Preparations halt when Princess Celestia forbids the playing of the Equestrian national anthem at a concert after a copy of its original is discovered to still exist. Despite her warnings, Octavia Melody endeavors to uncover the truth.
Painless, a young resident physician at Manehattan East Side Memorial Hospital, drew the short lot and finds himself working through Hearth's Warming. Tonight he has but one seemingly pointless task - to keep the dead company.
It really is a tragedy when anyone loses their parents at a young age. Even when it's the only parent you've knew. But what if that same parent is the most hated unicorn in history?
Abandoned by her friends, hated by the school, Sunset Shimmer felt that no one believed and cared for her, but luckily she met someone that was also like her.
Second Wind has a lot going for her, but nopony can work for two employers, not forever. After this, she's not sure she can do either. This is her choice, her duty.
Do more proofreading my man, you have something going on here, but the amount of grammar mistakes kinda bring it down. Also, I found it strange that this is your first published story, despite you've been on the site since early 2015, but you explained it in the notes. Yet... I feel like you could really have at it now, that you have tasted how it is. Try to get a proofreader, or at least do it for yourself. Have your finished story sit for a day or two, then read it. Many mistakes you wouldn't notice just after writing will become glaring that way. Also, get a cover for your story, that way it will attract more readers. I say keep doing the do, and publish, only then you can truly improve, since you can get feedback. As a sign of goodwill, and to inspire you a bit, I will give this story an upvote. Just don't give up, man.
10996291 Honestly yeah, I had a few more plans for it, but sad isn't really the story I wanted to dwell on for too long. I ended up just posting it to test the waters, get some feedback, and to kinda challenge my self doubt and second guessing. However, this will definitely be revisited at some point.
I want more, not much more I can say. I think that you have a good start point here and that it can become so much more. Your doing better than I am though, because I don't dare to do more than lurk and comment.
Do more proofreading my man, you have something going on here, but the amount of grammar mistakes kinda bring it down. Also, I found it strange that this is your first published story, despite you've been on the site since early 2015, but you explained it in the notes.
Yet... I feel like you could really have at it now, that you have tasted how it is. Try to get a proofreader, or at least do it for yourself. Have your finished story sit for a day or two, then read it. Many mistakes you wouldn't notice just after writing will become glaring that way. Also, get a cover for your story, that way it will attract more readers. I say keep doing the do, and publish, only then you can truly improve, since you can get feedback.
As a sign of goodwill, and to inspire you a bit, I will give this story an upvote. Just don't give up, man.
10996291
Honestly yeah, I had a few more plans for it, but sad isn't really the story I wanted to dwell on for too long. I ended up just posting it to test the waters, get some feedback, and to kinda challenge my self doubt and second guessing. However, this will definitely be revisited at some point.
I want more, not much more I can say. I think that you have a good start point here and that it can become so much more. Your doing better than I am though, because I don't dare to do more than lurk and comment.