Twilight's first blind date is a total success... until her companion asks her to do something dirty. But hey, everyone is doing it! ... right?
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That is hilarious.
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It's one of those stories to get you back to writing after a long writers' block. I know it's not as good as some of the past comedies I wrote, but I hope it made you laugh .
Poor Canter. He has a lot to learn about Twilight Sparkle. Also, Spike is a dead dragon.
In all, this story was pretty funny. One bit of constructive criticism about this paragraph.
That paragraph threw me for a loop because it has "Twilight paled", but nothing about how it was Spike saying everything, so for a moment, I thought it was Twilight, yet it couldn't have been her. Maybe something like "Spike yelled, causing Twilight's hair/fur/coat to turn pale" or something similar would have worked?
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Glad you enjoyed it
As for the criticism... Yeah, now that I re-read it, I think you're right; it can confuse the reader. I removed the 'Twilight paled' part - hopefully, it should be clearer now .
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To be fair, it was relatively easy to piece together who was talking, but it was just a bit jarring seeing "Twilight paled" in a spot where 99 times out of 100, would have been signaling that it was Twilight speaking.
Overall, a small "issue" really, and it could have been something far worse than that.
I knew that was familiar, I remember that advert.
HAHAHA I remember that commercial too.
This was great. And, oddly, no one was really out of character.
And this is not the first story I’ve read pointing to a Twilight with *ahem* extreme bibliophilia. And I think it really might be my new favorite ship.
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I mean, Twilight having a rather... weird connection with books was somewhat hinted even in the show itself, in season 9:
Who knows what else see does with them
That was a lot funnier than I though it would be.