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mrmidnight


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Hehehe...Button got mashed.:rainbowlaugh:

Two thigns. Why would Luna be a were bear not a were cougar since they are sisters?

and the name changes are throwing me off.

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I made Luna a werebear cause i thought it would be fun, actually in one draft idea she was going to be a werewolf since in nature wolves and cougars actually fight, and I thought it would show the conflict with the sisters, but then I thought what if Luna turned into a big ol teddy bear and thought it was funny.

As for the name changes which part? did I miss something my bad.
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Lol that he did XD the punk deserves it XD

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

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but I would think gentics would make them the same species.

well some were i thought Rainbow Dash and Chrysalis but you gave them normal names and then Silver Spoon to Goldie

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fixed the name
Though in all honesty I like to think that were genes, can be unstable, and really transforms the person into there wereform depending on what kind of person they are, and how they might feel, or its more just a random like one person could be a werefox, one could be a werewolf, hell a wererat. (The rattiest of all rats.)

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I've got my own theories about that.
1) Genetics don't always determine the tribe, (Example: The Cake twins)
2) Were-forms are random in first generation Were-Folk (though I do like the idea of the person/environment playing a factor.)

Kinda fucked what happened to button.

It looks like Cheerlie isn't afraid to go low enough to flirt with a married man to get what she wants

okay Cheerilee is not a vampire then for if neither invited her in then she couldn't come in.

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Q: wait she's not a vampire
Me: Never was clock gun.
Q: Suprise pikachu face.

awesome chapter mate keep it up can't wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

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well with the Bordello she kept asking to be let in. that is a common trope thqat Vampires have to be let into a house. they can't get in on their own. so you hinted at that.

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True though there are other creatures who cant enter places without permission vampires are the most popular

“Hello there, I’m Charlie, it’s nice to meet you.”

“I don’t think so,” Flash growled his hand moving away from his gun. Cheerlie just left giving a playful wave as she watched him. Though Flash looked towards her. Those eyes, he hated them. He wanted to close them. Those eyes were evil.

Which one's her name? Charlie or Cheerilee?

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its cheerlie damn auto correct

“Hmm I’ll have to ask a few questions.” She turned around throwing the sack over her as she headed off. The sounds of screaming coming from the back as she went on inside.

How is she immune to mandrakes' screaming?

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I like to think Mandrake screams only kill humans while other creatures like Minotaurs it gives them a headache or is just that annoying long beep you sometimes get at times.

Whats the worst that could happen

and so it begin

When I saw the title to this story, this is what popped into my head.

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

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So been meaning to ask do you just copy and past the same comment like zarchary?

Flash Sentry may not be my favorite character, but I'd be glad if the idiot didn't fall for Cheerlie's seduction, derpy doesn't deserve it.
and I think that cheerlie may be a demon if it is not a vampire I say there are monster girls that are demons and they do not have to be succubes

A part of Celestia's past has been revealed a bit but it is a preview
And now Applejack's parents will be known, I don't know why, but I think she would be an unusual family.

They go and find the Applejack curse that her parents are dead

Okay so kot a vampire. Interesting you use the male name for the demoness

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Ill be honest i forgot what the female name version was and with this move i just said fuck it

being honest I did not expect this but I feel that it fits more and I think I know who the starlight goes with

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Who would that be lol

Glad to see you’re addressing that thing about the girl. Not sure why that nagged at me so much but glad to see it is hopefully getting resolved

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Got it will remember might be a bit though

Hey when you get to Starlight’s scene, there is a line where you said Jack bit her lips. Is that her nickname?

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dusk shine I say I may be wrong and tell one of her friends because I don't think she will tell a police officer.

nice chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

nice chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

We’re adding mellow-drama to the mix of genres? I’m game

“You’re right, I’ll be able to tell my big sis stories about life in California and some funny things I got into during high school.” Celestia head dropped at that walking off though she gave Dusk a sight dead glare as she simple mouthed: I will get you for this you bastard. Dusk couldn’t help chuckling at this. He made a quick turned heading outside figuring he’d work on his car and check on Spitfire.

Officer Flash walked inside. It was a late night in the office, and so far nothing seemed to be going right. His feet hurt. His back bothering him. Flash just felt tired. He slowly began taking his uniform off tossing the shirt into the laundry room figuring he would send it through the wash tomorrow. Derpy could get it in the dryer while he was working. He just wanted to get in the bathtub and just take a hot soak. He walked over passing the living room where Derpy was eating some popcorn watching an old film Alfred Hitchcock he thought. Flash wasn’t really paying attention.

You need a scene break between these two paragraphs

nice chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

Good chapter and maybe include a (Male on Male) and (Female on Female) next to the (Contain Gay Sex). Just for those who don't want to read the contents. Got nothing against Gay Relationships, just... not into male on male sex. Hope you understand and don't find what I typed offensive.

Starlight story would be good to continue, and maybe the Button Mash / Braeburn side story if possible? I like their relationship dynamic

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