Rainbow Dash's thousand word flight school essay unintentionally leads a pony who looks up to her down a dark path. 
Truly tragic. 
Content Notice: (although it should be obvious...) Cheating.
Era: Mostly Pre-Season 1, After the jump-cut to the campfire: Season 7 (Dash joins the Wonderbolts in Season 6).
Image Rights: Discussed here. Image by delapouite with text modifications and the insert of this site's rainbow icon. 
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Upvoted, mostly because it was a cute story. A little bit lazily written though.
It was not very kind of Fluttershy to force Rainbow Dash to cheat like that
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Thank you! Re: the second part of your comment- is that because of Fluttershy repeating herself or something else?
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The dialogue just feels very basic, even for Rainbow Dash. Especially when it comes to some of the written bits.
She's a jock, not a foreigner. She knows how to string a sentence together, even if it's just endless self congratulatory praise.
This story would work very well as a prequel to The Jet Powered Pegasus.
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(It's up to the reader, of course, however, I saw it as she convinced herself that it probably wasn't plagiarism and it was necessary...so she deluded herself and talked Rainbow Dash into it since for Dash, it was cheating or failure. That said, she's reasonably assertive here!
Thank you!
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Understood! I appreciate the feedback. Thank you for taking the time! The terseness is due to Dash's time limitation and sleepiness; however, I can certainly see how it could raise concern with you and some other readers because that particular language indeed is basic!
I tried to balance that by conveying Dash's astuteness through relating her realization that Fluttershy's suggestion is a "thinly-disguised story about you [Fluttershy]"; however, there might be room for more finesse even with a 1000 word limit! I will think about it!
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Thank you for the recommendation to take a look at The Jet Powered Pegasus! I generally welcome recommendations about other people's works (not their own) that are relevant. It's a great way to keep good older works in mind. I have added it to my to-read list!
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No problem! I enjoyed the story, and I look forward to seeing what you make in the future!
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oops forgot to favorite earlier. It was honestly the how forceful she was about it that makes it feel off. Like sure dash is showing pretty minimal resistance but shes clearly apprehensive about cheating. Fluttershy would have to know it doesnt feel great to be pressured into things even if the pony doing it thought they were doing it for your own good. So yeah little unkind and Flutters should have known it. But its not like the other bearers are perfect exemplars of their element at all times so its not like its some big deal.
Truth be told I just liked the story and wanted to comment and Flutters behavior felt slightly off so I wanted to joke about it and use some cute fluttermotes
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Certainly, I too support opportunities to use the ponemotes!
Thank you!
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Thank you again! Rainbow Dash also plays a part in the following story (chronologically set after this one) (certainly no need to reply to this suggestion, which is offered due to your comment that suggested a willingness to look at my other works--and of course, you may have already seen the tale):
- MLP: FiM
- Dark
- Drama
- Slice of Life
Cloud Chaser endeavours to (in a smothering way) protect her vain, airy sister after they join the Ponyville weather team. However, as the saying goes: no mare is an island.As long as Twilight doesn't find out, Dash should be mostly fine. If she does find out...
Yeah, I could see a friend's academic misconduct leading to Twilight turning to the dark side.
Delightful bit of fluff. Unfortunately, it was entered in the Grim category and Grim alone...
Still, thank you for it and best of luck in the judging.
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Thank you!
meta, nice!
heh, wonder if the mention of "cheaters" will have an ironic sting later. and it's fun to think of pegasi as having to go to the cloud store now and again
considering just how many accomplishments Rainbow had to have under her belt before being accepted as a candidate, at this point this must have been a real long shot of an application!
haha, i imagine "nose-candy" has a more literal meaning in this soft and fluffy TV-Y7 Equestria!
ehehe, meta! padding wordcount by having the character pad wordcount in-character, love it
aww, she is so scaredy!
ahaha oof, i've been there!
ah, this is so perfectly immature Rainbow Dash! dangit, how is she so #relatable?
heh-heh
pure poetry, love it
aww, that Rainbow Dash pride is really working against her here
i love the layers to this! really makes the question of what it means to write about a personal experience philosophical
perfect use of website-native emoji! wow, what a rich multimedia experience this is!
thank you for this helpful guidance from an external source!
oh my! i would be as shocked as Rarity here
oh no, that is what i would fear most: Scootaloo taking the wrong lesson from Rainbow's bad example!
augh, poor Sweetie! trying to be good and do the right thing
ahaha, of course that would be Rainbow Dash's problem! and yes, that is possibly the worst example she could have used to dissuade a filly from all of the cool rewards that cheating can bring
that is definitely how i experienced it, so you did a fantastic job there! not to mention all of the fun metaness that is writing about a cheating at writing a thousand words while writing for a contest about writing a thousand words.
loved the characters in this, with Rainbow Dash being just the right amount of lazy and prideful without it being too much, and Fluttershy being there for Rainbow Dash's weaknesses in confronting a struggle, just as Rainbow had been there for her. great stuff!