DyKaiowyn or Kaio was just an average pony until getting struck by a green radioactive lightning bolt making him half ghost. Now will Kaio and the main 6 save the world or die trying.
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DannyPhantom79
What’s up everyone, the name’s DyKaiowyn or Kaio/K.O. I like anime mainly Bnha and Beyblade Burst
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How exactly does a radioactive lightning bolt make you half-ghost? Shouldn't it just kill you?
A self-insert piece with poor structure, pacing, spelling, and tense.
It's not a good first story to have.
It's all very well and dandy that you want to write MLP, but get an editor and write something centred around the ponies of the show instead of your very special OC, for a proper first story at the very least.
White hair and glowing green eyes you can walk through walls and he can fly it's a pony new that he had to do he had to stop all the villains coming through he's here to fight for me and you
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Magic
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It’s just the beginning
Okay I'm hooked
Aight I like it
Can't wait to see him fight Nightmare Moon
It’s coming
Sonic the Hedgehog reference.
Why the name change and is cadence not going to be a part of the story at all?
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His full name is DyKaiowyn but he’s sometimes called DyKaiowyn, DyKaio, Kaio, or K.O. And yes Cadence will be in the story
Thank you for responding
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No prob bob
Question will their be Danny phantom villains like Skulker and the Box ghost. And stuff like the ghost portal.
ngl, I normally don't care for OC's but with how you made this story has gotten me invested. I can't wait for the next update and to see where this story goes.
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What do you like about my oc Kaio
Typical story where everyone is terrible and heartless to a damn child because cliche I guess. I swear if their behavior turns a 180 after he becomes a hero and try to act like they weren't that cruel...
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True but if they do, K.O. has every right to beat the shit out of them
Seriously, no one in their right mind would let that happen. They would move and get authorities involved. Though with everyone's track record of being jerks they wouldn't help. Still shame on you Miss. Cheerilee for crumbling under pressure and letting him do this. It won't change their behavior towards him so why do it?
How was he in a position that they could do that to him. Not like he was working there. The cruelty is too much that it's to the point that I am not even angry about it but completely baffled everyone is like this. I have never seen anything so forced in a fic before that it moved passed anger into complete nonsense and confusion about it.
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Do you still like the story though
Finally someone calls one of the girls out for this. I have seen many fics where one of them usually Rainbow, has no problem casually belittling or even threatening a child and never gets called out. Even when said child was actually getting defended. It's nice to see Kaio fight back.
You haven't cared before. Were you blind to his treatment? I mean Applejack on the same night showed it and now she suddenly seems to care too. Hoping she apologies and actually realizes the error of her ways. Something should also be done about the way everyone treated him too. If that just gets ignored or forgotten because it was only there to give him a tragic backstory, that would be the worst thing about this fic yet.
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As long as something is done about his cruel treatment, that isn't being easily forgiven, than the story will be fine. For the most part it seems to be an average written version of the show with an OC added. Nothing special, but nothing too terrible.
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All those claims are True .
And should be ... Disharmony at least to hate for the crippled , Scotaloo was probably better treated?
Scotaloo has sickness in his/her wings that prevents it to fly and bone operation and than the healthy bone grow back and should be awesome .
Anyway this halfa is treated with names like Rock Lee .
How much trouble would be just to be send to the characters of the story some hints in form of messages .
Kaio is that because names and well the previous chapters say it . Ch 3
The next of the few people who treated Kaio like normal thing .
Finally offered possible help . Well it's you story to make him incognito
I never took the comparison but you are correct
Halfa metabolism like Undertale boss monster converting the food to energy or mostly energy .
Plus increased metabolism , trained stomach or used to overfeeding
The slight disharmonius tone was better than the one tone singing in the birds
Things about dragons . Most of them are omnnivores , some in other dimensions may eat for example sea weed and blue oleander ,
Mostly the dragons should eat meat to develop better , in few instances is seen Dragons to eat cristals in such cases specific cristals may charge with energy including to heal or add their element in this way , some dragons may develop their element as well from the thing they eat as magical energy or material properties in enough quantity .
In Equestria it seems Dragons can sustain on Gems but Eating meat should develop them much better . Most dragons are more aggressive exept few exeptions .
Equestria Dragons are especially cursed with Dragon Greed making them stronger at the cost of their sense becoming more in caveman mind and like beasts . The Greed effect is for the persived value of the thing seen as most valuable .
Most dragons are fire breathers but some can use other elements . Some dragons could freeze their spit into ice breath or something similar as well
Most Dragons are intimidating especially the grown ups
Most uncivilised dragons can not talk talking only on their language which is draconese ,
Some dragons have their own magic language for spells similar to magic casters
The dragons behave mostly on their interests/concern/fascination depending mostly on upbringing/raising to shape their
instincts
...
And better to be along with their instincts .
Most Dragons are impulsive and maybe emotional.
Purple Dragons should BE CAPABLE TO use ALL ELEMENTS
Adalisks gave their effords of teaing themselves to understand and harness the element they desire to even replicate it .
Usually the dragons cast their spells as with their breath which is with their mouths unless if something else is made to be outlet for their magic .
Most dragons are fire proof , dragons with fur or feathers is less likely to be fire resistant
Serpents are subspecies of dragons
So are the wiverns .
Equestria Dragons are so fire resistant to take lava bath .
Dragons usually are more Brutish/roughousing but depending on the upbringing and raising of the environment to change .
The sudden acute rash from shedding and stink breath I had seen in Equestria Dragons , and possibly some reptiles . Usually the dragons should shed their scales/skin in more subtle way like uh... Flaking of the dead damaged scales , not that aggressive pimples observed in Equestrian Dragons .
For some strange reason Equestria Dragons get bad breath for a while when they got under age growing up or something like really bad breath .
By the insofisient feeding Spike the dragon development was stunted , Splike the dragon was shortened in size than most natural grown up dragon teens , even to the later wings development .
The Dragons Opinion of value if it is not in control the dragon could grow really large , Even the stunted growth Spike. Ould grow to a size of A House like when Spike was originally when Spike Hatched from Twight's magic energy . Like very greedy Dragon with Godzilla size.
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Interesting story,Yes ,I like it , I just wanted to give my observations of All Dragons I had ever seen to be mentioned . Like Wikipedia sort of .
In future Spike would wish to know about Dragons , I think what I described about dragons is mostly correct .
I wished to prevent some of the disasters or weaken the effect if it is provided some knowledge before the disaster struck .
Oh ... and hunting your OC to have better life , because Twilight Sparkle Showed sincere concern and having way more weight/importance than the meek mrs Cheerle . Also some past distaste of some displaced for just their look , so it's hypocritical to preach for harmony .
And how to cure Scotaloo from her sickness in her wings .
Is that knowledge way too great importance if it is made that change ?
Ok so in ch 3 I gave bigger description so here's possible use for it
Knowing their greed Spike would control more himself
Knowing Spike can use magic in the mentioned way could use it
Prevent and possibly cure smoke breath fog
The scaryness of the adult dragons
The sudden acute rash from shedding and stink breath .
Development of the dragons in their way of feeding
And behaviour .
And here's mrs angry
Challenging Nightmare Moon .
Basic standard Equestria skills ,Beam and shield .
Does he control his intanguality with his ghost half or wouldbe too suspicious
Well Spike has developed in mind of a Teen from his upbringing with just small body , even if he is Baby dragon
Movie critic says that sentance sounds suicidal ,Has to be More clear
Oh that one Sonic . Expected Crossover in a meeting .
Beware of the Hedgehog with bleeding eyes
Or the yellow coloured two tailed doll .
Sonic.exe ,Tails Doll ,
Yellow Hedgehog yellow coloured with spiral eyes
Or with diagonal stripe eyes Fleetway and Corrupt .
I have a one minor challenge for Luna after all seasons end if she can defend against Exetior .
For this test when is possible a fusion between Twilight Sparkle and Rainbow Dash to fight against Luna . Luna would have to take maximum 10 hits from the fusion to fail the test
The fusion has to take at least 25 hits to be admitted that Luna would passed the challenge .
The idea is Luna to fight someone very fast and Rainbow Dash is Equal to Sonic in speed give or take . and it may shoot nasty things
,So this is the challenge if Luna could survive by completing the Challenge to fight against Rainbow Dash and Twilight Sparkle fusion which is the closest equivalent to What Standard Exe would try to do by attack
The Banshee scream ghost wail beginning
What Mario
The GREEK GODDESS OF FATE CAN NOT SEE THE PINK ONE'S FATE . SHE HAS WAY TOO MUCH Fate particles ,+Chaos energy so can even shock Discord , And that is if Pinkie Pie did not trained her powers
Well Steven Magnet and Rarity are fashion fanatics
Technily Super Vain
One wrong move and Twilight Sparkle would be impaled kebap and with it if Celestia sees her bet failed Celestia would turn corrupt as the angry burning sun vs Nightmare moon
And So Kaio became parts of everything in elements . I suspect ... Maybe to explain finally what was going on .
He ... Deserves it .
The next Trouble after the party soon is to havea gas mask anda air filter shield because sick adult dragon from his smoking troath , maybe cold very heavy causing smoke veil .
Disaster prevention
Oh other onei forgot .
When is need AND ONLY THAN TO WRITE FRIENDSHIP REPORT , I would prefer Smarty pants accident to not happen to be avoided.
I love the story but some disasters to be prevented would be great
Consideration between two people even with different the opinion in face of vain Rarity and Country used to dirt Apple Jack
And Fluttersby dragonophobia