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GNGFan21


Furry, Brony, Amateur guitarist, Amateur fanfic writer and much more. I enjoy a good stories, games, writing stories and practice playing my guitar.

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In the ancient past, Faust was the strongest of all alicorns who gave birth to Celestia and Luna. All Faust wanted was to live in peace with her two daughters after their father passed away during the war against darkness that is just known by the name Void. Unfortunately, the void monsters were just slowed down and not banished from their realm.

High Alicorn Council "pleaded" for Faust to help them to banish these void monsters so they could live in peace. Faust had no chance other than to help them. Faust managed to banish these void creatures back to the abyss that spawned them, but with a price. All these years Celestia and Luna thought their mother had died like their father fighting to protect the world, but fate has seen to it that their mother gets to see her foals again.

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Comments ( 43 )

Into my favorites you go

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Thanks for favorite then ;P

Okay then why didn't Discord free them?

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That's a secret for now XD

This is getting better

its back
seriously i wish for fimfiction to be an app so i know when they are actually uploaded because3 none of them has an actuall schedule
(sorry for my ranting )

good chapter but i think that magic duel with fire spirit can last longer

It was supposed to show that even if Faust has problems with her magic, her knowledge on how to use it gives her great advantage. I know I might not be the best on describing events XD

All of these Alicorns are both physically and mentally weak in here. It's rather sad and pathetic. :ajbemused: :facehoof: :applecry:

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Perhaps a little bit too much XD

You know, just for once when somebody has the chance to end Chrysalis' plan to not make love to the idiot ball

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I know, this is way worse than the canon episodes. And the situation without itself is probably much worse than the other Canterlot Wedding AU stories in here that I have read ( And that's something. )


Personally, I always depict Faust as a mighty goddess/supreme empress and ruler of ponykind ( Or even the entire Equis. But then again, how is she related to the non-pony species? ). That's what the many stories that I read always depict her like that.


I will accept that she was tragic trapped/exiled/or worse ( killed ) by a unknown and ancient enemy ( Like those void monsters for example. ) But now, she is literally got "killed" by a bunch of weak rocks???!!! Aren't Alicorns supposed to be like SUPER durable??!!

Plus, there are things called personal shielding spells, healing spells, or even regeneration ( Like I seen in other stories, once again. )

That is just embarrassing!

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There is a reason behind all of that I am planning to try and explain it. I don't know about Alicorns being super durable in their physical department maybe :P
I'm new to writing fiction so these are practice runs so to say, and I do hope it makes sense in future chapters.

I hope you continue to read this as I add more chapters :D

Wow I'm hoping Luna and celestia are ok and there mother comes to save them

Awesome work here I like the end of the chapter

Great chapter now you got me thinking what's up with scootaloo

Added to my read list. :twilightsmile:

Another story kind of ruined for me. It's a pet peeve of mine to see a story about an op character getting nerfed because plot. I know she is still recovering but it still comes across as forced to me. She is still capable despite that. What happened to the wise Faust that despite being in a weaker state easily used her knowledge to effortlessly counteracted others magic? Now she made a fatal mistake I don't buy her making. Not to mention her not using her authority as their mother. No compromising like adults and have her heal at home or simply spend time with her God forbid, preferably back at home, or even have the mane 6 keep her company. No, just treat her like a prisoner. Her de der. Before you say it's supposed to comedic, I don't find it funny. Way to be a hypocrite Celestia! Don't reason and find a middle ground just treat her like a prisoner, while you talk down like you have the high ground. Don't make the character op at all if you are just going to arbitrary nerf them because plot. Don't know if I will keep reading but this chapter's plot and Faust being nerfed and making a stupid mistake really bugged me.

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What I'm a bit surprised about is that Redheart, who has seen Dash in similar circumstances, didn't pick up on Faust's boredom (especially if this is Day 2+). Yea, this is supposed to be the 'shoe on the other hoof' routine but still ... [or even a senior doctor who's treated Dash before couls have stepped in]

I found the end of the chapter to the somewhat comical great job

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We can't have that! That would be reasonable after all. We can only have Faust escaping instead of using her authority and despite being the most powerful magic user with knowledge that allowed her to turn the tides despite being in a severally weakened state, she makes a fatal mistake and gets captured easily because plot. Instead of talking things out like actual adults just have the daughters treat their mother like a prisoner and wrap the chapter with annoying hypocrisy. Have Celestia call her out when she isn't any better as she seems to refuse to compromise or even send Twilight to visit her mother to keep her company god forbid. She could only send her lackey when there's a threat after all, so sorry Faust. She can only do her usual bare minimum against villains.

Seriously Celestia. you are doign more harm then good.

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I'm sorry to hear that, but I thank you for showing interest in my story this far. I hope I manage to write something new that interest you in the future. :D

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Sorry, cliches like the one you just used annoy me a great deal. It's like if you feel you have to nerf your op character for the plot to work then you should have thought of that when you decided to use an op character to begin with. This just comes across as inconsistent and unpleasant just for a cheap laugh. Never ruin the logical consistency of your story for a joke or gag. It will only ruin your work. Thank you for being understanding about it and I do wish you luck with this story and whatever other ones you come up with in the future.

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Well we all have to start from somewhere don't we XD
So I'm more than happy to get some feedback as long as it is reasonable and not in the lines "you suck" which gives no chance to improve :O

Yes this was wroth the wait and and I wonder what the ideas for the wedding are

this was definitely worth the wait

I can't wait to see the face of Chrysalis when she sees that Faust is alive. She's gonna be soo shocked about this.

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I'm guessing Faust's magic pool is still very low because she's only been back for a day, kinda like Princess Luna when she returned?

Far away in the north near where the ancient city of Crystal Empire

... and after a wedding, a trip north...

Im loving this, great work

So, first chapter... My thoughts? "Cliché: The Story." :pinkiecrazy:

Seen it a million times. Here's hoping that what comes after is more interesting—I'm not bailing yet.

Also—plz fix paragraphs, they're broken.

I'm sorry for anypony who have "madly" been waiting for next chapter XD but thanks to my workloads finally getting reduced I am hoping to continue writing my fics and do hope to share them with all of you who want to read my amateur stories once again :D

Just got caught up. Excellent story. Looking forward to your next update. Hope all is well. :twilightsmile:

I hope more come soon

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