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Drop_It_Like_Its_Clop


Don't make the same mistake I made, kids; When the police shout "drop it!", that doesn't refer to your pants.

Comments ( 12 )

This reads very much like a hidden gem. I'm not sure how the only commentary anyone's mustered is a "bruh", but I guess I could say the same, albeit mine would be in admiration of this story.

Your voice is eloquent and your prose is smooth to read. The story is compelling, the characters interesting. It quite says something that even as an editor, my only nitpick would be that you don't use the em dash and instead use a hyphen (-) with spaces surrounding it, which is hardly even worth stating since they don't appear on standard keyboards and nothing is taken away from the reading by their lack, other than perhaps the slightest bit of formatting. Same with the ' "What's wrong." ' in the middle that I suspect was meant to be a question mark; it could well have been intentional, that's how good your voice is. Also, " agaisnt " makes an appearance in the uh, Friday scene. But the intent is of course crystal clear.

As a fellow entrant to the same contest, I'm kinda awed being up against someone like this. I'd be utterly breathtaken if this didn't at least place somewhere. I'm more aghast at how this was never even featured (that I saw, at least). This is how you do romance, this is how you do sex. This is the model for a good many things that I can't even think to point to post-reading. This is everything I once aspired to be, in some senses. I almost feel like me entering this contest with what I did is an insult to your work, however unintended it might have been; smut against beautiful writing, the two just don't compare.

I digress. Don't let anyone tell you your style's too flowery; I think it's florid to the perfect amount, the same way a fragrant bouquet of flowers delights the senses. Keep writing. You've done a fantastic job here. I'm not a judge, but this story is definitely in the top 3 for me. Perhaps in the top 3 of incest stories I've read.

Basically...great job. You deserve any accolades that come your way. And I suspect they will be coming your way soon.

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Thanks, it's kind of you to say. I'm always greatful for comments like yours which dive into what people like or dislike about my writing, since it gives me a chance to address the issues and either edit them or improve for my next story. I'll see if I can iron out the typos, and best of luck to your entry. I doubt it's anything less than stiff competition.
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I'd be utterly breathtaken if this didn't at least place somewhere.

Guess what?

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I had a feeling this was the one, heh. As soon as I saw it I knew I stood no chance. It’s just…the masterclass, really.

Honestly, this really is just a complete masterclass piece of erotic fiction. I didn't want to post and spoil anything before the results were announced, but despite not being a pairing I usually enjoy, this story simply stood head and shoulders above the pack in every storytelling metric I could think of. Congratulations on winning the contest, and further, welcome to the halls of the High Quality Mature Fiction Group. This story absolutely deserves its well won place there.

How can anyone downvote this?! A travesty, I say!

Maybe they don't like clop in their feels...

this was a great fic!

From your description:

Ever since acquiring the diodes

The word you're looking for is geodes.

nothing that can be done to reign her in

This should be "rein", as in to pull the reins on a horse to assert control.

I enjoyed this very much. The way this was written it seems very believable from Rarity's perspective the emotions the story just felt very real in that manner.

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