Octavia gets a chance of a lifetime that could affect both her and Vinyl's relationship.
When you get that one, big moment; you never let it go. Octavia is going to have to learn the hard way how she will deal with this and handle Vinyl. Sometimes you have to make a decision...
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Awesome so far, can't wait for the next chapter!
First off, may I say, what an awesome story!
can't wait for the next chapters and whatever happens afterwards 
and what a mad 1 chapter! Near 10,000 words! 
just a few things though...
Some of the things that get me is that they're "best buds"? Yet they sleep together? Tavi got Vinyl to wear a suit? Vinyl has no qualms about going into the bath room while Tavi is showering? Repeated 'darling' and 'dearie' keep popping up. Vinyl makes romantic plans in a park and hands Tavi a flower.
And here
should be "her"
in the previous sentence, the words "bad influence" weren't mentioned
do you mean 'Our' or "Are"?
I'll let you decide to do as there are a couple ways this sentence could go
don't need a capital after an ellipses
five past
Their
you don't really need that last part
we don't know his name. He is usually referred as 'the barcolt'
snort
here
no closing quotation mark
1503145 My goodness, you're right.... everythings starting to add up! It's almost as if there's SHIPPING in a pony fanfic on the internet!
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I sense sarcasm... How much am I off by?
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Ooh! I simply can't wait for the next post!
Please update, as soon as possible! I do love me a good Vinyl/Octavia fic and this seems just perfect! 
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First off: thank you for mess ups in grammar. I try my best to be as accurate as possible. I'll be sure to cover those up later, or when I do get the chance in the near future.
On the relationship part: Everyone has their own tastes in how it evolves or has flourished. My take is they are in a committed one currently, but Octavia likes to keep it simple and smart. She's an upstanding mare after all, can't go showing off the goods yet
On a wider note I'm glad to see so much enthusiasm for this. I made a lot of errors. More so in the flow that I will correct in later installments. This took longer than I'd have liked and is shorter than I intended. To be more blunt: This is only half of what the original was going to be. Time is a wonderful thing when you don't have a lot of it haha.
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No problem. For 10,000 words, there wasn't that much. Most people I proof for have as many if not more mistakes in 4k words.
Ahh... So they just casual? That makes more sense!
The original was meant to be 20k??
WHA?!?
And all writing takes time and it's always longer than expected
Time is even worse when you have a lot of it, and nothing to do
May I say once again, great work! And keep 'em coming!
Good start my friend, I look forward to more.
HOW THE FUCK DID THIS STORY GET ONTO THE FEATURED PAGE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
1504568 but then...ponies pls ;_;
Also suddenly I'm on the featured page
PLEASE! I'M NOT DECENT YET (puts on hardhat)
>25 likes
>featured
wat
You have my infinite interest, here.
"Manehatten."
shouldn't it be "to be her first"? :P
1506541 ah those pesky mistakes. All over the place aren't they?
I tend to have "sticky fingers". good eye...too good
That seems like une faute d'orthographe...
A dress [translating] une robe which is a feminine word... and l'adjectif is well conjugated here..yet, it seems wrong, reading the whole sentence in english except le mot petite...
1506594 ;_; I'm so sorry daddy! I was just trying to say how slim and yet elegant it was! Please be forgiving
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Ce n'etai qu'une petite inconvenience et non une erreur...
It's ok..
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lol a few mistakes out of almost 10k words seem pretty good to me :P
Since my day is almost through I'd just like to thank all y'all for the positive feedback and all that. I'm not too sappy, but I did contemplate shedding ONE manly tear. I only have so many, need to use them sparingly. So ya...ferrets or something or other
oh wow insta fav and watch
Quite a few mistakes in here. Symbols that ought to be cymbals, unless Crash plays representations of things. a "further" that should be "farther" (the latter has to do with distance; the former is a verb.) I saw an "excite" that should've been an "exit" and a complement that is really a compliment. (The latter is a nice thing to say. The former is either the inverse of something (math) or a pairing, e.g. "the wine complements the fish.")
I'm not sure what's going on with the names, either, We start out with typical pony fare: Winds, Crash, etc., then suddenly Cornelius Harsk and Ms. Taft? Jim's Pub? It's awfully incongruous. It's really hard to tell what's going on with Vinyl and Octavia's relationship, especially because every time Octavia calls Vinyl "dearie" she sounds like somepony's grandmother...
Anyway, yeah, a lot of problems, but I did very much enjoy the hellish descriptiin of that cello. I almost feel like it should be taken out back and beaten into a pulp, Office Space style. Might I recommend more careful proofreading and cooyediting next time 'round.
1509499 but of course
However this was mostly an opening, a beginning to something more tragic. Soon a cacophony of disasters may or may not occur. Names are just fickle if that, so don't be surprised if suddenly Larry The Snuffledarglepuss suddenly enters the fray. It's all leading up to something more momentous than current.
First chapters are always terribly annoying :P
Is there a way give octavia a really big hug because she needs one.
looking forward to more
Very good, can't wait for more!
Just out of question but...how long do you think it'll take for you to update? :P
i'm kinda, sorta, slightly dying on the inside with a lack of story updates Q.Q
1542325 You're in luck, just got back from my DECA stuff to answer this haha!
It is all dependent on the amount of time I give myself. I am very critical when it comes to my word usage and crap, detail and crap, crap and crap, etc. So most of my time is spent wondering how I can put scenes or dialogue. Fear not, I am quick to lose writer's block if I am reading a lot (spoiler alert: I read a lot)
I don't expect more than next week latest for the next part (or possibly something else!...just wait)
So ya...Soon(tm)
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deca as in the marketing student thingamablob? o.o
1545617 The one and only. As the great and powerful PR Director, I gotta attend most events and record all the amazing stuff I don't get!
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o.o
wow
More please
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>.> <.< I have no idea what you are talking about *starts shuffling papers away*
REALLY!?
NO CLUE...eh heh heh
Well, THAT took a while to update.
I know that feel, bro. This was not what I expected my favorites update to be. Pleasant surprise. It was a great chapter though. Your work paid off.
Octavia's considering foals but Vinyl thinks they aren't worth it? Sounds like a great idea for a fanfic.
woa woa woa woa woa woa woa woa woa woa woa woa woa woa... Just woa... Hang on a second. There was an update and I didn't see it? HOW IN THE HELL DID THAT HAPPEN!?
Sorry this took so long folks. I'm reaaaaaaaaaally bad at scheduling myself
But I hope y'all enjoyed this smidgen of an update. Any comments, questions, concerns? (woah...I sound like a spokesperson for soap)
2540091 er...soap?