As her ritual nears completion, Cozy decides to show Starlight a measure of mercy and explains why she's trying to destroy all magic.
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This story has a good idea, I would even like to see a sequel. (:
This was good.
Excellent revisionist fic. And great idea on a back story for Cozy Glow. I would enjoy a sequel if you make one.
Nice story!
A couple of small points:
I think you did not intend to have this second "be" in your sentence. When I do that it is almost always because I have been copying/pasting and missed it.
I have read a ton of novels and one thing you never see is more than one speaker in a paragraph (unless it is a group acting as one). This convention is so the reader knows who is speaking. I was curious if that was an actual rule or not - this site says it is:
When to Start a New Paragraph in Fiction - Book Editing Associates (book-editing.com)
Others seem to offer exceptions. Anyway, food for thought.
On a side note ... you taught me a new word ... manically. Now I will have to figure out the difference between it and maniacally!
Not to ruin the story but tossing her into a blast furnace would work, sure wounds can heal but you can't heal what's been disassociated by molten metal
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Fixed. And I'll keep your advice in mind in the future.
Separate dialog from characters into their own paragraphs.
I like to see the aftermath. After her plan is utterly failed by the Young Six.
But, if Starlight told everyone the entire truth? How would the Mane Six, Spike, Young Six, Trixie, Princesses, Discord, the other students, Neighsay, and others react?
I bet everybody will be shocked to their cores!
Can they even feel pity for her, despite trying to destroy all magic, and being suicidal while at it?
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Blast furnace can't destroy magic so while it might work I think if it had she wouldn't have fixated on magic as if you destroy the body fully and she comes back she can only assume the magic is the cause
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na see you take the block of steel you've made and chuck it into space. that's the big brain thinking
I generally don't like stories where Cozy is secretly an adult, but this one is good.
10933637 good idea i'd like to see a sequel to this story