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Dewdrops on the Grass
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I do love the Sunset and Aria ship
I hate equestria girls characters but this story was great. Will there be a sequel in the future maybe ?
I thought this was really beautiful. Intense BDSM, focus on consent and mutual pleasure, real tenderness and vulnerability.
This moment especially grabbed me:
I thought moment where one of the first things Sunset does is break character to check in with Aria was just so human and I loved it.
If I had concrit, I don't personally like clinical terms like 'vagina' and 'labia', especially combined with more casual terms like 'ass'. I usually use earthier terms, tho' I don't know if everyone likes that.
A+ erotica.
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Aww, thank you for reading and critiquing. Definitely fair re use of terms--I'll keep that in mind for future works.
And I'm glad that moment caught you... it felt natural for Sunset to do something like that and if she didn't it would've felt... weird. Because it's more real. And I like real.
But yes thank you very much.
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Oh I also wanted to celebrate you sharing my “Rarity is into expert level BDSM” headcanon. It’s just what she’d be into, right? For the costumes at the very least.
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But of course. In my head there's no way Rarity wouldn't be into BDSM on some level, and being an expert is only natural.
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She excels at everything she puts her hoof to.
Howdy, hi!
A review from the mansion to you.
That's when I knew I was in for a good read.
Lovely stuff, though I really wouldn't have minded that round two...
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I do my best to try to make any erotic writing of mine as realistic as possible, not to mention true to the characters and to the philosophy of consent. It might not get the popular upvotes that a lot of the other stuff around here does, but I stand by my standards.
Thank you kindly.
Just found this story, I really appreciate the fact you brought in Sunset’s insecurities and need for comfort, as well as Aria’s.
LOVE this! Something I've always found when I'm going through a scene of my own with a partner, is having to check in a little here and there to make sure what I'm doing is ok, and isn't going too far, and it definitely gets easier over time! But writing this into the scene really grounds the experience in reality, which makes it that much more enjoyable to me! I'd also like to add that the lead-up to this, Aria walking to Sunset's door wearing barely anything, is as relatable as it is insanely hot!
Something that always makes sexual scenarios better for me, both as a reader and as an open individual, is the psychology of it. Now I might be biased because I'm very deviant, and also I have a partial degree in psychology, but I really like delving into the mindset of sexual dynamics and sexual scenarios! So this description of why Aria liked to submit was as ingenious as it was immersive!
Sorry sorry, I just really liked these particular bits and needed to praise them in specific before getting a little more general with my thoughts, of which, I'm straining not to just turn this comment box into me screaming again and again from how much I enjoyed this.
So firstly, I'd love to compliment the tone in which you wrote this fic! Throughout the entire fic, there was an undercurrent of electricity that charged every word and every interaction. That little bit of nervousness from both Aria and Sunset, the waiting by the door and looking around, the first commands coming from Sunset and the wait as she got ready for the scene, and even the impromptu check-in from Mistress Sunset as to if she was doing good. All of them contributed to the sensual and nervously excited atmosphere that made me engage with it so well!
As to the actual scene itself, oh my GODDD Dewdrops, you smashed it. You slayed it. Your brain is far bigger than that of a normal person's. Like, the commands Sunset gave were enough to make me squirm in place, especially when Aria's breasts fell out of her dress. It brought me right back to being on a living room floor both giving and obeying the same commands to sit up. Moreover, the inclusion of the Wartenberg Wheel and it's decadent description was like adding a new butterfly into my stomach with every word I read. The tickling was immaculate too, as were the spanks that came from kitty not being able to keep her words in. Just,,, really amazing work, and it kind of takes my words away to be able to praise it.
However, what I can explicitly praise is the aftercare scene! This was not only an authentic depiction of what it looks like, but also what it feels like on either end of it. The domme not wanting to hurt or harm the sub in any way and checking in if they were ok, if what they did was ok, and the sub coming back down from what just happened and melting into their doms arms and reassuring them that everything's fine and they did great. It really couldn't have gone better or have been described better. This was not only some extremely hot writing, but some really authentic and intimate work as well!
This was absolutely adorable and really well-done stuff. It managed to both feel in-character and make sense as a situation these two specific characters would be in, and the interplay throughout really works. Kudos!