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Shakes’s going to notice this in 3… 2… 1… :rainbowlaugh:

This starts out pretty well, can’t wait for the next chapters. :pinkiehappy:

11131955 Same here! Really looking forward to chapter five as well, but I'm also eagerly awaiting chapters 4, 6, and 7 too!

When the next chapter? can’t wait!

Honestly the hardest part about this is getting what I want across. I want to get across that this is sort of a weird thing happening, and yet everyone becomes pretty cool with it. And in doing so, I feel I get to explanory and not enough horny.

3k words in and Shining Armor and Twilight Velvet are just getting frisky. Then I don’t even know if I’m getting the smut across properly. I’m trying to lean towards comedy rather than tragedy, but damn is writing cuck hard like that.

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I am looking forward to chapter five.

As for making cuck a comedy is a bit tricky, but plausible to do, it depends how one words it. Plausible to include a pun or two, maybe more.

Shining Armor had given her the motherload of cream pies inside of her, and she couldn’t feel more proud.

Was that intentional? Because that Mother sure was filled with that Load.
:rainbowwild:

Very nice chapter. btw, your chapter numbering is a bit wrong (as of commenting it's listing this as chapter 3 instead of 4)

Will the last 2 chapters also take months to write? I'm not rushing just want to know.

Another excellent chapter. Well done.

“Spike Theodore Draconis, what in the name of Celestia is going on here!?”

"Spike Theodore Draconis"?

Did you mean to have his initials be STD?

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He already is Spike The. Dragon.

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I think you should be more impressed that Twilight basically named him Teddy Dragon.

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