Starlight has a craving for bacon, and Sunset is looking rather good at the moment. With Mistletoe as her weapon of choice, she tries, and fails spectacularly to get her extra crispy kiss.
“The first step towards getting somewhere is to decide you’re not going to stay where you are.”
J.P. Morgan
Pre-readers: Sunlightrays, ScarletRibbons, Short-Tale, Sleepless Beholder
Editor: LysandersD.
Written for CosmicBlues for Jinglemas 2021
Pinkie, you shouldn''t leave your life-sized replicas of your friends around!
Nice story, good work.
This is very cute and wholesome
Good to see this one finally released.
Well, that was cute and silly and really rather sweet! I'm somehow not in the least bit surprised that Pinkie Pie would have a full size fake Sunset, that both came out of nowhere but also seems perfectly in character! Nice work.
Loki: Yes... Goooood.
Baldur: I'm in danger.
What a fun little comedy of errors! AND WITH SMOOCHINGS!
D'aww, this story was adorable, especially Starlight. This story has shades of a story of mine that I asked you to review, which made me sympathize with poor Starlight that much more. There don't be too many stories with EQG Starlight, so I think it was a nice touch using her over a more common choice like Princess Twilight, another human mane 7 member, or Wallflower.
I did notice some small grammar errors while I was reading. Hope you don't mind me pointing some out.
There wasn't an apostrophe or comma/period at the start of the second line.
Both of those paragraphs had two words together as one word.
Those little errors aside, I enjoyed this story. Good work!
đź‘Ś Thanks for the fic!
Goodness gracious, does she have a one-track-mind - I'm totally on Cheerilee's side here. Get your mind out of the gutter, girl.
Funny story, anyway.
Thank you.
Cute.
This was pretty cute, especially when Pinkie's replica showed up. Interesting that you went with a Starlight that was native to this world. I will say though that Starlight didn't feel super Starlight-like, and it did feel a bit repetitive.
Interesting.
A space is needed following the first sentence in the paragraph.
Also, is this story an au where Starlight is a human?
again. "Hey there, Starlight.*
head.*
know?"*
Good thinking Starlight.
The second half doesn't make sense?
"accidents."*
without*
A space is needed after the first sentence.
A space is needed after the first sentence.
trampling.*
giving Trixie*
that Sunset*
Starlight was*
enough, standing*
Looks like she got her wish afterall!
This story was great and all but my only complaint is the bug amount of mistakes. Those aside, I enjoyed the story.