but it is a point in the plot for the story. The way I did it does kinda seem like she died just so Shayle could get her job, but I didn't mean it to look that way. Sorry if it seems wrong.
And once again thanks for the nitpicks, and I'm glad you liked the chapter overall
Shayle... Why don't you kill ALLLLLLLL the people? I used to have really insightful things to say but now I just...don't. Doomnade makes me feel inferior... I enjoy his comments but he says everything I'm thinking before I can say shit... I feel bad because he's better than me... Once again thank you for your existence ^_^
You know how evil you are right? Posting a new chapter right now. Right now when I have to wait because I need something to read on Saturday and Sunday because I have two 6 hours trips before me. You know how evil that is right!
Well it is rather evil will I say
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Yeah, I'm good at doing that kind of stuff
Sorry about the bad timing man.
both parts of the commentary are up on clouds now. Also, accidentally checked out the hub page without meaning to...
*shakes fist with a grin*
Good hub page though.
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Thanks Regolit!
For once do I actually not have something special to say. It was a good chapter like all the others. Even if it felt a little bit like Seer just died so Shayle could get that job.
I know that it is a big loss, and that it is sad in its own way. But Seer had such a useful role that I can´t see why she should go. Sure the plot says so, and the scene with her death is also fine. Ohh and spoiler for this chapter by the way, not like I have ever spoiled something before in my review. But it does still fill a bit wrong with how helpful she was, but that is just me.
Don´t have anything else to say. Or... nice to see that the fetch quest is over, even if it was one of the better ones I have read yet.
Nitpicks:
"That is if they weren’t waiting for me to come back" Should it not be past tense was instead if is?
"A little grin tried to curl on the corners of my mouth" You have a double period before this sentence
"I had already seen my friends’ corpses before since travelling into the Wasteland." Are there not something wrong with this sentence? Either something are missing or to much.
Thanks Doomande!
And yeah, I know it's a bit nuts that Seer died with how helpful she was to Shayle and Felix, but it is a point in the plot for the story. The way I did it does kinda seem like she died just so Shayle could get her job, but I didn't mean it to look that way. Sorry if it seems wrong.
And once again thanks for the nitpicks, and I'm glad you liked the chapter overall
Shayle...
Why don't you kill ALLLLLLLL the people?
I used to have really insightful things to say but now I just...don't.
Doomnade makes me feel inferior...
I enjoy his comments but he says everything I'm thinking before I can say shit...
I feel bad because he's better than me...
Once again thank you for your existence ^_^