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Nailah


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Gallus has everything, a home, a new life within Equestria, and a chance to prove himself as the royal Captain of Twilight's guard, but what makes him feel so unsure? Why does he feel like a monster?


Cover art credit: ART

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Awwwwwww

Will we get more of the sweet Gallbar?

Very fun little short story, watching Gallus talk himself through things with Twilight's help, all so he can be the gayest birb we all know him to be. You go Gallus. Be a gay birb.

This really got me. Lovely story.

Very sweet. Please tell us how it goes with Sandbar!

MORE birbcat? more fwoof?

much yush

To the author - you should know i was a bit skeptical of your story and here's why...
thought to myself '' what's up with this cover art! is that picture gonna be connected to the work?'' then i scrolled down to the comment section. i do that sometimes just to see what other readers think about said fic and form my own views:twilightblush:

p.s: btw gallbar (gallus x sandbar) i will always be one of my favorite m/m ships:heart:

please write a sequel some people are asking for it!:scootangel:

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Same; there was nothing in the tags or description to indicate Sandbar having anything to do with it, but reading the story explained it.

A link to the art source that shows more clearly who the artist is: https://manebooru.art/images/2431227

“Princess Twilight…” Gallus stuttered nervously. “Do you ever fear being rejected by those you care for?” he asked..

Other than a couple of times where you forget the period at the end of a sentence, there is this issue. It should read:

“Princess Twilight…” Gallus began nervously, “do you ever fear being rejected by those you care for?” he asked.

He isn't stuttering, so either be sure to add one there or tweak your wording. Since he continues afterward, you don't need the capital d. It should all be one line, there is an issue with the indentation/enter key usage.

Also, you can link the cover art in the story page so it shows up when someone mouses over things.

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