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BleedingRaindrops


Just a critic who happens to write about pastel colored magical talking ponies

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Following a dare from Sweetie Belle, Scootaloo discovers she has a passion for writing. The only problem is, well, it's really bad.

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Warning! False advertising! It's actually not that bad for a short thing. (that's what she said)

Judging by the title and the description, I thought the story was gonna be about Sweetie Belle showing Scootaloo a bad fan-fiction that she wrote.

Sweetie Belle: Like my story, Scoots?

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Scootaloo: Nom, nom.

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Then I read "'No,” Sweetie belle said, moving closer. “I want to show you something.” Her horn began to glow", and I expected Sweetie Belle to shove her horn in Scootaloo's mouth. :facehoof:

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Yeeeee-aaaaah. All in all, a completely alright, non-objectionable, average story.

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Haha, I had that expectation too.
“I want to show you something.” Her horn began to glow" - i had that ' And Then They Bucked!' moment...
I need a brainwash :applejackconfused:

Wow what a cute and well written story good job! are you gonna make a continuation the story was really good?

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I thought the story was gonna be about Sweetie Belle showing Scootaloo a bad fan-fiction that she wrote.
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I knew it was missing something. Let's see if we can fix that, shall we?:pinkiehappy:

Touching. There's a new group, the Scootabelle Empire, for anypony who is interested.

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Sweetie: "It's a story about two, um... colts! Named Scooter Lord and... Sweetie Bro! And it's about how they both discover something unexpected, but wonderful about themselves."

Scoots: "Meh. Does it have any explosions?"

Sweetie: "Well, um, no..."

Scoots: "Meh."

Hmm, it's a little rushed and awkwardly written, and I don't really like the angst. It was cute though! I love the idea of Sweetie Belle using levitation magic on Scoots to help her fly.

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heh, don't worry: It's not finished

Spoilers, though. One of the CMC's wrote it.

not to bad for such a short story, yet its still a bit to rushed. Its still good though, i like it

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