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DashieFan1


I'm a girl who lives in Midland,Texas

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Hope Ya'll like this!

Just one question, how old is Soarin'?

1241898 I don't know if I should like it or hate it. Considering it's humanized ponies, I hate it. But it has Rainbow Dash, so I like it. But then the plot is pretty bad, so I hate it... and then it has Soarin in it... so I like it.

Romance.

Okay I don't like. But nice try, though. I'll give it a like for effort. Just, in the future, write something with a little more... I don't know... difference from the majority. That is what people like to see.

And a helpful tip for commas; write them like I did in this comment.

'Rainbow Dash is turning nineteen years old! Her boyfriend,Soarin,doesn't know what to get her! Will Soarin find Rainbow Dash's Perfect Gift or not?'

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'Rainbow Dash is turning nineteen years old and her boyfriend, Soarin, doesn't know what to get her! Will Soarin be able to find Rainbow Dash's Perfect Gift?'

Other than that, I didn't really find anything bad about it. A few spelling and grammatical errors here and there. But nothing a little super glue, duct tape, and determination won't fix.

Another note for you; make sure to proof read your stuff before publishing. It can REALLY help your ratings.

Good luck!

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1243974 Probably twenty or something like that.

1243999 She has wings in the story. Humans don't have wings.
1244024 Are you sure there're ready for marriage?

1244030 Okay, so it's anthro. That is the same as humanized, so I hate it. And I never said that they were ready for marriage.

Didn't like it but I didn't hate it.

1244038 If you hate it, there's a buckin' Dislike button. And I was talking to the author. :ajbemused:

1244089 I'm not the author. You replied to my comment so I replied to yours.

It's a'ight.

Rainbow in this story: 19
Soarin': Looks about 30 to me.

:twilightoops:

1244038it is not huminized it is just the picture

I really loved this story it was soooooo sweet i absolutely loved it thaank u it was an amazing read :heart::yay::ajsmug::pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss::raritystarry::twilightsmile::scootangel::rainbowkiss::derpytongue2::trollestia::moustache::heart::heart:::heart::heart::heart::heart:

1244249 thank you i will try to write more soon! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowwild: DASHIEFAN1 IS OUT, PEACE! :yay:

Don't you mean.... COLTfriend? :trollestia:

so any way no one realized
that in this story
Soarin is suposta be 19

proof in this quote from the letter Derpy drops off
"Now that you're nineteen, you're finally even with me"

context clues people! learn to use them!

also there is nothing humanized about this at all i saw hoof used in there ...and somepony and Soarin picks things up with his mouth once

proof of hoof
- Spitfire placed a hoof on her shoulder.-
proof of holding things in mouth
-Rooting through another bag, he pulled out a disposable camera with his mouth.-

all those are direct lines from the story

so any way now that my rant about unfounded rants is over

cool story bro

awwwww!
somehow I knew what the present was.

d'aww!
It's my birthday, she thought, tears filling her eyes as she stared at his door, And I'll cry if I want to.

"Mmhmm, by the way, how's Cheese?" Pinkie smiled.

That's better.:pinkiehappy:

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