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redandready45


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This story is a sequel to Twilight Sparkle, You're Being Ridiculous!


Featured December 2-3, 2021.

(Now with a trope page)

After being betrayed by everypony around her, Twilight Sparkle plans to become a warlord in the desert wastelands!

Will she rise above her disgrace to become the most powerful and evil warlord ever?

Spoiler alert: no. But it will be fun to watch her try.


An AU of A Canterlot Wedding, where Chrysalis didn't banish Twilight to the caves.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 25 )

Pardon me for asking, but what inspired you to rewrite this story?

I'm going to echo what 11069730 said. Why rewrite it? If it's just editing it, this seems a bit over the top. Still love the story though.

I like the argument between the imposter and the guard

So I read the whole story and found out Twilight can never be evil.

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I downloaded Grammarly, and looking at the comments, I felt the story was not what it should be.

But why do people have apprehension about republishing a story? It is better to edit the chapters and publish them?

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Nah. Honestly, I was just curious. I actually kinda like where this is going.

If the previous version of your story wasn’t up to your standards, that’s perfectly fine. I could honestly relate to things like that, especially with my very first story.

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The point I'm trying to make is this: some iterations of the "Twilight becomes evil" story can be really powerful and compelling works. Sci-Twi becoming Midnight Sparkle is a perfect canon example, because she does go through a lot of trauma.

But I don't think the wedding rehearsal incident is enough to actually turn Pony Twilight evil.

Hm, I don't know, it looks a little edgy. I don't know if I might get scared reading it.:fluttercry:

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What’s the stories of Twilight going evil do you recommend?

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The Immortal Game is one. In that story, Twilight suffers what amounts to possession.

Her Inner Demons is a good character examination of Sci-Twi and how the abuse she endured drove her to become Midnight Sparkle.

Comment posted by Sunset-Shimmer deleted Dec 2nd, 2021

The part of Chrysalis will be played by John Cleese.

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Yeah, I do get the arrogant and pig-headed vibe from Chrysalis that John Cleese has mastered.

If she had her own show, she'd be Basil Fawlty: a pretentious nitwit who ruins herself with his own narcissistic ego.

They really should learn to trust Pinkie's instincts.

Someday someone is going to sneak something on to her lists and she will follow it without thought. This will be either humorous, apocalyptic, or both.

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I'd put 'nose-boop all your friends without consent' to her list:twilightoops:

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That could be a nice continuation of this fic.

And they promised to really really listen when she is concerned.

"Quiet!"

"Bu-,"

"Quiet."

"Just give me-,"

"Quiet."

"But-,"

"Before you start, that was a pre-emptive 'quiet.'"

"What did the pony who crossed the road say?" Chrysalis asked.

"What?"

"Quiet."

"Here's a story about a pony named "Quiet!" Chrysalis mocked.

"But-,"

"Quiet."

Chrysalis: (speaks faux Neighponese)... Subtitle: "Quiet".

"Should we go to Ponyville and bring her back to the wedding?" Rarity asked with concern. "I know Twilight acted out of sorts, but getting kicked out of one of the most important days in her brother's life is a bit harsh."

And this is why Rarity is best pony :raritywink:

Twilight looked over her warlord list. "Make a deranged proclamation of vengeance against my former friends and family. Check." Twilight was about to pull her head back into the passenger car, only for the window to slam shut on her neck. "Conductor!" Twilight gasped, her windpipe slightly crushed by the window, her panic making her unable to use magic on the window. "Help!"

Well at least Twilight has her list down, execution could use some work though.

"Well, that's what happens in the books," Twilight defended feebly.

Oh Book Horse :unsuresweetie:

"It was part of my to-do list," Twilight told the stallion as if that explained everything. "I figured I would be reimbursed through the pillaging I would do once I amassed my warlord army." The stallion just stared at the mare with disbelief.

This man doesn't get paid enough to deal with this bullshit.

"Are you kidding," Hard Tack muttered, "she let herself get robbed on purpose . If we throw her out, she'll be dead in an hour."

I hope getting stabbed isn't on that checklist..

Twilight could probably succeed in her goal just by being dorky enough so that no one has the heart to tell her that her plan is stupid. :rainbowlaugh:

Cute story. Funny take on the "Twilight becomes evil because of Canterlot Wedding" story.

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Realistically, getting kicked out of a wedding wouldn't drive Twilight to suddenly become a monster. Evil Twilight stories are very interesting, but the events of Canterlot Wedding are not enough to break Twilight.

Here, she's too naive, sheltered, and kind to become a monster truly. Her trying to be evil would be adorably pitiful.

Thanks for taking the time to read this.

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