Ever since the dawn of civilization, there have been numerous varieties of legends and myths. They might have originated from historical truths that have been passed down through the generations or from the fantasies of somepony from a long time ago—tales that were told around campfires and in dining rooms. Then there are civilizations. They would eventually collapse, whether through natural or artificial means. When one falls, another rises in its place. Things have always been this way since the concept of society first emerged.
Therefore, allow me to tell you a story about several curious ponies who came across antiquities from a bygone civilization and a lost age in one of Equestria's most ominous places:
The Everfree Forest
Their discovery would upend their preconceived notions of reality and expose dark secrets that were supposed to remain hidden for all time.
IT IS ADVISED FOR READERS TO USE DARK MODE
(First fanfic [which is going to be partially graphic], tags are subject to change as the story goes on, and I might do multiple edits/re-edits to certain chapters that need them)
(Additional tags: Slice-of-life, Mystery)
The story is in the process of being rewritten, but the original story is still up for those who want to know what the first version was like.
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Bossypants, DuvetOfReason, and a grammar checker for double-checking grammar and punctuation, story ideas, and/or creating simpler or more readable sentences.
SecondPrances’ helpful suggestions to the story’s layout and design.
TearingNose24, Saffron48043, Moonstone_Knight, and Im a B O X for being helpful commentators of the story
Gave it a follow. I'm curious to see where this goes.
Please don't abandon this series this is so great
I'm so obsessed with this I really want to know what happens nexty
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Oh it ain’t dead, just on hold for a time. I’m focusing on school more than this one due to slipping grades and other private matters. I would most likely add a new chapter in a couple months into next year, which is probably in March or earlier.
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Alright make sense remeber your personal life is more important then the story
Great chapter! I'm keen to read more!
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I’m slowly making a return, so you would probably see a new chapter soon!
Alright I'm already loving it. Love the way you introduced them having a normal routine its gonna make the uncovering so much more bone rattling
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Mhm! Thanks for the comment, dude!
I’m curious if this means he did something and it ended up exploding in his face or something😂
All in all, great first chapter! Can’t wait for more!
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Lol
Try not to state the same thing twice like that, it gives the urge to skim through the text. As well while it is probably up to writing preference, I wouldn't say the excessive description of every little object and room isn't needed; for example most of the described things in the house likely won't be used in any significant way for the story to progress. Foregoing so much unnecessary describing of so much would also give you less work to do to produce the story; as readers a lot of the time when going through a story, our heads just fill in those sorts of tiny insignificant details ourselves.
Hope this criticism helps. Cant wait to see where this fic goes! Happy Writing!
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Ah, I see. Well, thanks for the criticism! It will help me learn how to become a better writer.
Well with the very wide gap in between chapters I can certainly see a massive improvement on the quality of writing, despite all the chapters seemingly not related to each other. I hope to see the next chapter in less then six months.
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Hey, you’re my first comment in many months! I do apologize for the lack of content, and I have a few reasons for it. I’m still working on said issues, but I believe there’s definitely gonna be another chapter in less than six months. If there’s something that might interest you, there’s gonna be traditional art I personally made for this story in the future AND past chapters!
Btw, your art pieces are pretty cool!
Wah months?
The descriptions here are pretty elaborate. Not a bad habit.
I'm still a little confused from the first to second chapter. I mean I know it'll be expanded on, but they're very different thematically.
Ballsy to introduce another sister. Interested to see where you take it.
Well, here's to hoping another chapter soonish.
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Thanks! While I sharply disagree with your theology, I give props when they are due. Oh, and don’t forget to check the prologue for some cool outro music!
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Oh really? I avoided it because I thought it was an older version. I'll give it a read asap.
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Late comment, but how was the music?
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Good news: THE SECOND CHAPTER’S COMING THIS WEEK
(Edit: technical difficulties, pls stand by)
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Well, Akira Yamaoka is a genius and Silent Hill is one of the greatest horror franchises of all time, so I'd say it's pretty good.
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Aight, thanks!
Blessings!
-Davidtin, the author of this story
I LOVE STORIES ABOUT ANCIENT HUMAN RUINS....OR RUINS OF ANYKIND !!!!!!!
MORE....MORE....MORE.....if you dont mind.....
AND IT HAD THE ENERGY SIGNATURE OF....DR MANHATTAN !!!!!!!
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Aye, same!
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I have not abandoned this story, thankfully! I’m still committed to it, even though I haven’t worked on this project for long periods of time.
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Aye, I got the reference!