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a short but lovely story!

OK, this was a fun read. Have a thumbs up. :twilightsmile:

Nice. I got some chuckles out of this story. Especially at this exchange.

"I sure as hell am!", she replied. "Let's get this party started!"

"What party?", I asked.

"It's what ponies say when they're ready.", she explained.

I don't think I've ever seen anyone take the expression "let's get this party started" literally before, so the joke was a nice touch.:rainbowlaugh:

However, one thing I should point out is that the punctuation following the dialogue was often incorrect, usually with commas that should be here, such as in the part I quoted. It should be this:

"I sure as hell am!" she replied. "Let's get this party started!"

"What party?" I asked.

"It's what ponies say when they're ready," she explained.

That aside, this was a nice, amusing story.

Is Shadowlance also a bat pony?

"I'm going to start smashing the windows. While I'm smashing them, you're going to run around the castle screaming that the castle is under attack.", she told me. "Run!"

You'll probably get fired by this.

"Let's try something else?"
"Let's take the princess' deserts in front of them?", Cerise suggested.

If I had any doubt you were having a death wish before I'm sure about it now.


Nice story!
I enjoyed reading it.

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