Fallout Equestria: Drawing a Blank

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Perky Ears

Perky Ears #1 · Dec 5th, 2021 · 1 · ·

“Come on now, we’ve been over this one boss, this damn injury of mine really screws with my ability to exert myself for long periods of time. So, unless you want to carry me on your back the rest of the way, I gotta stay where I am. Doctor’s orders!”

He’s lazy, can’t use his wings and claims that he can’t walk for a longer period of time. How the hell, did he get a job as caravan guard? Either he’s friend with the boss or the caravan hires the cheapest guards available. Or he’s that good with a gun that others are willing to put up with him.

He looked up at me with glazed-over eyes, tilting his head for a moment before shrugging and going back to looking ahead. I said his name was unfortunate, not inappropriate. He’s about as bright as a board alright

Okay yeah, this caravan is cutting costs by hiring the cheapest guards available regardless of competence.

“What are you, a foal? Constantly complaining and asking if we’re there yet. Just do yer job, ‘fore I fire ya.”

“Umm… hey Boss?”
“What is it now?”
“Can we stop? I need to pee.”

That’s something I, as a griffon, always found interesting.

Up until this point I assumed the MC was a Pegasus. Yes, the name Grant implied he was a Griffin but someone who hasn’t read the description doesn’t knows his name until the end of the chapter.

It seemed baffling for her as well, as she took in what sat before her for the first time in nearly a decade. I opened my beak to speak first, and she followed very shortly afterwards.
“Autem?!” “Grant?!”

It's a small world.

I, Sargent Autem Spring, place you under arrest for slavery, war crimes, and fleeing justice, you cowardly, winged cunt!

That escalated quickly. Looks like the MC has an interesting history.

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The first chapter does a good job at setting up the main character. Grant is kind of a lazy bum with a tendency to have his thoughts wander off. Good protagonist material with some flaws and room for character development.

The ending also makes the reader curious for more. What exactly did Grant do? Is it true what Autem claims or is there another side to this story?

So, while not much happened in this chapter, it’s not a bad start. Not sure in what the direction the story is going, but it defiantly got me curious.

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