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A terrible new day rises when a tragedy, foreseen only by Celestia but preventable by none, occurs right in the middle of Canterlot, turning Twilight Sparkle's world upside-down. Now, all of Equestria is looking to her to hold the broken nation together, all while she tries to pick up the pieces of her shattered life.

Coverart used with permission from: metalpandora

Old coverart may be found here.

A/N: Yes, the title was based of the Dragonforce song of the same name, you may stop postulating about it now.


First Published
11th Sep 2012
Last Modified
27th Feb 2016
#2 · 235w, 22h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Hugs are always good in situations like this *hugs the author* Keep the story coming. *nudges* Maybe get rid of the sadness slowly but surely... I can't have feels all the time or I can't read good stories... I end up bawling like a filly. :fluttercry:

#3 · 235w, 22h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

You don't have to apologize for dialogue when it's good dialogue.  I believed every word of it.

#4 · 235w, 22h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

More more now more more more

#5 · 235w, 22h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Exquisite. And explains the lack of emotion and quickness behind Twilight's actions in the last chapter.

One change though - Twilight would call Shining "BBBFF" not "big brother".

#6 · 235w, 22h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

What do you mean "not tear-jerking"?! That ending hit me right in the feels!

#7 · 235w, 22h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

"Twilight, it's rather difficult to perform a Royal Ceremony when the guess of honor is in the hospital, is it not?" Luna replied, giggling out loud. "I was able to get the coronation postponed until you were at least conscious."

"Guess of honor", should be "guest of honor".

#8 · 235w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

:fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry: its beautiful!!!

also the begining of the chapter was hilarious:pinkiehappy:

#9 · 235w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1293447 Loved the new chapter, I absolutely lost it at the desk part at the begining.

I only have one question for you though: How the [Buy Some Apples] did you post a comment on this chapter 3 DAYS before it was released?

#10 · 235w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

While I do think it is a bit fast paced, I do enjoy this chapter. Dialogue is possibly my favorite thing about a story. You never get as much character insight as when one is talking. And you sir, have done a good job in doing that. It's almost as if everyone is wearing such a brittle mask right now and I feel you executed it brilliantly. You should not apologize for the dialogue at the start when it's this good is what I'm getting at. :pinkiehappy:

You are going to have me in tears regardless. :fluttershysad: Twi's parents got to me especially. Remind me so much of my own. Watching!

#11 · 235w, 21h ago · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·

  "A couple Houses even tried to bring a few gryphon mercenaries in."  He paused, shaking his dead in frustration. "You've got your work cut out for you, little sis."

Shining Armor, Shame on you! You put those corpses down RIGHT NOW and shake your head like a normal pony! @_@ Freakin' psycho D:

#12 · 235w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

DANG IT I need more!!!

#13 · 235w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

All hail Twilight Sparkle the new ruler of the Sun.

Rest in peace Princess Celestia:fluttershyouch:. The world is a little darker without you.:fluttershbad:

#14 · 235w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1311240 Probably was already made just waiting approveal? Editing? the post time?

#15 · 235w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Not a tear jerker, eh? False. I threw up Cry For Eternity and I had tears going on and off throughout the chapter. Especially that ending. Right in the feels indeed. >>1311145

#16 · 235w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1311098

It'll go away slowly, but it'll come back. Trust me.

>>1311171

My bad.

>>1311240

I can comment on it as I'm writing, as can anyone who I give access to.

>>1311313

But its so fun!

#17 · 235w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I literally just started reading the new chapter of On Wings Of Change when this updated.

#18 · 235w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1311313 OMG that's hilarious i didn't even see that

#19 · 235w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

For some reason, the opening brought to mind the end of "2001 A Pony Oddessy" :twilightsmile:

#20 · 235w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

can't really say much other than; great chapter.

#21 · 235w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1311452

Madness is my forte:pinkiecrazy:

>>1311458

Coming from you, that means a lot.

#24 · 235w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1311313 I think my dad thinks I'm insane now thanks to you! :rainbowlaugh: I'm supposed to be sleeping and he doesn't know I'm on my laptop. Wouldn't you think your daughter is insane if she started laughing for no reason?

#26 · 235w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1311479

Yeah, I'm decently good at reading people through the net. Don't ask me exactly now, but you've managed to earn my respect.

>>1311505

:ajbemused:For shame.

#27 · 235w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I have to say I really enjoyed the opening bit and Twilight's personal thoughts as she's going through the change. I'd also like to state that yes, this isn't really a tear jerker but I'd say that ending still had a sweet sad vib to it.

#28 · 235w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Love it, keep going :scootangel:

#30 · 235w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Please keep going this is turning out very nicely:rainbowkiss:

#31 · 235w, 20h ago · · 1 · Chapter 2 ·

>>1311544

Okay, I have to say I love this fic so far. I mean, I think it's Grade-A material. But the "Romance" tag worries me. :ajbemused:

This fic has so far managed to be original and surprising for me, but if this turns into a TwiLuna shipfic, or any form of lesbian shipfic, I will be sorely disappointed. I expect great things from this story, and I encourage you to ship the OC you have tagged with Twilight, if only to avoid the abhorrently cliche'd Twi(Princess or Mane 6) shipping pairs. I'm sure a talented writer like you can manage that.:twilightsheepish:

#32 · 235w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1311544

Would insomnia be a good excuse at this point? :scootangel:

#33 · 235w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1311541 This.

Great chapter! At first I though Twilight had literally transformed into Celestia, like her body and voice. I'm glad you didn't do that :twilightsheepish:

Looking forward to more! :twilightsmile:

#34 · 235w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Well done.  Good "feeling" chapter and nice to see Armor make an appearance.   I didn't spot any overt grammatical errors and the reading was smooth as well.  When Twi was going through her deals with the sun while being out of it, perhaps some italics would have had added more of a mystical feel, but just a thought.  Again, well done. :coolphoto:

#35 · 235w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1311505 :I Madness. Panic. Disorder. Insanity. ....My work is complete.

... Now Shiny needs to go sweep up his corpses, and then you need to learn to make quiet titters, you crazy little thing you. :P

#36 · 235w, 19h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

You'd lost me at the prologue, and for the life of me, I couldn't figure out why a story that I felt was uninspired and boring was featured as long as it was.

I am so, so glad I decided to give this a second chance today. You surprised me with the direction you took. You hooked me with the characterization and writing. I am keeping an eye on this, now.

I have no criticism to offer, constructive or otherwise. I only wanted to say, "Bravo."

#37 · 235w, 19h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Very impressive! Though it just about killed me waiting for the new chapter, for quality of this sort, it was well worth waiting for.

Now I must prepare myself for another wait, for as much as I desire to read more, one cannot rush excellence.

One must anticipate it, and savor it when it finally comes.

#38 · 235w, 19h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Yet another beautifully written chapter, i can't thank  you enough for writing it :heart:

#39 · 235w, 19h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1311699

I disagree, but I won't argue because an argument would just be poorly masked statements of preference.  I'll just leave it at "I like f/f shipping, you like m/f."

#40 · 235w, 19h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1311644

Yeah, it took 1000 years. that's dropping dead if you ask me. :ajbemused:

/Sarcasm

#41 · 235w, 19h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1311969

I'm so, so glad I was able to surprise you then:pinkiehappy:. If you feel like I start taking it in an undesirable direction, feel free to speak up. I may not reply to every comment, but I make an effort to read them all. I will, however, admit that releasing just the prologue to start off was a horrid idea.

>>1311990

Maybe just to be a jerk I'll wait until this leaves the featured box again, then release the next chapter to see if I can go for 3 :rainbowwild:

#42 · 235w, 19h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1312072

Only response is! ... Lolz!:rainbowlaugh:

#43 · 235w, 18h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I love this. I cant want for the next chapter. A few things though. You said no crying. But there where feelings, ad a manly tear may have started. Bad writer for the lie! Second thing... please please please pleaseplease dont kill Luna

#44 · 235w, 18h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1312093

You, good Sir, are more evil than a MLP:FiM/Power Rangers crossover set in the Smurf's universe!

If you do that... I want something that would do Tolstoy or Checkovsky stand up in ovation.

I want something that I can enjoy sitting down to read while enjoying a couple of slices of rich, black bread with real butter, and a small glass of fine Stolichnaya with a warm glow from the fireplace keeping me warm...

Ok, maybe I am asking a bit much... maybe...

#45 · 235w, 18h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Wait just a second. Um a Princess just died and the house has dissolved into chaos. Am I the only one thinking a release for Discord is in order?

#46 · 235w, 18h ago · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·

I'm sorry, but I find the though of the sun being an anthropomorphic entity that's suspicious of Twilight hilarious.

#48 · 235w, 15h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

She was the sun, but it felt like the sun had been wrapped around her like a blanket. It had been wrapped around her and it loved her. Warm and protective, it loved her like a mother loved her foal. And it missed her. It loved her and it was going away for a long time. It was sad that it was leaving and it was going to miss her. But it loved her and was happy to see her all the same.

Goodbye, old sun! I'll do my best to fill in for you!

I have to wonder if she's going to get around to analyzing that. That section actually hit me harder than the rest of the story purely for how innocent/naive (oblivious?) that parting was.

#49 · 235w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

but was snatched into the air by a gentile blue glow

#50 · 235w, 11h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>1311699

This fic has so far managed to be original and surprising for me, but if this turns into a TwiLuna shipfic, or any form of lesbian shipfic, I will be sorely disappointed.

My thoughts exactly.

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