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Lulamoon Crystal


Hello! I’d love to have comments on my story, I appreciate them! It shows me support and keeps me motivated. We are welcome to be friends too, and if you follow me then I’ll follow you back!

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An accident Starlight and Twilight’s newest magic spell causes the CMC and Trixie to be in an unknown place and time. They must find there way in this seemingly new land and hopefully find the way to their time.


Strange choice of characters but... this was kinda made to make myself feel better since these are my favourite characters and I don’t want them dead...

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 29 )

Zipp, Pipp and Izzy nodded in agreement, Pipp was not wanting to do it but knew she had to. There were four ponies and that meant they all had to carry one each. Pipp carried Applebloom on her back hoping she wouldn’t do anything to her wings or mane, Zipp carried Scootaloo, Izzy carried Sweetie Belle and Sunny carried Trixe. They all walked as fast as they could to Sunny’s home.

Trixie

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Oh no :pinkiegasp: she lost her ‘i’! What will she do without it?

Hehe:pinkiehappy:

Jokes aside, thanks for pointing it out

Very nice, following this story!

My prayer has been answered.

I was looking for more of generation crossover between 4 and 5.

this was kinda made to make myself feel better since these are my favourite characters and I don’t want them dead...

If it makes you feel better, it's doubtful they died horrifically. This is My Little Pony after all.

Ok very interesting start of a story it's a little fast paced here but pretty potential so it looks like the cmc and Trixie accidentally Zapped into the future of the new generation and izzy found them and got her friends to help them out and I wonder how Trixie and cmc got them self back to the past I guess we'll find out next time

A little too fast but decent. Perhaps slow down a little to allow the readers to digest the situation and this'll be perfect.

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Hehe... I had the same series in mind when I made the title

I'm already liking this story and looking forward to more. :)

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You're very welcome.

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I hope this newest one is not as rushed

Well then that was a interesting situation and seeing Trixie basically getting drunk and basically making a fool of herself but something tells me she still got some explaining to do about where did the Cutie Mark Crusaders and tricks they came from well I guess we'll find out next time

That was a really funny chapter.

Halarious chapter but I have to ask when will sunny make the connection the sweetie bell and apple bloom are related to the rarity and applejack

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When they start talking about Twilight and Ponyville and etc.

Okay, two things I cannot leave without mentioning:
1. Try to add punctuation at the end of every dialogue... thing, like this:

“And kinda funny,” Scootaloo chuckled.

2. Whenever a dialogue thing ends and immediately moves to the next paragraph, you don't need to put a period on the end outside of the quotation marks, like this:

“Trixie feels like she’s having a hangover...”.

instead, use

“Trixie feels like she’s having a hangover...”

But overall, I still very much enjoyed this chapter, and can't wait to see more!

Why didn't you respond to my comment?

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You mean this one?

If it makes you feel better, it's doubtful they died horrifically. This is My Little Pony after all.

It’s because I didn’t feel the need to respond to it

interesting premise. have a track.

“A serious chat?” Asked Izzy, “Why? They’re just foals”.

Izzy, what are you thinking about? :rainbowlaugh:

Oh no, our precious cinnamon roll isn't so innocent after all! :raritydespair:

I love this series so far can't wait for the next part! 👍

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