With a whole lot of ideas. And some Spirit. Lets go change the world
After Twilight finds a mysteries object in Cozy Glows cardboard box. Luna investigates and finds out what haunts Cozy Glow while she sleeps. Will Luna be able to stop the nightmares. Will Tirek teach Cozy Glow how to be evil. Find the answers.
Written for the Cozy Glow writing contest #2
It is a sequel to my other cozy glow story.
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Luna was a bit of a dick here.
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Celestia or Twilight needs to slap her!!!!! She is being no better than her dark counterpart; Nightmare Moon, if she keeps up.
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I am curious what you mean? Or should I ask which time was she being mean?
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Interesting. What did she do that was nightmare moon like?
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Most of her conversation with Cozy Glow.
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I understand. Was it because she was eating? I am thinking about writing another chapter to put the conversations into better context. Also it gives me a chance to include glimmer some more.
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No it was her attitude.
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Ok. Thank you for your feedback I do plan on having her attitude change. I intend for her to be a mentor to cozy. Kind of like Yoda when he first met Luke Skywalker.
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Starlight Glimmer1 already answered the problem with Luna. But, I can't believe you didn't notice on how you made Luna over here?
Glad you entered the contest - don't forget to add your story to the Cozy Glow group contest folder!
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Just in the dream sequence?
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Yeah, but mostly her attitude to Cozy Glow. And NOT helping her to save her undead friend? I mean, WTF Luna?! Celestia and Twilight will definitely slap Luna for that.
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Shrugs, I am planning on doing another chapter so who knows. Just out of wondering if I write another chapter would you read it?
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Yeah. 🤷
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Cool. Thank you for your feedback.
I hope the next chapter makes things more clear and puts Lunas actions into a better light.
Thank you for your interest.
I know right?
It's a good thing you can trust all of your friends to make sure stuff like this doesn't happen.
Right Discord? Fizzlepop?
Not going to lie, this was funny, particularly the early bits with Starlight and the Princesses talking.
The latter half of the fic just felt off for some reason, though I'm not sure why.
Perhaps it's that the early fic plays more as a comedy, and is more about these three sniping each other, then it is about Cozy's perspective. Or because there are less jokes in the latter half.
It's also possible that having Twilight there and actually caring about Cozy, helps to blunt Luna's more extreme take on things (which is pretty much unopposed in the later half).
Either way, it was still a interesting premise for the most part. There's proberbly some pacing and dialogue choices that could be revisited for when Luna and Cozy first get to talking, but it's a start.
Because, it's proberbly neither a horn from the modern era, nor one from a foal/filly, since most Unicorn horns we see at that age are much smaller, and most modern Unicorn horns aren't curved.
This of course assumes it is a unicorn horn; it looks a bit misshapen to me to be honest.
Tirek, what happened to you?
You never used to use this kind of language, even when you were being downright abusive or negligent.
I can tell.
That said, I am liking most of your characterizations (especially that of Cozy Glow herself) even if Tirek seems a bit out of it.
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Thank you for the feedback. I plan on there being more cozy glow and Luna. I find that pairing something interesting that I may explore more. Don’t worry I have a feeling that once Cozy Glow proves herself Luna may start to be a better mentor.
Wow, Luna's kind of a bitch.
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Just a little. Lol.
I really enjoyed this. The writing has an innocence to it that is both hilarious and baffling. Luna was, as has been said already, a bitch. Cozy was a petulant child, just like she should be.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Which story is that?
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This is a sequel to https://www.fimfiction.net/story/476106/cozys-first-friend
However it is written so that you do not need to read the first story to understand it.
I died laughing.
This was fun. Thanks for writing it.
In canon yes.
discord, nightmare moon, and tirek really thinks what they did wrong aren't they?
please don't, let's the villainess hold her pride.
dropped in writing quality?
so end with cozy become a willing slave for princess luna, manipulated by wish to help her friend.
pretty dark, luna is either innocence princess knight or manipulative bitch in most fanfic.