The Crystal Princess
Sunny lowered her hoof once she saw the light die down in her peripheral vision. She was still standing in the large chamber, and the Crystal Heart was now glowing dimly. The ambience was quite different, though; the room had a foggy, almost ghostly appearance now, and there, laying next to the Crystal Heart was...
...A pony?
"Hello? Are you alright...?" She asked.
Izzy stood several paces behind Sunny just inside the doorway, unsure of what to do as she slowly took several steps into the room towards her. Her friend had touched the stone on the ground, and it exploded out in a flash of light. The instant afterward, a glowing horn and wings materialized on Sunny's body, and yet she stood still, her eyes glowing a fiery white.
"Uh, Sunny? You okay?" The unicorn asked her friend, who simply stood there, looking down at the heart. Then, the earth mare looked to her left, looking at... Nothing.
"Hello? Are you alright...?" Sunny asked.
"I'm fine, Sunny. Hello? Sunny? Can you hear me?"
Flurry Heart barely felt anything. Every labored breath she took chilled her barrel. How long had she been here? Hours? Days? It was nearly impossible to tell when the wind was constant and the sun wasn't visible from any of the chamber's windows.
She hadn't found the strength to stand, and laying here hadn't helped her recover any energy. She just felt exhausted, but not quite able to fall asleep. The tears that had fallen from her eyes had not even made it to the floor before freezing to her cheeks. Her eyesight also wasn't clear, she couldn't make out the walls of the chamber anymore, they were blurry and hazy.
Was this what dying felt like? Would Luna, Spike, and all the others be waiting for her when she finally crossed over?
"Hello? Are you alright?" She heard a voice ask.
She opened her eyes, and saw the Crystal Heart glowing once again. In the aura of light that shined out from it, she saw...
"An... alicorn...?" She asked, her voice barely a whisper. The form had a pair of bright orange wings and a horn. Then, there, just above her head, she saw them... The crystals from her dreams.
"An... alicorn?" The prone pony form asked. The voice was definitely a mare's but due to the aura in the room, Sunny couldn't discern any detailed features, but the voice definitely sounded weak.
"The... The crystals, did they work? Is Equestria safe?" She heard her ask. The form hardly moved, barely raising her head to look at her.
"Yes," Sunny replied, slowly nodding. "Yes, they worked. Equestria has united again."
Flurry felt relief wash over her, as the frigid air continued to rush over her body. She managed the weakest of smiles, as she slowly laid her head back down on the icy floor, and she finally felt ready to rest... Sleep...
Sunny heard the apparition give a soft sigh of relief.
"Thank you... Thank you, my little pony. I don't know who you are, but you have brought me more peace than you can imagine..."
The haze in the room began to lift, and with it, the pony laying on the floor faded away. When she took her next breath, the room had returned to the icy look she had seen when they had first entered.
"Hey, you okay?" She heard a voice ask, and she turned to see Izzy standing next to her.
Sunny turned back to where she saw the pony laying, and saw nothing but ice and crystalized floor. Had she simply faded away? If not, surely there would be... Some kind of remains. But there was nothing, except the Heart. She walked back over and touched the grey heart-shaped stone again, but nothing happened this time, and she picked it up into her hoof.
"The crystals..." Sunny said to Izzy. "The crystals, I think they came from here."
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Well, this is probably for the best. She wants to be with her friends, not be some sort of relic.
It looks like the crystal have been activated and sunny saw a vision I think of flurry heart on the floor the last time we saw her and she asked Sunny is Equestria is safe she said yes flurry heart was so happy and it looks like she finally drifted away but peacefully knowing that everything is going to be okay and it looks like she's going to meet up with her family and her friends that is kind of sad that she's not around anymore but she can finally meet up with her friends and family up there now
honestly i like the direction you plan on taking it with Flurry gone, but i also wouldn't say no to a alternate ending
Instead of full survival I would have rather seen her speak a bit more with Sunny.
I'd be lying if I said I didn't want to see the alternate ending, but it's up to you!
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I agree. Flurry is a relic from the past, so fading away symbolizes the start of a new era.
Thanks very much for getting the next chapter up. Definitely liked the work that went into the exchange, characterizations and future chapter set-up. Definitely appreciated how Sunny, despite understandable confusion, was still able to give Flurry a bit of peace of mind before she faded away (and the nod to Sunny's short lived extra exposure to the crystals' magic and briefly gaining "training wheels alicorn" abilities was also appreciated). Really liked Izzy calling Sunny back to the present as well. Now, hopefully, Flurry will cross over to the other side and be reunited with her family and friends in the hereafter (a true Earn Your Happy Ending and a beautifully bittersweet epilogue scene).
As for the alternate chapter, I'll leave it up to you. On one hand, I AM curious as to how Flurry would react to how long it has been since she was gone and how much the world has changed in that time. On the other, yeah, it probably IS better the way you're making this, as other reviewers have said.
At any rate, I'll definitely be looking forward to the final chapter(s) either way.
It's not what I thought was going to happen, but it's not a bad decision on your part.
I don’t care.
It works perfectly well with the story, I have no problems with this direction. It's actually kinda nice that Flurry got to hear Equestria is fine.
I don't want to see an alternate; i want your vision as an author. Otherwise i would write it myself
(If you want write it anyways but i will not read it)
Flurry!!!
Flurry deserves her rest, she's been alone for far too long. It's time for her to meet her family and friends.
It's nice to see that she ultimately died happily knowing her plan had worked(although it took about 1000 years for the ponies to work it out, but let's not tell her that, it worked out in the end).
I would wouldn’t be against the alternative ending because it would make an interesting storyline.
But I like what you did, and how you handled it.
And finding her alive would eliminate all need to do research about the old times.
Flurry heart you did everything you could to stop this including Luna and Spike you guys did an amazing job Equestria will be okay you can rest now they are waiting for you
Oh dear Flurry, I feel she had so much more to accomplish. Taken too soon. I’ll wait and see if I like the alternate ending better, but this does provide a heavy response and degree of sorrow
I don't need to see an alternate ending where she survives, I'm happy that Flurry passed, knowing that she didn't sacrifice herself in vain, and that Equestria will be OK. Also, she needs to be reunited with her friends and family after being away from them all that time.
Flurry is best Force ghost. Also:
Ohgra: Is the Princess here too? (Looks around suspiciously)
Jen: She's dead.
Ohgra: Could be anywhere,then. (Glares around even more suspiciously)
😦
Goodbye Flurry Heart.
Oow, I rather hoped flurry would stay
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I'm planning a side story where she survives. You're not the only one wanting that kind of alternate look.