Scientia. the Goddess of Technology, and Silvanus, the God of Nature, have been sworn enemies since the dawn of time. As a result of their animosity towards eachother their demigod children have been waging war on eachother since prehistoric times.
Gerhardt Scientia Mechanica and Pixel Scientia Mechanica are Scientia's youngest children. And like all of her children they are both highly skilled technomancers. After their father died trying to buy them time to run away during an assassination attempt on them by Silvanus's children they are now living with their oldest living half brother, Alexander Scientia Calculo, in the Church of Science and Technology. However the war between their family and Slivanus's family continues to rage on.
One day, they and their older brother come under attack by Viridios, the oldest living child of Silvanus. Of course their older brother tries to defend them. However during Alexander and Viridios's battle Viridios ends up breaking an experimental teleportation device that Alexander had been working on and the device explodes. After that all four of them along with the entire building they are in are spontaneously sent to Equestria. However, their bodies appear to have undergone a drastic and unexpected change.
No matter the universe as long as at least one member of both of their families continues to exist the war between their families shall never end. However Viridios is not the only challenge they must face. For they are immortal and in a land like Equestria where friendship is so highly valued, should they gain friends they place themselves at risk of eventually falling victim to the condition known as "Accidia Immortalium". A mental condition that immortals will all eventually fall prey to after outliving enough of their former mortal friends and loved ones.
Thus they must avoid getting too close to anyone while adapting to their new forms and preparing for their next encounter with Viridios.
(Since this story seems to be almost as disliked as it is liked, I've written one final variation of this story. You can find it here. I'm only continuing one of them. So which one would you guys prefer I continue. You can vote: Here.)
You turned them into ponies, damn. cdn.shopify.com/s/files/1/0583/5341/8448/products/sadPepe_digital_art_x4_8ae327af-c647-4b1d-aa50-20572ab14e13.png?v=1625845340
Good story so far, nice change of tone.
May I ask at what point in the timeline this story takes place?
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Yeah. Sorry. Just thought I'd go for the more cannon Equestria Girls rules in this one.
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Season 2. Before the Hearth’s Warming episode but after Luna Eclipsed. I might have put it even earlier but I am terrible at writing Early Modern English so I wouldn't have been able to write Luna’s dialog correctly. Right now I'm making the excuse that she's learned enough modern language to hold a conversation in Modern English and only occasionally slips back into the Early Modern English at times of high emotion. When she's particularly upset or if she's laughing at something particularly amusing, for example.
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Ok so I normally dislike stories where humans turn into ponies but there are exceptions. And after giving this story a chance I can safely say I like it so far and I think you should continue this story instead of the one where Alexander dies. But we shall see if this story goes from 1 to 100 in an instant then I might have a different opinion. i.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/newsfeed/001/788/251/14a.jpg
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Oh, cool! Thank you very much for giving it a chance! I'm glad you like it so far.
I understand the viewpoint. But the flipside is. Mortals become immortalized in the memory of immortals. Form attachments. Do not fear death. Keep in mind that all life matters, even though it is fleeting. As an immortal you will have the potential for far greater and far reaching effects. Societies will be built around you because you are immortal. So offer protection and guidance to those who flock to you. Humans are pack animals. We will pack bond with anything. Immortal apathy as you called sounds like it's born from a rather toxic outlook on life and the relationship one has with their pet. Pets are members of the family. Not simply posetions. I object to Alexander's viewpoint in regards to interaction with mortals. Apathy is born from separation and isolation. What he is doing is quite possibly making it worse.
That witch is broken, can be mended by love only.
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With that being out of the way... First off, welcome back. Delicious friend.
Now to critique... Honestly... this time my prime gripe seems to be the fact that Gears and Co are demigods from the get-go. And of course they are magnitudes above the power level of princesses. The abovementioned age quote is also what puts me off... I mean, how old Gears was in the other fic, 800 or something?.. Here, the elder brother is around 93000 years old. How old are G and P in this case?
Yet to see if they'd evolve into an NGO superpower. Again.
And... with all due respect, but... yeah sure, two alicorns with "atrophied" magic will protect three alicorns, one of which is blind, from another alicorn... but every one of them is magnitudes above the princesses in power. Excuse me, who's protecting who again?..
Honestly, unlike the previous Gearhardt story, I can't say I'm entised by this opening.
I think you repeated a part of the chapter at around the halfway point.
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Oh god that's embarrassing. I must have hit Ctrl V twice by mistake. I'm so sorry. I fixed it.
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Well they are going to become as powerful as Gerhardt, Pixel, or Alexander if not more so later on. I mainly do the atrophied magic thing because Celestia got beaten by Chrysalis, a mortal, in the Canterlot Wedding episode. A demigod wouldn't be beaten by a mortal thus there has to be an excuse to make them more powerful. "Magical fitness" is that excuse. And I mean, it's not the worst possible excuse I could have come up with.
And "protecting" them isn't quite the point. At least, not at first. Viridios doesn't have sensors like Pixel and thus has no way of knowing how powerful the princesses are. As such, logically speaking he would act with caution and would refrain from attacking until he had a better gauge of their power and could come up with a plan to fight two of them at once giving the princesses more time to work on their magical fitness and become more powerful. Of course he won't attack until his wounds are fully healed anyways which will take at least a month or so, meaning they have a bit of time anyways.
As for being demigods to begin with, I just thought it would be a somewhat fun idea just to explore the gods and such a bit more than if Gerhardt and Pixel were mortals. I had another version of the story in mind where Gerhardt was a washed up, paranoid, old technomancer living in the slums and working for a gang and desperate for companionship but too afraid of betrayal to let anyone get close to him thus driving him to build his own daughter. In that version they would have both been mortals.
And yeah I realize ninety three thousand years is a ludicrously long time. But in a world full of demigods I can't imagine that a few demigods and such wouldn't be at least that old. Gerhardt and Pixel are only children. Like they are technically only four years old according to the day they were "born" but are mentally and physically eight years old. So they are both significantly younger than the princesses.
No, I won't be repeating the same mistakes I made in the original story. Their technology is significantly less advanced in this one. There will be no WMDs, no orbital cannons, nor anything of the sort. Yes, technically they could build nukes but I'm not going to have them do so. They aren't even particularly powerful demigods whereas Celestia and Luna will both be extremely powerful. So their advantages will be slim.
Also, no spoilers, but the "Death" tag is there for a reason and no, it's not Celestia or Luna's heads on the chopping block.
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Ah, see, in the year 2021, the human civilization as we know it is around 6,000 years old. That leaves us with 194,000 years of technical progress... and yet, the mankind technology is not as advanced as in previous fic.
Are those sublight ships Pix mentioned utilise suspended animation or are they generation ships?
Or, another fun little comparison. The God-Emperor of Mankind is around 50,000 years old. Continuing this line of thought, you've basically threw the rough equivalent of GEOM and Primarchs into a medieval world.
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Unless you believe in Christianity, Humanity is like 300,000 years of old IRL though it was previously believed that we were 200,000 years old. So they actually aren't more advanced than us. They are on exactly the same technological scale. Except their technology involves magic so they can build things equivalent to the hypothetical and completely non-functional EM drive via telekinesis. And they have lasers and cybernetics. Those are the only major differences. The humanity in the previous story was like one or two hundred thousand years more advanced than we are currently, so yeah they were significantly more advanced than the Humanity in this story.
The sub-light ships Pixel mentioned can only travel to near by solar systems in any "reasonable" period of time. Like they can only travel there if it is between 4 to 10 light years away and it would take 4 to 10 years for them to arrive. So I imagine it's a mix between having crucial crew members awake and having non-essential crew members in some form of suspended animation.
And they might be powerful but they aren't on the same level as the God Emperor of Mankind or the Primarchs. Rather they would only be on the level of very powerful psykers. They can't effect things on a Galactic scale like Emperor or Magnus could by causing Warpstorms. And they aren't nearly as powerful as Merlin was so they aren't even planetary level. Age =/= power. Celestia and Luna will actually be very close to as powerful as Merlin meaning they will be significantly more powerful than Alexander or the Twins despite being significantly younger than Alexander.
So if anything, MLP has the edge this time.
Source for how old Humanity truly is.
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The humans, as a species, are around 200,000 years old, that is true.
However,
Human civilization as we know it, with permanent settlements, agriculture, science, engineering and all that began only around 4-3,000 B.C. 10,000 B.C. if you consider agricultural revolution and ending of nomadic hunting-gathering communes as the beginning of civilization. Large-scale industrialisation began around 1800s A.D. M, that's a lot technologyless milenia for a technology-focused demigod.
Now, Alexandr 'only gained augmentations when he was already several thousand years old when augmentations were first invented and reached a point they were at least equivalent in capabilities as their natural counterparts'. 'Several' is usually considered to be anywhere inbetween 3 and 20... And I sincerely doubt there were any augmentations around 60,000 B.C...
Also this bit from chapter 1 is a bit awkward:
I feel like 'however' is not needed here.
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Yeah, I thought I should re-word that but I didn't because I didn't think it mattered that much... Alright, I’ll go back and fix that so it says, "many thousands of years" or "tens of thousands of years" or something to that effect. And thank you for pointing out that mistake. "However" was indeed completely unnecessary for that sentence.
Anyway, he didn't receive augmentations until around the modern day. So like the past four or five decades. He was born in a tribe in the stone age a very long time prior to any official civilization. So yeah their technology is roughly as advanced as real world technology except with magic incorporated into it.
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First, that made me think about 'Cavemen science fiction' minicomics.
Second... like, the more I think about it the worse my headsche becomes, what was the demigod of technology doing in a world without technology?.. For, like, 80,000 years? Ugh ><
Also, the same question I asked in the previous fic, though this one is more... mechanics-related than lore-related. What magic can not do?
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Technology very much did exist. All tools and things created by people is technology. A wrench is technology, a spear is technology, a bow and arrow is technology, a bowl is technology, a cup is technology, a table is technology, a tent is technology. You get the idea. And Scientia existed since before the beginning of the universe so she was around at that time anyways. I don’t know how many times I'm going to have to say this but gods ARE NOT the same as spirits they DO NOT rely on the concept they manage in order to exist otherwise they wouldn't be gods.
And what can't magic do? A normal mage can't open a portal across to the other side of the planet because the distance is too far, magic technology can with a large enough battery. A normal mage can't split atoms and cause a nuclear explosion, technology in general can even if it's just normal technology. That sort of thing.
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It's just that I have extreme difficlty believing that a goddess of technology would take interest in someone from primitive tribal community. I just... UHG. I don't understand this I don't understand how it even works. I mean, back in those simpler days, the people believed in gods of sea, earth, thunder, hunt, etc... okay there wer divines of knowledge but to my knowledge they popped up later... Okay, Imma leave this topic, because at this point it feels like I'm nitpicking, and I still feel like it were my comments that drove you off writing the previous story and I don't want this to happen again.
This is exactly what I'm talking about. The fun part of worldbuilding. Define limits of magic and technology, and then see how one can circumvent them by clever fusing of the two. And even then, there should be some limits, because if magic/tech/magitech can do literally anything it's just boring.
hey are you still writing this story?
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Yeah. Sorry it's taking so long. Like my blog says, I've been trying to focus on wine school and getting a job. That being said, I'll try to get the next chapter out within the next week.
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Previous story? What previous story?
Wouldn't it make more sense to make Silvanus a god of magic, then?
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My previous story was "The Mechanical Technomancer in Equestria: Technology is Magic." It's still up on my profile if you want to read it, and it's decently long, albeit forever unfinished.
And no. Magic is just an extension of the laws of physics of the universe it is in, it does not violate the laws of physics otherwise everyone would effectively be gods which obviously isn't the case. Thus, it is not anathema to science or technology. In fact, the entire point of the story is Technomancy, which is the combination of magic and technology. However, nature and technology are diametrically opposed even in real life. Thus, it makes sense to have them as opposites in a story about technomancy.
Also there is another god who is the god of magic and its not Silvanus.