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Derpy, Pinkie Pie, Sweetie Belle, Chrysalis. Myself, summed up in four MLP characters. I'm a deeply flawed individual, but if you can get past that, I'm sure we can be the best of friends.


PLEASE READ THIS FIRST: This story is in no way intended to be taken seriously. This is just something funny I was inspired to write.

Twilight isn't always the brightest bulb in the case, though she always tries to make herself look that way. In this particular case, she makes an astounding connection concerning Derpy and her cutie mark. But is she on the mark, or totally off base?

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I saw the title and thought of the very poorly written grim/dark tale regarding Derpy's cutie mark by the same name, and was about to assume the worst, before seeing your rating and tag and after reading it through, I was quite impressed and did enjoy the story. Liked and faved. :derpytongue2:

Great, now I want a Powerpuff crossover. I hope you're proud of yourself.

I'll have to stick this on Read Later!

1262910 Do you mean the grimbright one where she's abandoned and left with a little dish of bubbles? I quite liked that one. It's written like Flowers for Algernon.

I've got quite a few stories that are already on my to-do list, but I think I might find some time to add that one on... It may be a while before it can get posted, though.

1263202 Yes... how could something like that be considered light at all :rainbowhuh:. It was full of errors, (at least the one I read was), Derpy's mother shouldn't be described as abusive and hateful, she should be more like the one from Derpy's first bath (Compassionate and loving). Flowers for Algernon is good, but I would never compare it with Bubbles, I almost didn't bother finishing bubbles because of how rushed it was.

1264440 haha that's brilliant! :derpytongue2:


Well, to each his or her own. Personally, I think an individual writer should be allowed creative license with characters lacking any canon character development. Bubbles was a good example of using tone to create grimbright (an otherwise difficult alignment).

1265217 I suppose. I can't deny that every writer should be allowed their creative will to think of that sort of stuff. And I wont go all out and say it is a bad story, but I really didn't enjoy it personally. I can't judge the character personas a lot though, I've got my own share of dark stories... But the difference is I don't twist characters to be the opposite of what they'd be in the actual show. I will admit, if done right, that makes a great story. But if you turn say Pinkie into a crazed killer not only do you enrage me and many others, but you are left with a piece of rubbish like cupcakes. (In all honesty, as well written as that was, it was horrible, and any story that is ripped off it and directly related to it is always just as bad, but always has worse grammar) that is my rant. I have no problems with your personal preference towards these stories, but that is mine.


Pinkamena is canon :pinkiecrazy:

sort of

Yay :pinkiehappy:
And I happen to agree with your 'little' rant 100%! completely changing the persona and identity of a character is wrong in any case (especially if their are Ponies involved). :moustache:

1265294 Not the type of Pinkamena that would cut somepony up. :pinkiesick:

1265657 Thats why I don't like it most of the time :pinkiesmile:, ponies are so innocent, even when writing grim dark I can't write about them any differently than how they would actually act :yay:

also speaking of Cupcakes, did you catch my reference to it in the story?

1268561 "I have some pretty crazy dreams. Like this one where I was baking a batch of cupcakes, and-" :pinkiegasp: would this be the line :rainbowderp:

yes it would. btw I feel the same way you do about Cupcakes. I can't stand it.

1268599 I;m glad to hear it :yay: usually the only ones who like it anyway are the newby noobs who write their first ever fic based off of it, leading for an instant grave digging of their profile. I'll toss you a follow, i'd be interested to see what stories you come up with in the future dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_smile.png

aaw. you ish so sweet. I'm glad you like my stories

1268614 Yeah, sometimes I need to read stuff like this to refresh my innocence of the show, and make me feel like not such a bad person for some of the stuff I write. But in all seriousness these are quite entertaining dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Pinkie_loool.png

well you'll be happy to know then, that I'm going to be focusing more on the fluffier stories in the near future, and less on my grimdark stories such as Taken. in fact, my very next story I think you'll really like. I'll give you a hint: it's about Derpy and a gigantic sock.

1268627 I love Derpy :derpytongue2:dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Derpy_Hooves_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Derpy_Hooves.png looking forward to it dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Colgate_beam.png for now I think the best story I saw on your page was Success! We Have Secured the Enemy Intelligence! any TF2 crossover or themed story that is well written is always a good one... why is it not in my favourites dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_rainbowderp_flip.png ... I'll be right back.

1268635 Sometimes I forget to rate dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_O_O.png I didn't catch your reference to the fake meet the pyro though... I think it's been ages since i watched it though dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png .


“Mission begins in sixty seconds!” It’s that same female announcer again. The Scout leans in to me. “Ya know, there are rumors that the Pyro is the announcer lady…”

1268644 ... And all this time, it stood out like a chipped hoof dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_rainbowderp_flip.png :facehoof: I tend to oveerlook certain things if I'm immersed in the story. Probobly would have been an odd comedic twist if the pyro had been standing beside you as well, and heard you say that.

y'know, I didn't even think of that. wow, that would have been pretty cool. oh well, I'm planning on making some other MLP/TF2 crossover stories in the future.

also, where are you getting all these other ponymoticons? like how do you find what to type to put them in?

1268658 I like me a good Tf2 crossover dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire_rape.png
Oh and there is a link to a script for them here: http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/25924 you need a program called greasemonkey to use it, but that should also be there if you need help, I'll run you through it. there's alot of good ones dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_cake.png

1268658 I forgot to mention there's a few more things than just emoticons too. but they are listed on the site.

1268658 Did you manage to get the script working?

I'm somewhat tech illiterate, so no. I couldn't even find where to get the script from.

1268731 ok, would you like me to run you through it?


This was a wonderful story. The only way I presently see it becoming better is if it is made into an multi-chapter story. Kudos!:pinkiehappy:

BUBBLES:pinkiehappy: Bubbles is best puff

I was considering doing that.


First, it's not full of errors, it's written as if by a child, the "errors" were inserted on purpose. Second, for the sake of the story Derpy's mother shouldn't be loving and caring, she needed to be abusive, else there would be no story. Your headcanon does not dictate how other people should right stories. The idea of grimbright is having a more cynical plot in a seemly perfect society, like Ponyville. You shouldn't say a story just because it's grimbright and you aren't a fan of grimbright. Every story has a purpose, and Bubbles illuminates a truth about our society. Just because it isn't good doesn't make it any less true. I was personally touched by Bubbles enough to make a sequel of sorts to it.

1278020 Hey, like it has been said, everyone has an opinion, and everyone has free will of speech :pinkiesmile:

Wow, that was pretty good. Please keep it up.

thanks, both for the compliment and for the comment which actually has something to do with my story xD

One line changed at the end. I didn't like how awkward it sounded, so it's been revised.

xD No prob, It's always a pleasure to support good authors.

Pinkie looked at Twilight funny. “I don’t know, Twilight… I have some pretty crazy dreams. Like this one where I was baking a batch of cupcakes, and-“

“No time!” Twilight cut her off.
thank god she cut pinkie off:twilightsmile:

yep. who knows where she would have gone? :scootangel:

you do know that Dinky is Ditzy's daughter right:twilightsmile:

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