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'Visions are worth fighting for. Why spend your life making someone else's dreams?'

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It’s interesting but each chapter needs to be longer in length.

You have me hooked. I’ll pay the opposite side of the coin and admit I enjoy shorter chapters. They’re easier to digest within only a few minutes, but they do leave me wanting more.

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Good to know! I did a 'found journal' story for another fandom a few years back, and my biggest mistake on that one was that the chapters got way too long, so I wanted to give the format another try and stick with a realistic amount of text someone would write in a journal.

I can see a shorter length being more realistic but I still would like to see longer chapters. Maybe 1000 words would be a good length for each of these.

May future generations learn that, no matter how advanced our technology becomes, how many riches we enjoy, or how peaceful our world may be, there are still places we must never go.

Reminds me of the long term nuclear waste storage message proposals:

This place is a message... and part of a system of messages... Pay attention to it! Sending this message was important to us. We considered  ourselves to be a powerful culture.

This place is not a place of honour... No highly esteemed deed is commemorated here... Nothing valued is here.

What is here is dangerous and repulsive to us. This message is a warning about danger.

The danger is in a particular location... It increases toward a centre... The centre of danger is here... of a particular size and shape, and below us.

The danger is still present, in your time, as it was in ours.

The danger is to the body, and it can kill.

The form of the danger is an emanation of energy.

The danger is unleashed only if you substantially disturb this place physically. This place is best shunned and left uninhabited.

I am loving this creeping sense of disquiet and unease.

there is a field of spikes at the bottom of the sea floor, but I can confirm that these spikes – or more accurately, thorns – are not made by nature

Assuming this is not some sort of hitherto unknown type of megafauna like a Ursa Major, that would mean some sapients designed this to be deliberately as unwholesome and unwelcome and uncomfortable as possible... That should give them pause as to why this was done. Maybe time to ask Luna or Celestia if they remember anything? Maybe a forgotten bundle of nastiness from their respective Nightmare/Daybreaker phases?
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Exactly what it is, we were not able to tell, and a warning light forced us to retreat to the surface before we could investigate further. Flawless Star is going over the sub with his staff to ensure it’s integrity, and if all goes well, we'll head right back down to the irregularity tomorrow.

You know that part in Amityville Horror where the possessed house says "GET! OUT...!" ?

Yeahhh... I think the sub is trying to communicate here.
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But fate has decided to bless me, and given me a gift that will be studied, admired, and pondered over by all of Equus for decades, perhaps centuries to come! I could ask for no greater gift than to know that my place has been written into the history books as the pony who found the most extraordinary artifact in history!

There are two ways to enter the history books: one as an inspiration, the other as a warning...

Well that does not bode well... The scary thing about deception is that, by definition, you do not know you have been deceived. Smart of Golden to ask Thunder to check in on her with an outside opinion. Whether or not Golden actually listens to Thunder or even believes anything she says is another matter entirely though

Shades of The Mist here. I guess they should not have stayed behind to poke around the Thorns...

I wonder if the missing crew and researchers from the yacht will be "found" again, only for everyone to realise far too late that the researchers and crew are not who they were assumed to be?

Also, just heard The Derelict by Abney park. Seems rather apropos for the yacht:

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