Been a few years, as it seems my interest is staying for now, I'll stick around. I've been writing for almost ten years now, with a specialty in Adventure/thriller.
Godking Veretus, The lord of the Planes, Jailer of the Abyssal Sea, Overgod of Alvaris, Half-champion, God of Might, Dragons, and Vindication, is not amused at his current predicament. Sent to an alternate sphere by a band of upstart adventures, and stripped of much of his true powers, must now contend with... Cuddly... ponies?
He is not amused at this at all, nor is he entertained at this Sphere's attempts to get rid of him.
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I hope you continue this it was very interesting and pretty good so far can't wait for the next chapter 👍
Keep up the good work!
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This story is a side project to my other story, Inquisition. This story will absolutely get more updates, but will have less of my focus, despite its greater popularity since this is just a relaxation project to help deal with writers block.
This does also mean this story will be easier to write, and will most likely have more frequent updates since i'm just flinging plothooks at the wall and seeing what flanks I get.
seems good so far
Even if this is a side project I still like it and would love to see my ore chapters
Wait is 'Veretus' from D&D lore or is he an OC?
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Veretus is from my setting book, Remnants of Alvaris, which I am releasing sometime around December.
So he is an OC, as per the OC tag on the story.
I'm enjoying this quite well keep up the great work 👍
Keep making chapters for this fic it's really good so far I like it👍
wtf ?
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I don't quite understand the confusion here. While this chapter and the next were the two chapters I didn't extensively proofread, which means ill have to eventually go back and edit them, this sentence makes sense when reading from the end of the previous paragraph.
If it's about the perfect 6 feet tall... Well that'll be explained later. If im not misremembering and already explained it off hand in some later chapter. Besides, it's high fantasy.
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Could you please tell me when that happens?
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I will be announcing it both as a blog, and as an author's note on this story.
Really enjoying this story, as it seems to go against a few things other stories tend to do that annoys me a little bit.
I have seen a few stories that had Celestia somehow knew the others would be elements as well and basically set them up to help prepare for the celebration, in order to unite Twilight with them. Basically, manipulating her behind the scenes to befriend them in order to take on the mantle as Equestria's heroes. It's nice to see a story decide not to have Celestia be seemingly omniscient and not able to expect and plan everything out.
After reading many fics where Celestia is portrayed as seemingly perfect or is capable of trolling the main character, and always getting her way, while giving the aura of complete benevolence. It's nice to read one where the main character is so powerful and doesn't need or even care for her help and is able to get on her nerves just by being himself.
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thanks for the comment on that, Firstly, Reading your comment, I saw several errors, two of which are capitalization, and one which is punctuation, which is what I get for writing a chapter in 30 minutes and only proofreading it once.
while I'm correcting errors,
Double negative here, but I understood your meaning. And on that topic, Veretus, our story's titular main character, isn't omniscient, not even when he was in Alvaris, So it would make no sense to have Celestia have that kind of foresight as our minor antagonist. Plus, Celestia was once the element of Kindness, magic, and Generosity, it doesn't sound kind or generous to manipulate six ponies, let alone that she had lost the elements because she had failed to uphold them herself and probably would have seriously reinforced those values in her life.
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Understood and mistake corrected. I'm glad here you are actually showing Celestia and even Veretus are just as fallible as anyone else and despite their long lives and power they have made and are capable of mistakes.
Hey love this story❤️your doing really good can't wait for the next chapter keep up the great work 👍
Interesting so far
There are metallic dragons all of which are considered to be of one good alignment or another, chromatic dragons all considered to be of an evil alignment and finally gem dragons which are all neutral and also come with pisonic abilities. Those are all the dnd dragons I know about and I know your character has his own worlds that are probably different to the forgotten realms so are there metallic dragons and chromatic dragons or is there only one kind or what?
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There's a lot more true dragons than metallic, chromatic, and gem in d&d lore. Like shadow, battle, and astral. But Alvaris has both metallic and chromatic. Neither of which are specifically evil or good anymore since Veretus is the only dragon god left. And his alignment is Lawful Good.
And thank you. Im not much of a slice of life writer and it shows.
Uh, Rainbow?
Why is that a strike against him?
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Sorry for the late reply, been unusually busy, but tell me that if you just saw your magical McGuffin, which so far has worked twice in the past, fail to work now, that you would not be panicking. Plus, Divinity, and its emotion-altering aspects are eerily close to mind control, which would unnerve the best of us.
People, in this case, ponies, say or do stupid stuff when they panic.
Man this story is getting good I can't wait for the next chapter I wonder what will happen when godking gets truly angry I'm just waiting for it
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Quite enjoyable to see somepony is enjoying the first book. I'll probably take about a few days after the Selfish Love arc to read through and correct punctuation and capitalization mistakes.
Nice
About Godkings time they get to the roots!
CAN YOU BELIEVE~
Good to see this updated love it so far can't wait to see more
DUN DUN DUUUUUNNNN
The story is interesting because the MC isn't a Gary Stu or a angsty endgelord.
His backstory is interesting and his personality is not obnoxious like 90% of all the hie stories.
Yay happy ending for da buggies!
Interesting story, can’t wait to see more. Tis also been awhile since I’ve read an E rated story. Usually do T or M. Anyways keep up the good work!
Sorry it has not been going well recently
Just want you to know that i loved the chapter and loved the Spike love too, little guy deserves it
And yeah ... WOTC/Hasbro really fucked up, its kind of impressive. They managed to loose all the good will and reputation in an instant.
That said, in the end we did win our unrevokable OGL1.0a and even if they tried that again (which is now DEFINETLY illegal) Paizo MVP ant their ORC licence is gonna be there for us
TLDR: love your work, stay strong, stay creative , see you next time
If there is anything that Japan should be condemned for its adding crap like this to modern writing. This Samurai BS harms stories with crap like this.
It's like a virus. It does nothing to improve a character, it does nothing to strengthen the plot. It's Samurai BS or as it's known it the west. Dick measuring. "I'm so pious, if I'm not then I will sit here and you can kill me."
To quote Ernest Hemingway, "If you can remove it and it has no effect on the story or the plot, then it has no value."
Monk
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It seems you misunderstood the scene. This has nothing to do with honor or any influence from hollywood samurai bs.
Veretus truly believes he should be struck down, he hates himself. There are many reasons he doesn't kill himself, mainly his inability to, as well as his beliefs.
As well as the fact that this was very much some dirty manipulation. The godking, despite being good, is not a saint. He wouldn't die, as he's said multiple times throughout the story attesting to his true immortality.
However, he truly hoped it would kill him.
Regardless, it was a quick and dirty way to het someone to stop hating you, and start being worried about your mental state instead.
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Thanks for the words. Its just a matter that WOTC has been steadily losing my respect and capital for 5e since 2018. The GL was just the final nail.
In truth, I had 3 ideas for the recent chapter For spike, each had their difficulties, then this way popped up. he never really got any love and development until the later seasons.
I think my solution brings Spike a lot closer to his final episode mentality. While still having him keep his childlike behavior of the early seasons.
Ah Sunbutt, never change.