Asta's new life in Equestria

Cover by mixdaponies
Asta has defeated the Dark Triads. All of kingdoms have been safe so there's no threat for his world. But he found out there is something. He cannot die by age because he possessed the devil's power so he can live forever. Not only that, his friends and Black Bulls has been passed away. He's only one, who's still living. But something unexpected happened, he got sucked in the orb and ended up in Equestria
Crossover: Black clover x My Little Pony
Note: He will be an earth pony. So don't mind about his wings on page cover

Chapters (4)

Prologue · 18th Jul 2021 · 2,146 words
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Chapter 1: Welcome to Equestria (Edited 28/7/2021) · 24th Jul 2021 · 2,330 words
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Chapter 2: Diamonds, Lightning, Butterflies, Balloons · 31st Jul 2021 · 3,042 words
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Chapter 3: Working on the Farm, Training the new body · 13th Aug 2021 · 2,136 words
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Comment posted by Martinthegamer deleted Jul 18th, 2021

Joe Toon

Joe Toon #2 · Jul 20th, 2021 · · · Prologue ·

Not to be a grammar nazi but at the very least please fix the grammar in your synopsis.

Martinthegamer

Martinthegamer #3 · Jul 20th, 2021 · · · Prologue ·

10907315
Right sorry about that

BLUE-TEARS

BLUE-TEARS #4 · Jul 31st, 2021 · · · Chapter 2: Diamonds, Lightning, Butterflies, Balloons ·

"I see...Guess I won't need to know about her..." Looking back in the window to the kitchen, Pinkie was busy making something, which was now hidden behind a curtain that wasn't there before. "...Uhh...is she worked here?"

Working

Martinthegamer

Martinthegamer #5 · Aug 1st, 2021 · · · Chapter 2: Diamonds, Lightning, Butterflies, Balloons ·

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Thanks for telling me

Sub-Zero

Sub-Zero #6 · Aug 14th, 2021 · · · Chapter 3: Working on the Farm, Training the new body ·

Hey this is pretty good can't wait to read the next chapter hope to see it soon btw this is Thumbs up material 👍

Nublyss

Nublyss #7 · Aug 30th, 2021 · · · Prologue ·

"Well, ya didn't stop when Ah told ya to, so this weekend, ya'll are doin' your chores, with no playtime after." Apple Bloom groaned, grumbling at how unfair her life was when she clearly didn't listen to her sister to stay inside and stay in bed. After reaching the house, she told Big Mac to take care of Apple Bloom while she helped this mysterious stallion into the guest bedroom and removed his clothes to make sure that he didn't have any hidden injuries, which she was thankful there were none. "Ah wonder what happened to him...And what was he doin' in our orchard?"

They saw him fall into the orchard, it might be better for her to say, “What made him fall into the orchard?”

Or something similar.

Draconequuz

Draconequuz #8 · Nov 17th, 2021 · · · Chapter 3: Working on the Farm, Training the new body ·

Let me just criticize a bit:

I suggest to spend mor time editing because the amount of errors is killing me

And Add more transitions between topics and make sure to slow down, your bouncing everywhere with Little explanation and just glossing over everything and your not really going into detail.

Other than that good story

Ichigo1520