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Maud grades questionable poetry. A teenaged Flurry Heart states questionable things. Trixie acquires questionable artifacts. And, Starlight does something Trixie questions (but not too deeply).


Era: Post-Season 9. (See an index of my stories, sorted by My Little Pony Season).



Image by Bicanski.

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hello! you should have already been PMed about this, but this comment is just to record that this fic has won The Bicyclette Prize for the Most Literature in the StarTrixMaud Shipping Contest!

The crown took over Trixie and Starlight felt sick, see.

all of this poetry is super fun but i love this line most of all

Maud blinked and ignored the 'crewb' neologism, which probably was a synonym for cool but mostly was a diversion from her point. "

really fun! love it

"Why should I keep writing, olds, when I've given my prof the plop she wants? You're just a substitute--you don't know what Trixie wants, don't know her heart. You can't feel her, y'know."

pretend i'm quoting all of Flurry's dialogue here. writing incomprehensible neologisms in youth slang is a really fun trope i love to see done well

Maud blinked very deliberately. "Lizard ponies?"

oh no, oh noooooo

Then, she wrote a brief letter to Flurry Heart's mother, the Princess-Ruler of the Crystal Empire, to determine where these strange "lizard pony" tales may have originated, and a note to Flurry Heart's file recommending an educational unit on how individuals within the more numerous pony groups also had created evil artifacts, to present a balanced perspective.

ugh, love this tongue-in-cheek worldbuilding here, exactly something i would have written

First-class pegasus courier soon returned, round trip, with the "great work" and a more understanding reply from the Princess. "Sorry. I see. I appreciate your efforts. Do as you must."

if only all parents were like this!

Deep beneath Equestria, in caverns where even Maud Pie, substitute professor at the School of Friendship, had not trod, lizard ponies played with puppets and told frightening tales about the wicked mythical ponies of the surface. And they crafted evil artifacts, and they fabricated bad poetry. Above them, but still beneath the ponies, villainous deep deer did the same, and so it was, all the way down, and all the way up.

and a very whimsical end

"You were in mud!" Trixie concluded. "Your well-manicured hooves had been covered in mud!"

a really cute bit of oblivious StarTrix, enhanced by the bolded rhymes. if only i was a smart brain about poetry, i'd be able to say more than it being really neat to me, and a very fun little ficlet overall.


as someone who was once an educator of sorts (though in STEM, so i never got to read anything this "fun"), this really hits home! absolutely loved your Maud, and your Trixie and Starlight really punched above their weights, having only appeared in the short bit at the end. i loved how experimental the format is, while still delivering on its premise with solid characters and fun prose. the whole thing left me with a feeling of amused whimsy. really excellent work, here, thank you so much for writing it!

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Thank you again very much, and thank you for (on my request) donating the prize directly to the charity :pinkiehappy:

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