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Twilight is receiving an invitation to Hogwart’s school of Witchcraft and Wizardry. As expected, she could not make herself refuse this offer.

Books upon books, reading, studies and the opportunity to make new friends.

Twilight is making her way to the Pub known as the Leaky Cauldron, and from there onto the Diagon Alley.

With her saddlebags stuffed to the brim, she sets off on a shopping spree.

With a list of required items, she is stepping out on the street, looking for the items listed.

While some of the items appears to be strange, other items will be just up her alley.

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Illustrated by: ??
Written by: Kentavritsa
Edited by: Kentavritsa
Re-edited by: ???

Chapters (22)
Comments ( 59 )

WHAT WERE YOU THINKING GIVING PINKIE A WAND?! NOW THE OMNIVERSE IS DOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:twilightoops:

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Wait, just the Multivese; then we should be fine, at least for now.
If you don't mind, I will have to challenge your expectations.

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Are you nuts?! THE OMNIVERSE IS BIGGER THAN THE MULTIVERSE!:facehoof:

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oh, but how silly of me..
then it is an even grander party.
but the point still stands; you should be safe, all the same ..

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Somehow, I don't feel any safer. Instead, I feel even more worried than before.:facehoof:














Please don't tell me Discord is involved.:twilightoops:

Awwwwww, I was hoping her wand wood would be Elder.:applecry:

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"The Elder Wand?"
"That old stage prop..
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Disco RD?
Is the regular RD(Rainbow Dash) acceptable?
Ps: Sorry for the delay, but I had to avoid a spoiler chance..

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I was referring to the wand WOOD, not the actual wand itself. There's a difference, ya'know. Also I was talking about Discord, as in the Spirit of Chaos and Disharmony?

I saw you put 'Good buy' in several places in this chapter. You probably need to correct them.

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Oh, the Wood; I missed that.
Sorry, if I am not quite the Expert Wand-maker and I don't exactly have the manual available either.
Based on the Cross, I am playing with a few ideas relating to the respective character over what the Canon says too(I guess)


Oh, yeah; I figured, but it just was so much more funnier this way.(had to update the story, or edit in the name.
While I may have included him before, I am not sure if he will be included here.
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Ah(consider these Easter Eggs)
but I will be edding these things out, as I see them.

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If he is proud of my endevours, all the better. :pinkiesmile:
Though I guess this chapter did get a bit chaotic; with everyone interacting, in this manner? :raritystarry:
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Now, I just hope I can keep the steam up..:twilightsmile:
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Ah, yeach; such is life, but I will continue to do my best to improve and entertain.:rainbowderp:

Good chapter! Less chaotic than before but still good. Dashie is proud.

And thus Draco was the first Malfoy to go to space. :pinkiegasp: Too bad he has to keep it secret. :twilightsmile:

I liked a charming charm, but I think the majority of how it was worded was a bit confusing at times. Don’t get me wrong I still liked it, but I think at times wrong words were used or the sentences were put together improperly.

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I guess I have heard this sentiment before, so I guess I have grown used to it,
but if you care to elaborate; maybe I can correct the issues, or make it clearer as to what I had in mind?
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Well, I guess that just happened. Unforeseen and unforeseeable consequenses.
The Wizardry community is ill equipped to handle Muggler's Physics.
Holding his silence is prbably for the better.
Seems he is, or will be cornered on all sides here. Consequences are not friendly.
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This is Rainbow's Event, so I guess Loyalty is in the fore.
As opposed to Pinkie Pie, or discord; where fun is being had; in a rambunctious, and oftenChaotic manner.

Duel! duel! duel! Go Twilight!

The author's note should be really on top.
I still don't know what is happening.

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Thanks for mentioning it, guess I forgot to push that up to the top, should be fixed by now.
Madam Pinkie is happening, but with a bit of a chaotic flare.(if I could say so, myself)
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A duel just may be cheduled, who's to say?
Oh, Madam Pinkie of course.

Sybill: GET THAT PINK MONTROSITY OUT OF MY CLASSROOM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! All in all, a great chapter, loved the PokeMon references, keep up the good work mellonin.

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Madam Pinkie is a bit on the wild side, and Pinkie does leana bit heavily on the Element of Chaos here.
That refference is Obligatory in context. at least, it is how I read it.
Though I guess the Pink Antics, is a bit like Screaming in the Library or Cursing in the Church?


Let us see, wha the next chapter has to offer the story?

I am so confused as to what even happened in this chapter other than Pinkie juggling premonitions and Snape fainting from seeing whatever was happening

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Pinkie Pie, is being Pinkie Pie is just in a day's work, isn't it?
Though I don't picture it as a day's work for Snape, watching Pinkie being Pinki?
(or juggling the crystal balls)


On the other hand,I hope you will enjoy the next chapter, as it is just up.
Either way, if anything is confusing or something; just let me no, so I can address and deal with it.

Where did Twilight got the horn from is a question?

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I thought that was explained in the first chapter: "Twilight Buys a Wand",
but I guess it could be delved further into, exploring and explaining in greater depth?

Not saying the following chapters: "Pinkie Pie Buys a wand" and "Rainbow Dash Buys a Wand"
explain anything more, than had already been put forth?

I need to read these chapters, again; to see what I missed.

I don't understand what's going on with the deers. This is what I think happened:

  1. Twilight cast a deer patronus, which attacks Squirrel.
  2. The deer is talking and reading a book casually.
  3. Twilight casts a second patronus without the first disappearing.

Really confusing stuff here.

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It's not explained at all.

“Here..” she offers; “Could you make a wand out of this?” she inquires, as she is presenting a perfectly shaped triple spire unicorn horn.

Twlight gives the shop keeper a unicorn horn for her wand.
Which poor unicorn lost it's horn? Or did she get it from the morgue?

Maybe you weren't saying that she gave a horn, but that she showed her own?
Though a later sentence says she shows it, so I doubt that's the case.

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It's not explained at all.

“Here..” she offers; “Could you make a wand out of this?” she inquires, as she is presenting a perfectly shaped triple spire unicorn horn.

Twlight gives the shop keeper a unicorn horn for her wand.
Which poor unicorn lost it's horn? Or did she get it from the morgue?

Maybe you weren't saying that she gave a horn, but that she showed her own?
Though a later sentence says she shows it, so I doubt that's the case.


Twlight gives the shop keeper a unicorn horn for her wand.
Which poor unicorn lost it's horn? Or did she get it from the morgue?

This refers to the Local Unicorns of Britain, not the Ponies of Equestria.
This is not what I was referring to, as the hinted explanation; she stepped out and bout that horn at the local appocary.

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I don't understand what's going on with the deers. This is what I think happened:

  1. Twilight cast a deer patronus, which attacks Squirrel.
  2. The deer is talking and reading a book casually.
  3. Twilight casts a second patronus without the first disappearing.

Really confusing stuff here.


Based on who Squirel is, is it such an outlandish/impossible attack?
Whether it is her purpose, or the patronus does it based on the natur of Patrunus?

Since Deer Patronus was mentiond(in the book), and on personal accounts aside from Twilight; I felt the Deer would be just right.

With Twilight being the element of magic and overall Exceptional, I felt it approprate for her to manage a spectacular Patronus too.

Since she never canceled the first/original patronus, she was casting a second independent one of the same type.

Voldemort is going to kidnap Twilight sooner or later.

Pinkie learns how to replicate...

This school is doomed.

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According to the Canon of the Harry Potter; it is inevitable, that voldemort is showing up.
Just that some of his best cards, just were taken out of the deck. Remember Quirel's passing?


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Care to elaborate?


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Pinkie Pie learns how to..
and there is bound to be consequences, grave consequenses?
(and Discord is rubbing his hands, in Glee)


10939128
Uhm, which is biggetr: the Twilightverse, or the Pinkieverse?


10939154
Empthasis on "should be".


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Not sure I want to compare these with th HP variants of wands.
Ps: Sorry; I lost my book on Wandmaking, swo I have to improvaise a bit on these things.
Aside from the joy of implementing a bit of Pony Magic in this case too?

Color coding text... Stop doing that!
Believe it or not, it's actually discriminative to people who have difficulty discerning colors.
As for myself, I have dyslexia. The wrong color or too vibrant a color can make text impossible for me to read.

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Care to Elaborate?
and I hope you do realize I colour the text for my own benefiit first and foremost.
on a second note, you have to Read the story; as opposed to listen to it, to even know the colours are even there.
Besides; why are the Ponies colourful in the show in the first place; do you see the differences, when you follow an Episode?

Basically the only reason everyone thought animagi to be rare because people are to lazy to register with the ministry.

It's so much easier to read when the text isn't colored.

Another piece of pointless trivia from me. Patronus is completely pointless spell outside of defending yourself against flying demons from hell. That's literally the only reason it's exist.

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It's so much easier to read when the text isn't colored.

Assuming you can't see the Colour, or it is not looking as everyone is "supposed" to see the colour?
What I am aiming for, is the highest "Contrast" I can manage.
I am aiming to please Both Celestia and Luna here, and I have multiple screens perspectives to make sure it actually is perfectly readable(to me).

Another piece of pointless trivia from me. Patronus is completely pointless spell outside of defending yourself against flying demons from hell. That's literally the only reason it's exist.
While utterly useless, it is still Canon(at least, as far as I know)
I recall it being mentioned that James Potter(Harry's Father) has a Stag for patronus(or, is it had, since he is dead)

Please, don't ever use colored text. It hurts the eyes, and depending on room-light and if you have night-=mode turned on, it is very difficult to read. Not to mention that people with variations of some colour-blindess can't see the letters well-enough to read them. I had to copy this page to a text editor to read it.

Well, now that I read it,
First, you claim this is Ollivander's POV, yet the seventh paragraph is Twilight thinking to herself . . . which is most definitely NOT Ollivander's POV.

I won't rag about your grammar as it is obvious that English is not your first language.

One quick note. “Clip, clop; clip, clop..” is heard, as she is . . . " That is not used in writing. When you have a sentence with action following, it should be “Clip, clop; clip, clop,” is heard, as she is . . . ". So every place where you have ".." should be a comma unless the next sentence is a NEW sentence, the it should be a simple period.

Right off the bat, you have this as Ollivander's POV and he immediately knows not only Pinkie's name, but her other name of Diane. This is terrible writing. If the story is from one person's POV, then you cannot use the names of people he has never met, even though you and the readers know who this person is.

You state this is in Twilight's POV, but then you say five lines in . . . "The noises continue to raise in volume, until the door to my shop opens up and the next Witch in a pointy hat enters." I did not know Twilight owned a shop! You go from the Malfoys outside to the shopkeeper inside. Very confusing.

By the way, you do know you can edit these chapters after they are written to fix the flaws, right?

“What in Merlin’s beard; if only that had been a Patronus?” she now gasps, as the Wand is safely out of the way.

“A Phoenix Patronus?” I inquire.

What on earth are they talking about? You only mention:

“Okay, here goes!” Dash mumbles, as she is grasping the Wand; ”..feels a bit warm, but very comfortable to hold..” Dash offers, to the point.

“Apple-wood, eleven inches, stiff; Phoenix-feather core!” I offer, as she is performing.

“Phoenix-feather?” she is inquiring, while waving the Wand before her.

The light in the room flickers, as the room starts growing hotter; the front of the Wand sputters and gives of a bright aura.

“Yes, exactly; a very special bird, but I felt it could be right for you!” I respond.

“Oh..” Dash sighs, as she is dropping the Wand on the counter.

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You state this is in Twilight's POV

Thank you, for bringing this issue to my attention.
Since this is Mr. Ollivander's POV, 'adjust this right now.

By the way, you do know you can edit these chapters after they are written to fix the flaws, right?

Yes, and it's something do do every once in a while.

Ollivander's POV and he immediately knows not only Pinkie's name, but her other name of Diane.

So we need more explanation, than that he remembers everyone he sold a wand to. Would it be idea, to take this up in a later chapter, explaining how he is recognizing her? I probably need a good while to consider the best way to explain this.

First, you claim this is Ollivander's POV, yet the seventh paragraph is Twilight thinking to herself . . . which is most definitely NOT Ollivander's POV.

I understand most people only acknowledges First Person in limited
Why can't I extend First Person, when you can have Omniscient?
(if you don't mind me asking?)

That is not used in writing

How would one write interupted or ongoing "speach"
The idea is that a short sample of the sound is presented to represent an action rather than writing out every instance in this case.

Thanks for taking the time to leave these comments!

neet story, there's some tense and verbage issues making it difficult to follow without rereading it a couple of times but otherwise not bad

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Sorry, for taking so long.
If you care to elaborate, or point out specific issues; it would be much appreciated and much easier for me to deal with all the issues.

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While I have not yet read this story, I would recommend using Grammarly or the Microsoft Word editor. While neither are perfect, they are good at catching most mistakes

Part of this sounded almost cult like

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