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Omegathyst


Female Writer, Bisexual Writer, Smolder X Mare Crackship Connoisseur. Creator of the Smolderverse, and writer of many other kinds of clop and SFW stories (Commissions temporarily OPEN)

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Instead of dealing with the sudden attack of the changelings, Twilight Sparkle faces a dilemma that she is far less prepared for: her brother getting married...to another stallion! And not just any stallion, but her former foalsitter Prince Bolero! The stallion that she had a crush on back when she was a filly! Or at least she thought she had a crush on him, her parents certainly teased her enough when she got older. Nonetheless, how will Twilight make peace with not only who they are, but who she is?

Contest entry for the M/M Shipping Contest.
Contains lots of internalized homophobia, not entirely accepting parents, conflict between family and friends, Rule 63 Princess Cadance, a gay stallion wedding, lesbian/bisexual Mane 6, and a happy ending.
Cover art by JaquelinDreamz

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 56 )

Interesting idea, not something I have seen before. Curious to see where this goes

so far the plot is very interesting, i already want to see how the story unfolds

Howdy, hi! Thank you for your entry into the contest. It has been recorded and we look forward to reading it when the judging approaches. :twilightsmile:

As an aside: most of those downvotes will have nothing to do with any expressed homophobia in your story. Sadly for whatever reason, FIMFic lately loves to extract a toll on anyone who writes anything with queer themes, especially anything masculine gay or trans (either/or.) The end result is you'll get a lot of downvotes on said stories. Don't worry about them. Focus on what you see in comments. :raritystarry:

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Hey, that's super cool of you to say, I really appreciate that and I'll continue to focus on my story and the comments 🙂

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Same. Pretty much every story of gender swapped ShiningCadance is female Shining; Male Cadance and Chrysalis are practically non-existent in comparison.

You did a very good job with the first chapter, itching to see what's going to happen next!

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I wanted to jump in and say I agree with this - I've noticed that any time I post a lesbian or hetero story, I'll get a couple of cursory downvotes, but anything M/M (even worksafe) is often a 50-50 downvote to upvote ratio. I'm lucky to get more upvotes than downvotes sometimes, sad to say. It can be very discouraging, so I hope you won't take that personally. :) Best of luck in the contest!!

I just wanted to say I always (generally if done well which this is obiviously) stories that tackle that ugly learning part of life. Where you can either stick your head deeper into the sand or throw off the dirt and grim to see the sun.

I actually like (personally) stories that do that most. A few other nlp stories come to mind. It's just wouldn't you rather read a story about fighting the good fight then seeing how wonderful and amazing and...

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Yeah this is gonna be good

Don't let the downvotes get you down. This is a very interesting story so far, as I am sure it will be an enjoyable read.

Tracked and tagged, interesting premise with this. I'm hoping I'll see more of this story.

Especially with homophobia theme (the drama!) though it's now with Shining Armor, I'll still be tracking to see how this all unfolds!

Good luck !
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Definitely an interesting premise. Adding this to my tracking so I can read it when it's complete. :)

This feels a little fast paced but I'm very excited to see it continue.

That's interesting premise and I will certainly look forward to reading further chapters. 🙂 I have to agree with Stormwing Gale in that a pacing is a little fast and you could give various scenes a bit more screen-time, so to speak. Then again, it might be just a matter of personal preference. 😉

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Frankly, I chalk up the downvotes to just how politicized and weaponized the topic has become; especially in recent years when more and more series are getting into the heavy-handed virtue signalling and lecturing the fans about how bad and evil they are for liking what they like. Take the recent defeminization of women in media, where female characters are made to look big and burly to the point they're indistinguishable from the men they're presented as being superior to. We've been told that feminine forms are harmful to real women. We've even been told that slightly skimpy clothing promotes sexual violence against women.

Take for example the ongoing border crisis, and the open border advocates saying anyone who wants to come here should be allowed to do so freely. If this message were applied in an MLP story, we'd be seeing the changeling invasion presented from the perspective of the changelings being a victim species and Celestia and the other ponies being evil for trying to resist their efforts of taking over Canterlot.

Or worse we'd be seeing stories about tens of thousands of zebras coming into Equestria, making demands about how they want to be treated and respected without contributing anything, and lecturing the ponies every five minutes about how the current generation carries the blood guilt of their ancestors from over a thousand years ago and owe them reparations for life as payback. All presented from the perspective of Equestria being a hostile nation where Celestia is a specist warlord simply because her country is prosperous while theirs isn't.

I can't speak for anyone else, but frankly I'm so sick and tired of hearing the same hate-promoting messages spewed over and over again, from more and more series that used to be enjoyable. The stuff we read and watch are supposed to be for entertainment, not getting told about how we're evil incarnate even if we do embrace and accept the message we're being presented with. I don't want to spend the time necessary to read through a story that exists solely to deliver a particular political message, or where the author will interrupt the flow of the story to have a character go into lecture mode about a particular topic. And especially not when the political message they want to deliver doesn't even exist in the source material they're using as the inspiration for their story.

Homophobic gay Twi is the funniest character ever invented. She's so unaware it's almost impressive

And then she goes aware for a second and almost kills me with the feels. Congrats.

Aw, poor little Twily...

At least we know Bolero's not Chrysalis though

Surprised at the direction this took. I had assumed Twilight herself didn't have these feelings, and only just felt the same as her parents. However this adds to the drama, a nice addition to the story nonetheless. Also I highly doubt their parents would be allowed to the wedding, but I could be wrong.

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Amazing. Such a wall of text and none of it speaks of story itself. Is Charlie a spam bot by any chance? Because this feels like spam.

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Yeah, that's contest deadlines for ya. I'll admit, pacing isn't usually my friend when it comes to writing stories, but having a deadline to finish it all by doesn't help either 😅 I'll try to make the pacing more smooth in the next chapters, glad y'all still enjoyed the story!
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Yeah, sometimes I found myself laughing at the absurdity of what comes out her mouth, and other times I just feel sorry for her. This take of Twilight is very interesting to write though, for sure.

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Well if you want something more concise and more related to the story directly then I can do that.

Reading the summary of this story, the part that's supposed to drag the reader in and hold their interest long enough to get them reading the full work, I'm informed from the very beginning this is going to come off as being a lecture piece, and the author is going to be informing the readers how the holding of certain personal, particular ideologies is wrong.

If that's the vibe I'm getting just from the summary itself, why would I want to invest the time to read it through and see for myself if this is actually how the story will be proceeding?

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Do you have a list of texts like these that you just copy and paste whenever you find specific keywords? Because they both feel like one of those generic sales reach outs that one could find in their inbox. 😄

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In a previous life I wrote the programming and coding that went into making the computer programs that write those generic sales reach outs. I'm a very dull, uninteresting person outside of fantasy writing. I'm like Maud Pie but less exciting than her.

Long story short, this story earned a downvote from me not because of its contents, but because the summary rubbed me the wrong way and made me lose all interest. It's like the mental equivalent of nails on a chalkboard for me.

So Twilight is repressing feelings because she’s been taught they are “wrong” and is taking it out on her brother. Likely because she doesn’t have the courage to act out against her parents, even if it’s really her choice. The pacing is a bit all over the place, it would have worked better if it involved her trying to find Bolero as he works on preparing the wedding. Canterlot Castle is a pretty big place, it wouldn’t be too crazy that she needed to search for them… while wading through the wedding preparations.

I’m glad Shining had the courage to choose his own happiness over what his parents wanted. But I’m willing to bet they will try something before this story is over. I can definitely tell Twilight is the tip of the ice berg when it comes to family drama. Especially when old wounds between shining and his father is pulled up…

Poor, poor Twilight, hopefully she comes to terms with her own repressed gay in time for the wedding.
Age doesn't always mean wisdom, especially when you teach hate, fear, and suppression.

Please Twi, please understand...

Twilight seems to understand now that just because she thinks something is right, doesn't mean it is right to her friends, her brother, and even herself. Hopefully she pours her heart out about her own inner gay to Bolero, and he can work his love magic.

Repression is very hard to undue, I’m guessing her parents really hammered it into her skull. Not physically (hopefully), but it sounds like they did a lot of damage. I want to at least give them the benefit of the doubt that they thought they were helping, but that doesn’t really make it better. Twilights behaviors remind me of a “Ex-Gay” ministry camp survivor, it even could explain her manic episodes.

I thought Cadence's male version was called Cupid. ...Or was it Eros? I forget.

“She... doesn’t like gay ponies?” Fluttershy whimpered. “But doesn’t she know we’re all-”

She's not a pony pony (whatever you call a people person as a pony). I don't she pays attention to that.

“Er, sometimes stallions don’t become daddies and are very lonely and sad,” Night Light told her. “So they settle for another stallion. You like chocolate ice cream, right?”

I'm not convinced they don't have magical gay/lesbian spawns to solve that.

Probably the one time I can say Twilight deserved everyone walking out on her.

She probably doesn’t realize it, but she just insulted basically everyone there. Must be a real punch in the face for the homophob when she realizes all her friends are also gay. As well as her mentor possibly, too.

Just to be clear, I love this story and my anger isn’t directed at you or your writing style.

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For some reason I’m imaging Celestia is more Bi, which would make it easier for Twilights parents to rationalize it all. But obviously I can’t be sure until the author tells us one way or another. This vaguely reminds me of another “Canterlot Wedding” fanfic where it turned out Bug horse actually loved Shining and Cadence had the hots for Twilight. It was more comical, but there definitely was some homophobia with Twilight.

That went about as bad as it could've gone, and pretty much exactly as expected

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I might touch upon that subject in a sequel...
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I'm sure there's other names people come up with, but Prince Bolero seems to be the common one. It's the one Some Leech used in one of his fics anyway.
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Just to be clear, I love this story and my anger isn’t directed at you or your writing style.

Oh no worries, I assumed as much :twilightsmile:
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Yeah, I can see Celestia being bi. That's how I'd see her in this story.
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Chapter 3 summarized in one sentence 😂

Great chapter, I do hope we see more of the words said to twilight by her parents to make her feel THAT much internalized homophobia.

I had to finish this chapter and still write the last chapter within less than 48 hours, so forgive me for the pacing. Twilight's backstory was only glossed upon and not told in vivid detail because this is meant to be an M/M Shipping Contest entry, and I needed to spend more time writing the chemistry between Shining and Bolero that has been lacking in the last three chapters.

That's fair. Perhaps after the contest you could make a sequel that would focus on solving Twilight's issues and repairing her relationship with everybody that isn't her parents? Then you would have more time to tackle those plot points at your leisure. :)

EDIT: I've just seen one of your comments from previous chapter and now I know you are thinking of/planning the sequel, so I guess we will see more of Twilight's backstory? ^^

I think this is a great chapter! Poor little Twiiiiiii!! She and the happy couple both need a happy ending now

There is no need to worry, you are doing amazingly. *hug*

Wonderful ending! Can't wait to see more!!!

Hey! I thoroughly enjoyed this. The pacing did feel slightly rushed at times, but that was due to time constraints.

It might be just me, but this feels more like a story about Twilight coming to terms with the fact she likes mares with a M/M ship as the catalyst for that rather than being centered around a M/M ship. Shining Armor and Prince Bolero almost felt like side characters. That's not to say it wasn't a great story! I just know it's entered in the M/M contest and wanted to point that opinion out. (Oh, boy, am I going to get downvoted for that...)

I loved Twilight obliviously crushing on her friends, and kind of want them to all date each other. 😆 Love that Celestia's bi! (Kind of hoping she does something to Twilight's parents...)
Thanks for a good read, and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future!

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It might be just me, but this feels more like a story about Twilight coming to terms with the fact she likes mares with a M/M ship as the catalyst for that rather than being centered around a M/M ship. Shining Armor and Prince Bolero almost felt like side characters. That's not to say it wasn't a great story! I just know it's entered in the M/M contest and wanted to point that opinion out. (Oh, boy, am I going to get downvoted for that...)

Yeah, I realized that three chapters in, which is why I implemented a lot more scenes with them in the last two chapters. That way, the judges actually had chemistry to rate the story on.

I was almost expecting the parents to show up and cause trouble only for Twilight to tell them off. Maybe in the sequel, IDK

Howdy, hi!

You have been successfully entered into the MxM contest! Thank you very much for your participation and we look forward to reading!

This was an interesting read.
I really hope that there will be a sequel to this involving Night Light and Twilight Velvet being confronted by Twilight, Shining Armor, and Prince Bolero (and maybe Princesses Celestia and Luna) about all the abuse they put Twilight through. And maybe put on trial for it. In addition, their could be a sequel finding out what became of Flashy, the filly Twilight had loving feeling for.

“How do none of you see it? My brother? With a prince?!” Twilight got up and stomped her hoof as she further raised her voice. “My B.B.B.F.F and my former foalsitter aren’t colt-cuddlers! They’re normal ponies!”

i do like the start of this concept, taking the canon events with a little twist

“So let me get this straight,” Rarity began to speak. “Please do,” Twilight huffed, glaring down at the wedding invitation. “That’s not what I meant and you know it,” Rarity snapped.

ah classic! and i can just hear that great Rarity snapping

“She...doesn’t like gay ponies?” Fluttershy whimpered. “But doesn’t she know we’re all-”

and i do love the irony of this!

Twilight lit her horn up, causing the open suitcase to close, and teleported out of sight. The suitcase disappeared as well, and Fluttershy stared at the empty space where Twilight used to be.

aww, bless Fluttershy so much for trying!

“Fluttershy,” Fluttershy jolted at the touch of the farm mare’s hoof on her shoulder, then went still as she looked at Applejack. “Logic isn’t on her side for a change, let her learn when her brain lets her.”

very wise of Applejack here. it's hard to logic someone out of something they didn't logic themselves into.

Feeling her wings beginning to unfurl, Fluttershy blushed as Applejack’s hoof began to reach her own and oh Celestia what is happening-

hey, this isn't an F/F contest! (not that i don't appreciate this bit lol)

I’m sure it’s just Fluttershy cooling off Applejack’s attitude from earlier.

yes, and i'm sure they're roommates as well, Twilight

Shining Armor wouldn’t just turn on our parents like this, they didn’t tell us stuff for the heck of it, they were real values that guided us into adults! They were saving us from pain!

oof! makes sense it wouldn't be Twilight just deciding to be homophobic by herself. this has to be taught, which means Shining has more than his sister to contend with.

Twilight felt her voice dying in her throat as Night Light walked another direction with Shining Armor following him. What was Shining’s problem? Dad was trying to teach her the importance of having a family.

this does track with how homophobia can take root in a place that's otherwise as nice and utopic as Equestria. pity and disapproval is less frightening to face than disgust and hate, but lets those that have it convince themselves they're being understanding and compassionate instead of awful. you did a great job here with this.

Sure, she didn’t really feel those fuzzy butterflies that she was supposed to feel, but her parents said she had a crush on Prince Bolero, so it must be true! Right?

isn't it weird how many straight parents think it's fine and normal to ship their prepubescent children? like wow, this is a really weird thing to do! he's her babysitter!

Twilight shook her head, she only slipped on her words that night because it’d be cool to have mares live in her castle. As friends! And in a way, with five mares as her dearest friends, she got exactly what she hoped for. Their friendship meant more to her than any stallion could. Twilight froze up. But that doesn’t mean I’d date a mare!

i am loving this! ah, self-denial.

“Captain, you said that your sister might be a threat,” one of the Royal Guard ponies spoke up. “We were going to check her suitcase for weapons and neutralize her.” “Are you all seriously that...she’s my sister,” Shining facepalmed. “I just needed you guys to talk her down, not whatever shit you were trying to pull just now.” “Oh,” the guards blushed and averted their gazes from their captain and his sister. “Our apologies, Shining Armor. And Twilight Sparkle.”

haha, had a feeling it was going to be a misunderstanding like this!

“That doesn’t matter! We’re supposed to marry mares!” Twilight blurted out. Shining shut up, staring at Twilight as she turned red in the face.

oop

“Applejack, you have to understand that they told us it was a choice for years,” Shining told her. “And with Twilight being a sheltered bookworm until recently, how was she supposed to know otherwise? I...I hoped she would’ve accepted it enough to be my Best Mare, but I should probably ask Celestia or Luna instead.”

aww, that is a lot of hoping on Shining's part. but then again, it fits in with how oblivious the canon Shining acted.

“What did you do to my brother?” Twilight growled.

the same line but now with a very different context. very fun, that

“You must be a changeling!” Twilight gasped. “You and Shining Armor! Why else would the two of you be trying to piss me off? This is just some plot to turn Celestia’s student against her own family and friends!”

and the irony here is great!

“I...I…” Twilight felt her face getting hot, every coherent thought wiped into nothing as tears rolled down her face. Images of Flashy Dazzle repeated like a vicious cycle, refusing to free her from the joy and shame and joy and shame and joy and shame… Twilight sobbed as she turned around and bolted out of the castle.

oof, now you are really making me feel for Twilight. i could definitely see a version of myself in her place here, sadly.

“Because the one silver lining they see is that I’m getting married to royalty,” Shining admitted. “They said ‘Well, if you want to throw away love for a fancy castle, we’re not going to stop you.’”

ah, that does explain one thing i was wondering about!

But Prince Bolero complimented the dishes that Applejack prepared, adored the decorations Pinkie had set up for the party, told Fluttershy that the birds’ melodies were the most harmonious sounds he’d ever heard, praised Dash’s flying skills, and most of all, told Rarity that the wonderful dresses she was nearly done with were for her and her friends, the bridesmaids themselves.

again, love the irony here! and that structurally, Twilight still fits into her role at this point in the arc, very fun.

“Don’t worry Twilight, there won’t be any strippers there,” Spike chuckled. “Bolero knows I’m still a child, he wouldn’t invite me if there were any.”

yes, thank you! i mean this is an obvious thing to take into account, but by doing this you are better than how the actual canon show writers were for The Break Up Break Down hahaha

“What is your problem?!” Applejack yelled. Fluttershy, who was flying back to the table with a scone, dropped the plate as she flew over to Applejack.

can definitely imagine this scene

“I understand more than you do,” Pinkie gave a small smile. “I know exactly what’s going on, but only you can find the answers. I still love you, Twilight.”

Pinkie got out of her table, and instead of taking off with everypony else, walked towards Twilight and wrapped her forelegs around her. Twilight buried her face into Pinkie’s chest fluff, smelling the intoxicating scent of strawberries and cream, as she began to sob.

aww! that Pinkie wisdom, very nice. also a fun coïncidence with her being pink as well (unless you planned this???)

And then you’ll get the rings from your best mare...Luna over there.

aww, poor Shining, having to make do with Celestia's sister instead of his own

“Th-Thank you Auntie,” Bolero wiped a tear from his eye. “It means a lot that my aunts are here to celebrate this occasion.”

it means a lot to me too, now! aww my heart

“This is the pony you chose as your student?” Luna gasped, before she spoke again in a lower tone. “Does she even know your history of lovers?”

“Not now, Luna,” Celestia hissed.

yes, love this, also: canon.

“That’s it though, isn’t it?” Shining frowned. “You do think of me as less of a stallion, Prince Bolero too. Please do me a favor, and go home. Treat me like the dirt on your hooves, that’s fine. But if you’re going to treat my fiancée like this, I don’t want to see you ever again. Now if you excuse me, I have a groom to comfort. At least, if I even still have one.”

oof, but good on Shining for standing by his stallion here. hope it gets through to Twilight

“There’s more going on than just us getting married, isn’t there? I can feel the twisted, ugly view of love radiating from you. Tell me what happened.”

always neat to see Cadance/Bolero's love powers explored like this, instead of the weird nonconsensual love zapping we got in canon

Bolero’s jaw dropped as Twilight stared at the ground, processing what he had just heard.

i would too, that is quite a revelation! and ties into the theme i mentioned just now about magic used to edit minds

He thanked the stars that he was raised by parents that would actually be there for his wedding, and he felt his heart tugging towards the stallion outside the door.

such parents really are precious, and sadly very rare when i was growing up. i am so glad there are more and more of them these days, but there's still a long way to go.

Twilight felt her heart calm for the first time in years, giving a giggle as she smiled at Prince Bolero. Despite the closeness the two were sharing, Twilight became more certain that her parents had lied to her, this wasn’t the same love intertwined with passion that she felt years ago. This was her friend, who was getting married to her brother.

aww! Bolero is the kind of patient, loving, and giving that befits his title, and thank Celestia for that

He was no longer constantly walking around like it was a funeral, and he smiled, really smiled, in a way she never saw him smile inside their house.

and it's so nice for Twilight to finally see this!

Maybe their parents weren’t what Twilight thought they were, Twilight shuddered at the possibility.

that is a tough mental thing to get over. i don't begrudge Twilight for feeling conflicted about that.

“But I’m only doing this once, no divorcing him, okay?” Twilight told her brother.

haha, now that is a turnaround!

What does she mean by that?

what did Rarity mean by this

Dirty Filly-Fooler

oof oof oof at all of that. my heart breaks for poor young Twilight

“Just a terrible nightmare,” Twilight shook her head. “Bad ponies making me want to do bad stuff, could you hold me, please?”

Shining was shaking for a different reason now, perhaps his parents needed another visit, and he needed answers.

oof oof oof. i would be so angry in Shining's place

An image came to him, how it could’ve been him kissing Shining Armor under his parents’ roof, how they could’ve erased Shining’s memory and fed him lies about Prince Bolero.

that is very frightening to think about, ugh

Will be cracking out as many words as possible in an attempt to finish the last chapter, wish me luck! 😵

really glad you made it!

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