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"Defend your clan, even with your life." - Warrior code, Warrior cats novel series. Also, if you don't like that I post Christian blogs, then please either do not subscribe/watch me or complain.

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A young man with a love of military history and MLP:FIM finds himself dragged into Equestria as war threatens the pony nation.

I got the idea for this story from my Civil War book collection and Altoid's Blood and Guts and Ponies story, as it involves a human coming to Equestria to aid in its defense, partly by modernizing it's military and leading its forces on the battlefield.

Just a warning; the main character is Christian and pro-Union. Just to give people a heads up.

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Ohhh! This story looks good, and I like the picture, it's a scene from a civil war movie!

Thanks guys, this makes me feel more confident about this project.

Also, the picture is from the movie Gettysburg, when a Confederate officer goes to shoot Chamberlain, and the gun either misfires or has no ammo, and Chamberlain raises his sword like a boss :) :rainbowlaugh::pinkiesmile::ajsmug::raritystarry:

At first I thought Rome total war. Cool!

Then the knowledge that he was a Brony who was afraid of being persecuted... gag.

But Celestia looking at him through his head... that was nice. More than nice even. It's fantabulous! There's the question as to why he appeared in the middle of nowhere near Ponyville, as that makes little no no sense as well as how he knows that it was someone looking at his life through his eyes, a little exposition would have been nice. But the thought that the Alicorn was looking at the big man from his own eyes was nice.

But then you gave him a gun. And you described it in 'I don't care' levels of detail along with all that other rubbish. Then something about 9/11,and enemies of freedom! My god. Then 'pepre' when anything else would have sufficed, you didn't even have to add that bit!

Maybe it's because I read a lot of fiction, but this is starting to smell like a self insert. Inane levels of pointless details that detract from the story lead me to this conclusion. which is a shame as the basic premise seems to be solid.

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Well that's fine, as everyone has their own opinions. I have my own on this matter.

In chapter 1,

"...until he saw that Death Battle video on Youtube where Rainbow Dash was paired against the Decepticon Starscream... Rainbow Dash won."

Yep, that's pretty much how I became a brony too. :ajsmug:

Finished the prologue, and I'm intrigued. There's the occasion spelling/grammatical error, enough to advise you to get a pre-reader, but not enough to condemn you for.

First chapter in:
-As before, getting a pre-reader to try and catch little things is probably a good idea.
-Gotta agree with Norse here, sometimes you add little details that are just distracting, the distraction may actually be by your use of parentheses, though it's probably a combination of both.

Who's telling this story anyway? :applejackunsure:

Sorry, I read a lot of Harry Turtledove and a bunch of the Halo novels, so much of my writing styles come from them, I apologise if that is the issue.

In any case, I'm going to start the next chapter, hopefully it's out within a couple of days.

Okay, that took hours.

Sorry if it seems boring, but to put the first few chapters and prologue in prospective, you wouldn't play a game in multiplayer online without going through the campaign mode first; you get a feel for the game through that, so by the time that campaign is completed, you're ready to play.

If I skipped just to the action, everyone would then want all the backstory filled in anyway, so I decided to write this the way I did, with action showing up later and explaining stuff now. The next chapter will discuss the threats facing Equestria and will involve James making a choice.

Also, I'm branching away from a one-character-story, so that multiple perspectives will arise.

Again, I apologise if it doesn't seem so great right now. I DO have plans for action and major events.

Not half bad, I'd like to see more. :pinkiehappy:

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Okay, thanks for the encouragement. :ajsmug:

New chapter! :yay: Now, things are really getting interesting, can't wait for more! :pinkiehappy: And don't worry, I pefectly respect you not making the Princesses deities. In fact, I'm actually glad you're not, as I am a Christian. :twilightsmile:

Now that I think about it, going to Equestria and serving as their military advisor/strategizer would be like a dream come true. :rainbowkiss:

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Basically that's why I did it, due to me being a Catholic (edit; ex-Catholic, now Protestant), or perhaps just being a Christian.

And thanks for the compliments and encouragement. I will be adding another chapter hopefully within the next week or so. Hopefully school lets me, anyway.

yeah I dont see celestia or luna as gods either
I like to refer to them as eternals they can still die just very difficult to kill:trollestia:

That took a while, but hopefully this is a good chapter. I'll start working on the next one within the next few hours, but I'm offering no promises as to when it will be finished.

1493996 Glad to see more work. :twilightsmile: Oh, and, I know this is really awkward, but... how do you pronounce 'Lavigne'? :twilightsheepish:

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The way you pronouce Avril Lavigne's surname, basically.

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Thanks. The reason for the delay involved school :/ as is often the case. Sorry. I might be able to upload another chapter or two on this story soon, but I've got three stories to check up on and make chapters for now.

you should just leave it at "To prepare for war" it would have been more dramatic

I like this story and all but holy shit the South wasn't fighting over slavery, it was mostly states rights because the entire southern economy was being destroyed while the industrializes north had it good.

James' speech sounded a bit wooden, but other than that, very nice. :twilightsmile:

It would be amusing if you did a little side chapter of his parents receiving a letter

Therefore, I am just as awesome as Joshua Chamberlain.:twilightblush:

Odd, as of this moment the next chapter has exactly 1,337 words :derpytongue2:

Definitely my favorite chapter thus far. I loved James' speech at the camp and I also love the new characters you brought in as well. :pinkiehappy: Looks like James got some more friends, hope to see more of them. Ugh, I'm such a fanboy. :facehoof: Anyway, great work. :ajsmug:

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Thanks. :ajsmug::pinkiehappy::raritystarry::twilightsheepish:

Unfortunately I'm not sure if I can get another chapter out before Christmas, and I won't be able to get another one out after that until January 1st or 2nd at best. :/

"We have four hundred to fight off thousands."
I foresee awesome Spatan-esque fighting.

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the changlings have the numbers, the ponies have location and technology (and the Human). Id say its about even.

For whtaever reason, my text when reading stories is suddenly different than the text when creating them, and it's different than the text in comments too. This change occured last night and I have no idea how to return it to default; I tried, with the bar at the top of the screen, but the best I can get is Calibri. If someone could help me out with this I would be very grateful.

Just found this story. It is definitely going on my read later list. I threw you a like for being a fan of the Warriors series. I'll give you a fav if I like the story.

Nice battle scene, I can definitely tell you modeled it after the Battle of Gettysburg. :raritywink: And now, things are getting a lot more interesting, can't wait to see how it goes down.

Oh, and something I forgot to mention about last chapter, I also really loved that fantasy dream sequence James had, even though it had no real value to the story. But still, it was a well crafted small thing that served to make the bigger picture even more colorful. It would be interesting to place ponies in our wars and imagine the roles they'd play, so... another? :pinkiehappy:

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I don't think it's appropriate to post another chapter on the day our Lord and Savior was reportedly born. And the family is coming over on Christmas Eve, so I'll probably be busy with that. After Christmas, I won't be able to post untl January 2nd, 1st if, and only if, I'm lucky.

1847230 No, what I met was could there be another dream sequence in a future chapter.

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Also, I modeled the battle off of some of those from the novel "The United States of Atlantis" by Harry Turtledove.

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