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SonicBlitz18


A rocking brony with a love for crossover and adventure. Currently part time in college

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Will u make a clop of spike and barb?

Glad to see this uploaded. Was really happy to help work on this, especially the start of the story.

  1. Spike smiled as he looked at the drink in the glass. He wondered what it was and why he needed it for tonight. Setting the letter down, he took the glass off the table and took a sip. To Spike's surprise it was milk, but the milk he was drinking tasted very different. He tasea mix of different flavors. Strawberry, Mint, Cinnamon and a hint of lime. He savored every last drop he consumed that Rarity made for him and gulped it down slowly, enjoying the mixture of flavors in his mouth. A couple minutes later the glass was empty and he sighed contentedly as he drank the last of it.

    Typo here. Did you mean "tasted a mix"?

  2. ‘What an interesting development,’ Nightmare Moon thought with a smirk as she watched Rarity be played with and teased by Spike. ‘Perhaps I can make it .... interesting.’ WIth that thought, she sauntered over to Spike, and slowly pressed herself against him, resting her hands on his shoulders as she did so and began to lightly massage him, cooing into his ear.

    I think you left the bold text on, because it's bold from this paragraph onwards.

  3. “Hehe, right,” he added as he got up from the bed. Spike would soon leave the girls alone to get some rest after the events that happened last night. But unknown to Spike as well as the three darker mares, there was life slowly blooming inside of them.

    Sounds like a sequel!

This story turned out great!! I'm so happy to have helped with this story

“You fucking beast,” Moon moaned as she turned to him. “You better fill me with all you have if you’re this rough with him.

Huh?

loved it, but i do i have one question and forgive my ignorance if the answer to my question should be obvious but who is Mesosoma

Comment posted by JackApple4321 deleted Oct 31st, 2021

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Oh yeah
She hasn't been used very much

Glad someone acknowledges her
And hopefully Queen Umbra and Gleaming Shield

Best one yet I reckon

Wonder if we will see some squeals or if this was just a one time fic.

Hey, congrats for the third place!

I liked this, but it needs some polish. Some of the scenes looped in on themselves and some of the dialogue is repetitive. Aside from that I had a good time reading this.

“Hehe, right,” he added as he got up from the bed. Spike would soon leave the girls alone to get some rest after the events that happened last night. But unknown to Spike as well as the three darker mares, there was life slowly blooming inside of them.

Yesssss breed these mares! Like the sex deprived villains they are!







And start a wonderful shenanigan filled life as a father and a family! :pinkiehappy:

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Yes!! So glad I'm not the only one to pick up on that last line....I would love to a second chapter, or at least a short epilogue...Also I would love to Flurry Heart again, especially after knowing her favorite Uncle has produced new nieces and nephews that Flurry could be a bit of a older sister to the future cousins...

I know this is random to ask? But, what ever happened to the Shadow Pony? And considering of what that idiot Starswirl did. I want to know what exactly happened to him in the aftermath? Did he feel remorse for what he did to poor Spike?

And I'm also guessing that the other Pillars will now despise him for what he did to poor Spike too ( And probably blame him for being the reason for Stygain to being manipulated by the Shadow Pony too. )

“Pffft, yeah, the lame space sci-fi one. Glad this family only sticks to the more masculine olde fantasy version,” Shining said, trying to undo his wedgie from his tight leggings.

... Care to repeat that? *draws 40k chainsword*

great story

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