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Sometimes I like to write things.


When Sweetie Belle stumbles into the Carousel Boutique injured in the middle of the night, it's up to Rarity and her group of friends to piece together just what has happened. As the night turns into day they will learn a lesson in both bravery as well as sacrifice.

Originally featured on Equestria Daily on December 15, 2011, this was my first shot at writing a piece of fanfiction and is now presented here with some grammar fixes and other tweaks.

Link to the original post on EQD: http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/12/story-things-that-go-south-in-night.html

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Comments ( 18 )

An EQD fic?

Dammit, I was going to save that spot in the featured box.

Does Applejack die???? YOU CA'NT LEAVE ME HANGING LIKE THAT!!:flutterrage:

I'd tell you, but I honestly don't know it myself.

Thanks to everyone for reading so far. Same goes for everyone who has favorited this and/or left a rating.

I'd love to hear feedback! If you liked it, I'd love to hear about it, of course, but if you didn't like it I'd be really happy to know what it was that you didn't like. Like any writer, I'm always looking to get better and critique is very valuable.

Thanks again to everyone, I'm off to bed now.


Oh god I remember reading this
Hit me right in the feels, man.
Great story.

I most definantly agree WHY DID YOU STOP THERE?!?!?!?:twilightangry2:

AHMIGOSH!!!!!!! the EE how can you do this to me! :raritycry: We need closure! :applecry: at least let us say good bye!!!!! :fluttercry:

As per usual Good work..... I will go to sleep with a heavy heart assuming the best pony >coughsAppleJack< has passed away putting a young life ahead of her own.......or has she? :rainbowhuh:

Disclamer: AppleDash is best ponies! :pinkiehappy:

as sad as the previous may have been, I think this was a better ending. I can believe that Fluttershy would go crazy in the event something hurt her friends, she was even being nice about it. :rainbowlaugh:

After watching her fuck up that bear... I believe it! (you know the massage after was just a coverup... Fluttershy KILLED that bear!)

:flutterrage: AWESOME!!!!

Flutters can Take a bear down:
Then lays the smack down on a dragon :flutterrage:

I think an unidentified Black poison lizard thingy aint gotta chance!

.....and don't you forget it mister!

Yeah, Fluttershy is the one who would have gone 'berserk button' over this, isn't she? I wonder what that thing is? Venomous lizards are damn rare (the Gila Monster is the only one I can remember off-hand) and this thing sounds more like a a cross between a snake and a dinosaur! It must be another thing created by all the magical fall-out from Luna and Celestia's little... discussion a millennia ago that also created the forest.

Don't cross Fluttershy, or she'll end you.

Read Blue's Duties. Fluttershy become an alicorn. :pinkiehappy:

I like this ending better.


If her ears go flat then you're really in trouble..........i'd say more fucked with no possiblity of parole.


I guess that after that, they won't go crusading again for a long, long time.

This is really sad. Amazing, but really sad.

So on the whole I very much enjoyed this. The opening was great a good bit of whiplash from funny to serious in an instant handled well. With the exception of Big Mac himself (little to talkative, not hugely so but just a hair) everyone else seemed spot on character. Rarity was just prissy enough to remind us she was her but not enough to be annoying. Twilight was her nerdy overly analytical rather self doubtful self. And apple jack was her strong stubborn self. But at the end of it all a few things struck me as strange.
Sweetie Bell is injured and the first person Rarity runs to is Twilight? I mean she's great and all but she's no doctor.
Another rather minor quip was Zecora's rhyming being kind of weak and forced.
And lastly AJ getting bit. Sure it added to the ending quite a bit but it seemed kind of forced. I think this is more the pacing as the vast majority of the story is finding out whats wrong and the last bit is a far to concise.

On the subject of the ending itself. Other than being a bit quick it was great. No body finishes stories where it's not all sunshine, rainbows and unicorn farts at the end. So to see an at least bitter sweet ending is great only because it is so uncommon. It takes a bit of guts in this community to write something without a picturesque story book ending and at the very least I appreciated it.

Anyway, I have subjected you to enough poorly edited ramblings. Thanks again and I look forward to more of your writings.

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