DyKaiowyn or Kaio was just an average pony until getting struck by a green radioactive lightning bolt making him half ghost. Now will Kaio and the main 6 save the world or die trying.
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DannyPhantom79
What’s up everyone, the name’s DyKaiowyn or Kaio/K.O. I like anime mainly Bnha and Beyblade Burst
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How exactly does a radioactive lightning bolt make you half-ghost? Shouldn't it just kill you?
A self-insert piece with poor structure, pacing, spelling, and tense.
It's not a good first story to have.
It's all very well and dandy that you want to write MLP, but get an editor and write something centred around the ponies of the show instead of your very special OC, for a proper first story at the very least.
White hair and glowing green eyes you can walk through walls and he can fly it's a pony new that he had to do he had to stop all the villains coming through he's here to fight for me and you
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Magic
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It’s just the beginning
Okay I'm hooked
Aight I like it
Can't wait to see him fight Nightmare Moon
It’s coming
Sonic the Hedgehog reference.
Why the name change and is cadence not going to be a part of the story at all?
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His full name is DyKaiowyn but he’s sometimes called DyKaiowyn, DyKaio, Kaio, or K.O. And yes Cadence will be in the story
Thank you for responding
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No prob bob
Question will their be Danny phantom villains like Skulker and the Box ghost. And stuff like the ghost portal.
ngl, I normally don't care for OC's but with how you made this story has gotten me invested. I can't wait for the next update and to see where this story goes.
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What do you like about my oc Kaio
Typical story where everyone is terrible and heartless to a damn child because cliche I guess. I swear if their behavior turns a 180 after he becomes a hero and try to act like they weren't that cruel...
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True but if they do, K.O. has every right to beat the shit out of them
Seriously, no one in their right mind would let that happen. They would move and get authorities involved. Though with everyone's track record of being jerks they wouldn't help. Still shame on you Miss. Cheerilee for crumbling under pressure and letting him do this. It won't change their behavior towards him so why do it?
How was he in a position that they could do that to him. Not like he was working there. The cruelty is too much that it's to the point that I am not even angry about it but completely baffled everyone is like this. I have never seen anything so forced in a fic before that it moved passed anger into complete nonsense and confusion about it.
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Do you still like the story though
Finally someone calls one of the girls out for this. I have seen many fics where one of them usually Rainbow, has no problem casually belittling or even threatening a child and never gets called out. Even when said child was actually getting defended. It's nice to see Kaio fight back.
You haven't cared before. Were you blind to his treatment? I mean Applejack on the same night showed it and now she suddenly seems to care too. Hoping she apologies and actually realizes the error of her ways. Something should also be done about the way everyone treated him too. If that just gets ignored or forgotten because it was only there to give him a tragic backstory, that would be the worst thing about this fic yet.
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As long as something is done about his cruel treatment, that isn't being easily forgiven, than the story will be fine. For the most part it seems to be an average written version of the show with an OC added. Nothing special, but nothing too terrible.
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