My name is Silverstream. The sun hasn't come up for three days now. It's dark. And I am scared. The stars are gone, too. And the moon. I am alone. Alone in the darkness. I need to see if anyone is left. I gotta go. Wish me luck.
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Now I sleep on the sofa. There are curtains down here.
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What was wrong with the pantry?
11085168
Assuming that this is the same house, she said before that there were no shutters. Odd thing to mention if there were curtains that served just as well. Not that I'd think that they would; especially if the heart shone like the moon before it was even this close.
Yet I only see one comment on this page (not counting this one). I remember seeing at least some of the other 15, but apparently they were deleted. Weird.
Edit: And apparently adding a comment reset the counter; so now it says "51 - 100 of 52".
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Unfortunately, they got erased when I accidentally deleted one of Silverstream's messages. Deleting a chapter means all comments under that chapter get wiped, too, I had to find out. I will rewrite them to the best of my memory shortly before the story resumes updating.
11084631
Silverstream has neither an unlimited flashlight nor an unlimited phone battery and I wonder where you took that from. In the message you linked, she was saying that her flashlight works now and that she can record messages again. And in her previous message, Silverstream explained that her flashlight will go out once her phone's battery is down to 5%.
You should read these messages again and pay a bit more overall attention to what Silverstream is saying.
Fome's response
11084632
That's even worse then. If children use the age ratings, they can at least to some degree decide for themselves what they want to read, but if parents use them, it means they will dictate their children which stories they are "allowed" to read and which not. And many parents, as well as adults in general, are unfortunately very overprotective of children and underestimate what they can take.
It's true that parents, rather than children, use the age ratings, because children just read whatever they want no matter what their parents say, but this makes the problem of age ratings actually worse.
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Blood-stained floors and popped eyeballs have never been seen on the show but, like you said, flesh melting off bones has been, and the former two are pretty much on the same level of gore or graphical depiction as the latter is. Note how the rule only says "reasonable to see on the show itself" but not "was seen in the show like this". The flesh that was melting off "Sombra's" (actually Discord's clone who transformed into Sombra, not actually Sombra, but that's an explanation and analysis for a different day and place) bones raised the bar in regards to graphic depiction in My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic and, since the rule is worded like that, it means that bar has been raised for "Everyone" rated stories here on the site, as well. I would even argue that a bit of blood on the floor is less graphic than flesh melting off someone's bones, but since something like this was seen on the show, blood on the floor and popping eyeballs are definitely not above the level of gore seen in My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic anymore.
Additionally, the descriptions here in the story are vague, because Silverstream doesn't describe what she sees in full detail in her recordings. She doesn't mention how much blood exactly there is on the floor and popping eyeballs can look in a lot of different ways, ranging from very graphic with lots of blood and slime to being more cartoony, so everything Silverstream describes is very much open to personal interpretation and imagination.
It would maybe require a higher rating to be rule-conform if the descriptions of gore would be detailed, but as it is, with the vagueness of the descriptions and the show having depicted something very similar, it definitely is in line with this rule.
Fome's response
11084633
It seems you want to say that, because Silverstream mentioned only one street lamp, this must mean that there aren't any others, or, that Ponyville doesn't have street lamps that are placed in regular intervals. I'm also not sure why you are assuming this, if I understand your comment correctly. Just because Silverstream doesn't usually mention the street lamps of Ponyville, it doesn't mean that they aren't there. Street lamps are not a special sight, so they aren't comment-worthy for Silverstream, unless something unusual happens to them that she wants to make a remark about, like when one of them goes out. Otherwise, she just doesn't have a reason to talk about the street lamps.
Fome's response
11084845
Masturbate?
She was thinking about sleeping in there. It's fixed now.
Fome's response
11084870
The flashlight Silverstream uses is in her phone, it has a built-in flashlight. And her phone was not running on zero battery for days, the battery went out and Silverstream had to go a few days without it before she could find a way to charge it without entering a house again. She spoke about that in her messages Battery.mp3 and Goodbye, Flashlight.mp3 and these messages also implied that her flashlight is built into her phone.
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What is it that you find frustrating about the story?
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Ask away. But you should really read with more attention, you're missing a lot of things Silverstream says and a lot of subtext in her messages.
Fome's response
11084880
The wounds Silverstream talks about have been caused by herself, not the monster. She was trapped in this dark room for three days because the monster didn't go away and has hurt herself because of the stress and fear she felt.
Fome's response
11084886
The mysterious messenger is not at Silverstream's side. When she said "here", she meant that she is not alone in the world, after all.
11084890
Nowhere in particular. Silverstream is in mortal fear in this moment and expresses that. She is scared that the thing in the sky will kill her.
11084891
The thing in the sky looked like the moon, at first. Which is why Silverstream had to think of the moon and how it was shining through her windows when she fell asleep before it disappeared. But she knew that it can't be the moon, because it's gone. While she had her eyes closed, the "moon" transformed into a heart, hence why it was suddenly red when Silverstream opened her eyes again.
And how something that looks like the moon can smile? No one knows. Silverstream certainly doesn't. Nothing in her world makes sense or works by the same rules anymore. Sense has become redefined for her world.
11084895
Silverstream can't see your responses. You can merely read the transcribed recordings of hers after her phone has been found.
11084896
It's the same house where Silverstream saw the heart before she fell asleep and where she found the food in the oven. She thinks the house is safe because the food that seems to have been left for her there by her mysterious messenger makes her assume that the creature who sent her the message also stays in this house, in which case, it must mean that it is safe enough to stay there if somecreature else is using it.
Fome's response
11084898
Nothing was wrong with it for Silverstream, but she found a better place down in the living room.
Fome's response
11087569
Like I already said in my previous comment about this, the level of gore in "The Sky is Gone" is within the rules for an "Everyone" rating and, therefore, not mistagged, because My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic has shown the same level of gore in Season 9 and because the descriptions are so vague that everything is left open to the reader's imagination.
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I am not replying on any particular chapter, I just go to the front page of the story and write my responses there. Going to each individual chapter where you left a comment would take too much time, however, so I can't offer this. You should receive notifications when I reply to you regardless, however. If you don't get any, you are encountering a bug.
11087570
Silverstream's phone battery did not run out by any mysterious or unusual means, the battery simply became empty as phone batteries tend to do sooner or later. "Works" is just a way of saying that her flashlight is operational again after it previously wasn't due to its empty battery. The reason why she couldn't charge it was because Silverstream would have needed to go back into a house for that and she didn't dare to enter one of the houses again after what she experienced in one of them.
And, once again, I am not sure where you are taking it from that the flashlight in Silverstream's phone can run with zero battery, this hasn't been said or implied anywhere in the story. Silverstream's phone stops working once the battery runs out, just like all phones do, and even the wicked abomination her world has become does not change that. Her phone still works normal.
11087571
Canterlot has more lights than Ponyville has, yes, as Ponyville is a small country-side town. But Ponyville still has enough lights for one to comfortably find their way around at night. I don't know what else I should explain you. The street lamps in Ponyville are there, Silverstream just simply doesn't mention them all the time because she has no reason to, unless something special and unexpected happens in relation to them.
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Silverstream was talking about natural light. Not electricity. This should be pretty clear by the context of the description, as Silverstream said that right after mentioning that the sun, the stars and the moon are gone.
11087572
This is all part of this story's distinct style. Silverstream doesn't always go into detail about the things she sees and even if she describes something a little more, she still keeps her messages precise and short. This is mostly due to the fact that Silverstream often doesn't have the time to say much as she always has to be aware of her surroundings and any potential attacks or dangerous occurrences, but partly also because Silverstream simply wants to record her reactions on what she sees to tell her story, in case she doesn't survive, not write an analytical master thesis about the changes to her world. Brevity is the key for Silverstream, she has no need to record long messages and to describe what she sees in the smallest detail.
There might be messages where she talks more at some point, if she feels a strong need for conversation, but overall, Silverstream keeps her messages deliberately short for the most part because this suffices for her needs of letting others (if there are others) know what has happened to her and of ensuring that she will be remembered by someone.
It's a different kind of storytelling that won't be everyone's cup of tea, but that's the style of this story.
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I don't know what phone you are using, but smartphones nowadays usually have a flashlight built into them, making the need for a dedicated flashlight unnecessary. The description also outright establishes that a mobile phone is of significant importance for the story and the first time Silverstream specifically talks about her phone, she explains how her battery is running out and how she soon won't be able to use her flashlight anymore because of that:
The battery of my phone runs out.
10% battery left... Five less and then... goodbye, flashlight.
This is as clear as it gets. Note how these two messages follow right after each other, Silverstream is saying that the battery of her phone runs out and then, shortly after, proceeds with saying that she won't have a flashlight anymore once the battery loses five more percent.
It really can't be more clear than that and, if that still isn't clear enough to you, then I fear you should consider if the problem lies within your attention span and not the story.
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In the case of this story, it is. The description is Silverstream's first message that she has recorded. It doesn't need to mention a flashlight.
11087590
No, with "That's what they make you do.", Silverstream is saying "Three days in a dark room make you hurt yourself.". The order in which the days and her wounds are mentioned does not matter, "that" in this case refers to the act, or event, of Silverstream cutting wounds into her body because the fear made her go insane.
11087592
There was no light or running water in the room. The nearest street lamp, in this case, was too far away to send even a smidge of light into the room. It was pitchblack in there. Silverstream's phone stopped working because the battery ran out again, as it has happened once before already, in Ponyville. She knew how long she was in that room because she saw the date and time on her phone before it went out and then saw it again after she was able to leave the room and could charge her phone in a house.
11087605
The first house Silverstream entered in Canterlot was the one with the library, later she entered a high tower and slept in there. This high tower is the one she returned to after she was in the castle, to seek shelter there once more, only to find it changed, and where she got chased by that monster before she slid down the laundry chute and then entered the room she was trapped in for three days because the monster was in front of the door. After these three days, she could leave and found a new shelter in the house where food was left for her and where she saw the heart in the sky.
This is the order in which she entered the buildings.
11087615
It is still the same house, but the windows without shutters aren't in the same room as the curtains. Silverstream first slept up in the bedroom of the house, on the second floor, were there are neither shutters nor curtains to block the windows with. In the next night, Silverstream slept in the living room on the first floor because she discovered that the windows there have curtains. You see this by her mentioning a "sofa" and saying "down here" when she refers to the curtains.
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The comments are restored now, as best as I could. The answers to your questions should all be back in more or less the same way as I have given them to you the first time.