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ChappyHooves


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This story takes place in a real world setting where the characters from the show are young adult humans in their mid to late 20s living in a typical rural American town in the Midwest.
Inspired by an art piece by johnjoseco titled "Oh AJ..."

Rated Human for humanized characters. NOT HUMAN IN EQUESTRIA
Romance for Fluttershy and Big Macintosh shipping.
Sad for Applejack dealing with a loss.

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 113 )

what a nice read :twilightsmile:

Humanized ponies always gets me thinking about life and what-if's and just gets me all depressed :fluttershysad:

5 stars

#2 · Dec 22nd, 2011 · · ·

That was a very nice read. 5 stars

I hope there are more chapters, I know it says complete, but i feel at least an epilog would be fitting.
Thats just to big of a cliffhanger to leave us at.
I want to know what happened.
I WANT IT NOW! :applecry:

Sweet jesus

10,000 words :twilightoops:

I will read anyway! :rainbowkiss:

#5 · Dec 22nd, 2011 · · ·

You did a great job here, i'm not usually one to read humanized pony stories but this was sure a solid one. I really need to make an account so I can add you to a watch list for future stories. Well done, and I look forward to many more.

That was a wonderful story.

Everyone was very much in character, and the way you described there human appearance is very much what I would imagine them too look like.

5 stars :)

One thing, it's Welsh, not welch.

Welch is grape juice :rainbowkiss:

81718

Agghh, Shame on me! As a corgi owner myself I should have caught that!

Awesome read! Shame there isn't more, I see great potenital for this storyline.

81653
Well I made the Christmas part as an epilogue. My first draft ended on just the walk home, but it just felt too depressing to end with that.

You think I should try another human story? I only did this one as a one shot because of the art work was so good, and I want to stretch my hooves at fic writing.

81778
Yeah, This is one of the very few human story's i actually liked, I say keep going at it.
Remember, whenever you post a new story, i shall be one of the first to read it (hopefully) as long as my email dosent break or i go an vacation when you post a new one.
You best fill my email with good story's.

this is not compleat. what about rainbow?

This should be submitted to Equestria Daily. Indeed, there is not enough great Applejack/Fluttermac centric fics on that site. On the story, bravo! I applaud it , and wish there was more in it's quality, aside from grammar and spelling mistakes, of course.

(i'm a sucker for good fluttermac anyway):facehoof:

81778

I would mind for me.

I'm not one for Humanized as well but you seemed to have made me read this all the way through and that's skill

Awesome, nothing less. 5 stars and to favorites.

81828

Wow! This is a huge compliment, Thank you! :pinkiehappy:

I made myself to pull this story from the editing limbo it was in and submit it. So far in the first six hours of posting I haven't regretted it.

I am aware that their are still spelling and grammar issues. You can tell by the date in the beginning I completed the story in September and have been editing and correcting since then. I'm gonna continue to spit polish the spelling and grammar over the next few days.

Thank you again! I never though someone would suggest EQ-daily. I'm really flattered!

Formatting could use some work, but it's still a decent story.

Aw, that was so awesome! :ajsleepy:

I feel fuzzy on the inside:twilightsmile:

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Yeah formatting has difficult over my last two stories. Sorry about that, I learned a valuable lesson though. I wrote them on my old MS word 2003 program. Uploaded them to Google docs, and then ported them to FIMFiction. I had to re-paragraph and retype every indentation every single transfer.


Awesome!

Good story dude!

Really good fanfic!

On the next one how about making them wereponies instead of humans, that way they could have three forms. Pony, giant humanoid pony, human. You know like they have in that comic Gold Digger yeah.

Maybe you could make Equestria part of Jade.

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81818

Rainbow Dash is fine.
Reread the phone conversation with Applejack. She spend the night in the hospitable tripped out and drugs and is released the next day. :rainbowwild:

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*tripped out on drugs*
There's a little sample of my writing is like without editing. Yeah.....

A good sad, yet heartwarming story. I did notice a few mistakes though – you call Apple Bloom 'Apple Blossom' maybe a quarter or a fifth of the time.:applecry:

awww that was good. probably not the best thing to read before going too a party, makin me all sober and serious and what not, but hey...good story all the same.

Highly enjoyable. A few grammar & spelling errors here and there, Apple Bloom's name changed to Apple Blossom a couple of times, but a solid story. Thoroughly enjoyed it.

there were a lot of times where you wrote apple blossom instead of apple bloom. but besides that, this was quite good

I recently had to put my own dog down. It was the most painful thing I have had to do in my life. This story seemed to help me a bit though for some reason.

It was well written, though there were some small spelling errors here and there. And I was a bit confused at first when they started calling Apple Bloom Apple Blossom. But I quickly mended that in my head. Great read 5stars.

Honestly, with your skill, I wouldn't mind seeing a series of this. Human ponies give the story an interesting atmosphere, and your characterizations were perfect. 10/5

Awww. That was such a sweet story. I loved the little bit of fluttermac you threw in there, and it made me tear up...D:
Loved it. I'll be expecting more quality writing from you.

Hey thanks for catching the Apple Blossom stuff guys. It would have taken me a while to catch it.:applecry:
I think I fixed all of them.

Plus thank you everyone for the comments and the favorites. This has made my Christmas!:pinkiehappy:

Woa wat dafaq i gotta read this prefect recort from 27 people

Fireflies wins. FLAWLESS VICTORY! FATALITY! (From being so awesome)

There should be more "Humanized Pony" stories

@ChappyHooves

Wow. This was really awesome!!! I've been desperately trying to get a basis for a FImfic, but couldn't find one. I'm not saying that I'm going to use your story at all, but I never even thought about Anthropony as a possibility. So yeah, thanks for the inspiration, and amazing story as well!! 10/10 for characters, and plotline, and general storytelling awesomeness!!!

FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU- I rated it five stars and the stars went from 5.0 to 4.9. I bad person.

I like it. Not much more to say... Poor Winona
:fluttercry:

this story was amazing its not to sad or overly happy its just the right mix :rainbowkiss:

It is nice to read a story about a family farm that actually shows a bit of knowledge about the subject.
I love how you developed the characters as people. Even the part with Winona, though sad, was well done.
Wonderful story. Hope there will be more.

AWWWWWW!!! :fluttercry::fluttercry:Ohhhh that made me cry!! Poor AJ!! It's always hard losing a pet, especially making the choice to put one down, and...awwwww!! And what a great big bro Big Mac is! I always wanted a big brother like himself when I was younger. :) And I loved how Fluttershy got up the courage to kiss him! :):)

This was so well written with them as humans. You kept them all in character so well that I had to remind myself to picture them as humans and not ponies!! LOL!

Great story man, its good to see humanized ponies in non-porn stories.
Anyway the dialogue seemed very natural, and you got all their personalities perfectly.
A very good read.:pinkiehappy::

much as i hate humanization, ima read this. :pinkiecrazy: but first, the phrase "Not a day goes by when she didnt shirk her duties" means that she shirked her duties every day, or, in layman's terms, every day she be shirkin. i only bothered to say that because it took me like 10 minutes to figure out exactly what it would mean, and now that ive discovered it, you should know of the fruits of my mental labor. ah well, here's to hoping this is great! :moustache:

and success! you did a great job with this, which is more than i wouldve thought possible. i wish i could think straight though, the only character i could actually envision as a human throughout the whole story was spike. :moustache: but hey, what can i say? you wrote this beautifully, even with a mess of comma errors. :twilightblush: i wouldve liked the winona death to be sadder cause i like crying, but again, you still did the whole thing great. and you should definitely write more of these. there's so many storylines to explore.. :eeyup:

It made me cry :fluttercry:
So so so good though. hit close to home.

aw!!! Poor Winona! :raritycry:

A really heart warming story! javascript:smilie(':rainbowkiss:');

The death of Winona is one of the few times I've ever cried while reading. I've read some of the saddest stories on this website and not even batted an eye...
No, tears didn't overflow, but my eyes were becoming wet.
It made me think back to earlier this year, when my cat was hit by a car, and last year when my other cat had to be but down... That was the saddest moment of my memory.
I probably wouldn't have even felt this if I hadn't been listening to my Kingdom Hearts soundtrack. It just so happened that Missing You - Namine came on right as they went to Fluttershy.
Song is available here: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Eh6VmD8jIWM

The death of Winona is one of the few times I've ever cried while reading. I've read some of the saddest stories on this website and not even batted an eye...
No, tears didn't overflow, but my eyes were becoming wet.
It made me think back to earlier this year, when my cat was hit by a car, and last year when my other cat had to be but down... That was the saddest moment of my memory.
I probably wouldn't have even felt this if I hadn't been listening to my Kingdom Hearts soundtrack. It just so happened that Missing You - Namine came on right as they went to Fluttershy.
Song is available Here

A fantastic story. 5 Stars.
More!

In the words of Frank West: FANTASTIC

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That was very helpful, I just fixed it, thank you!

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