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Equestria isn’t what it used to be.

The changes are too incremental for a normal pony to notice. But for Princess Twilight Sparkle, now several hundred years old, life is becoming an incomprehensible blur.

Word of a three-eyed sorcerer wielding a strange new form of magic propels the princess on a journey into the ancient wilderness of the Equestrian north. In a cabin hundreds of miles removed from civilization, Twilight grapples with the strange politics of cattle farms, the morality of infanticidal deer, and the raw memories of ponies pushed to the margins of a rapidly changing world.

Equestria isn’t what it used to be. Maybe it could be better.


A meditation on generational trauma and change.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 18 )

Very good, very strange. A wonderful story. The only bit of 'criticism' I could manage would be a request that you use more chapters. One giant one is a bit unwieldy.

Sweet Celestia, that story was amazing. Read it on my flight back from the convention so I can't leave a full review now, but I will definitely do so later.

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Thank you homie! Glad to hear you survived 🔥Fire Con🔥

Well Jaxie recommended this so it's going on my Read Soon list.

Relatively early in reading the story, I was planning to say, "I enjoyed reading about how Toeyak convinces Kronr to accept help instead of dying in the snow." This is still true, but I think after reading the story, I like the whole damn thing.
(A few more comments in PM.)

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Jaxie was right.
This is the first story in a while that I've read on fimfiction.net and suddenly want to tell people to go read. :twilightsmile:

Little typo? I think you meant “mycelial”.

Ah, and there's a near-duplicated section in the middle… from “Twilight shook her head” to “started to glow”.

But this is amazing.

Jaxie pointed me here, and a have to agree with him. There's a lot of thematic depth to unpack here, such that it reads more like the sort of literature one would study in school than a fanfic. While I don't think the actions of the plot needed work, I do think you could've put more into describing how the characters moved and the setting itself, as opposed to just the current scene's mood.

This story broke me in a lingering way, step by step as I read, and I mean this as praise. I don't think I am going to be able to forget this one, or shake how it made it feel, for quite awhile.

10942444 10942400 Good catches, thank you!

Is there some sort of implication, symbolism, or big reveal I'm missing with the glow-in-the-dark handle?

10948336 It's a symbol of hope! When the world grows dark, the light must come from within.

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I'm embarrassed to say my first thought was Radium, I actually googled if it tasted like menthol haha! Came here from Jaxies review and it's certainly going to stick with me for a while. Certainly a lot to think about

10953960 Hahaha thankfully not radium! Otherwise all our protagonists would have lost their teeth. Thanks for the kind words :twilightsmile:

Such a fantastic story! I loved the way you described Kronr's and Toeyak's relationship build up, so needless to say I may have choked up a bit at the end :ajsleepy:

There's alot to unpack here for me and I don't think I'll be able to ever do it full justice, but I can say this is story flows like few stories I've read.

There's lots that isn't explained, something that really works to this stories advantage.

Very well done!

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