Sunset Shimmer is on the cusp of a new life, starting high school and starting life on her own. But an unexpected visitor makes things interesting. A visitor who may not be completely real. A visitor who may be becoming all too real.
Written for Sunset Shimmer x Sunset Shimmer Contest.
Gold-medalist in WriteOff FIM Short Story event "Counterfeit".
Content warning for negative thoughts and mild tactile descriptions.
Use of the Romance tag may be generous.
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This was creepy as all hell, well done
Damn, Sunny and Shimmy are the two nicknames in my entry too!
Alt Sunset is a psycho in this fic!
(Thanks for submitting to the contest!)
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I'm not sure I understand your meaning but I appieciate your enthusiastic response!
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I meant i felt as if she was a little crazy ex girlfriend energy to me. Psycho was not the proper term…
….not sure why I used/typed that word instead of typing my explanation.
Anypony can rely on the kindness of strangers. It takes a special kind to exploit it.
Of course, going by the AU tag, Sunny could really have emerged ex nihilo, which adds a whole other layer of horror. After all, who's to say this won't happen again to some other unfortunate soul?
I can definitely see the Ito influence. Slow transformation and consumption warping the familiar into a horrifying, twisted parody of itself. I can almost imagine the penstrokes on the final scene. I'm sure there's a spiral in there somewhere.
Thank you for a haunting piece. I'm sorry I didn't get around to it earlier.
This is incredibly disturbing...very well done!
so i understand what you were going for, but i found myself unable to inhabit the perspective of the main character here. i'm guessing she's supposed to be Sunset in a human universe AU with no other reference to MLP/EqG besides the names, because that's what this feels like, but then there is little to make me feel like it's Sunset rather than a generic OC, and less to make me feel like the character is a 14-year-old girl.
it does work well taken scene-by-scene. the visceralness and unease are well-done. it just feels unmoored from what little there is of the established character, and thus unearned.
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Given the chosen constraints -- Human!Sunsst, pre-highschool/-mirror -- what do you see that could I have done better to moor this character to any pillar of canon?