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I avoid clichés like the plague.

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After turning in for the day, Luna has found herself in one of the most bizarre dreams she had ever experienced in her life: that she's in a reality where Twilight and Celestia's roles were reversed, leading to a potentially chaotic dynamic. Despite being a master of lucid dreaming and can easily alter dreams at will, she'd rather see how this one will unfold...

My entry for the Reunions Role-Swap Contest

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this was very funny :derpytongue2:

Congratulations, you just managed to give the "It was all a dream" ending... TO A DREAM.

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I dunno you're here so please tell me why are you waisting your time here?

Neece #4 · June 26th · · ·

Oh gods Luna, get on with the times :rainbowlaugh:

lol wtf

Now I’m curious as to how the other princesses reacted...

I'm just imagining her talking to celestia at breakfast
"Sister I had a wet dream last night both you and twilight sparkle an-
LUNA I dont want to know

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lol that got me good!!!

Take your like and fave and never do this again.

~Skeeter The Lurker

:ajbemused: What. Statement not question.

I've only seen that Always Sunny clip like 50 times but it's in your Notes? Clicked.

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"Very well, but at least let me tell you how I got blue balled by Discord afterward."

Luna’s ears perked up. A realization came to her. Is this what those urban ponies call a wet dream ? She never bothered learning the meaning of the slang, but this situation definitely fits the term.

Uhh ... Wet dream does not also mean water .

But wetness in a Dreamland is ... What called , wetness dream , moisture dream . It overlaps

Twilight looked up from what she was reading to see who’s talking to her. “Oh hey Luna.” She then went back to looking at the board. “Just trying to check something while day court’s in a break.” She levitated a cup of coffee to her lips and took a sip before continuing. “Shouldn’t you in bed by now?’

Twilight (VELVET NIGHT) Sparkle FROM HOUSE SPARKLE .

SOMEWHERE YOU MAY INVENTED INVIGORATING SPELL TO REFRESH YOU FROM BEING TIRED , BUT WAS MAYBE LOCKED IN YOUR MIND DISAPPROVED BY YOUR MENTOR .
...
Because in the writer or hopefully reader I could offer something to take care from the tiredness removing it each time but You need to REST BADLY . YOU ARE BAD AS FRIKEN GAARA WHO WAS INSOMNIAC TIRED NOT SLEPT FOR YEARS , LIKE RACOON EYES .

Take care for your self . You need it.

“Then off to bed you go.” Twilight said as she focused back on the white board.

What the Frick ,. TWILIGHT SPARKLE NEEDS TO SLEEP ,WHO IS THE OTHER

“These are letters.” Luna concluded. “From Celestia? So if you’re here, then does that mean Celestia’s in Ponyville being-”

So it is Equestria Power is Magic?

“Look at all these letters she sent me!” Twilight slammed her hoof several times on the white board, resulting into some pieces of paper to fall off. “There’s not one of them that tells a story of struggle! No conflict at all! It’s like winning comes naturally for her, like breathing!” Twilight was so close to Luna when she cried out the last line, causing some of the spittle to fly straight into the Princess’s face.

And I wanted the worlds who had BIG BAD TO BE optional Deus Ex Machina cheat available. That is why was said CHEAT TO GET IT EASY

“I think she’s sick!” Twilight raised both forelegs up the ceiling. “The Marey Sue Syndrome? You heard of it? I think she has it!”

If it is Mary Sue Sindrom than after Refining the DAMN CHARA'S KNIFE THE WEAPON IS ABSOLUTE MARY SUE WITH NO SEPARATION , IT CAN BE ENDLESS IF DESIRED .
AND writer Universes Froze.

:facehoof: Why did I find this amusing? Take your angry upvote and use it to summon a proof reader.

“Uh-oh right.” Luna tossed the bucket and pulled out the card Twilight gave to her earlier. She cleared her throat first before reading what’s written on it. “Oh no…” Her tone was flat, like a school foal asked by their teacher to read a segment of their lesson in front of the class. “My sister turned evil? How could I let this fly under my wing? Save us Celestia. Save Equestria.” Those lines left a bad taste on Luna’s mouth that she gagged violently afterwards.

You TWILIGHT SPARKLE WANT TO ELIMINATE THE MARY SUE SINDROM , HUH . UHH . IF Equestria Vilians are Too weak... There's Albedo , Beerus , Majin , Prototype , and in worse how about calling the Eldrich starting with Shogoth , or Warhammer?

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Or maybe Chuck Norri- no, wait... That would either be a bit too much or would compound the problem further.

Oh Lord, I honestly can see all of that. Funny, take my upvote, but you need an editor to help with those narrative tense switches.

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You massively missed the joke my dude…

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Who is stronger Muscle Wizard or Chuck Norris

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Chuck Norris is the muscle wizard. I don't know who you're talking about, but they're clearly a pretender if they think they can claim that title.

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Chuck Norris is the Alpha Muscle Wizard all other Muscle Wizards wish they could defeat him. The only man who was a match for Chuck Norris was Bruce Lee. Only the Fear of Bruce Lee returning from the dead keeps Chuck Norris from ruling the world! (Seriously one of Chuck Norris's frost big breaks was as random henchman easily dispatched in a Bruce Lee film, he considered it an honor to lose to Lee)

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I did know about that.

“Oh. Then nothing of value was lost.”

Ahhaha

Pretty noice. Good show!

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RDT #31 · July 13th · · ·

Hello, I am one of the judges for the Reunions Swapped Roles contest, and I'm going to share the scores that I gave this story along with the comments. Note that I was just one of three judges, so these comments do NOT reflect what the other judges thought of the story.

Quality 3 / 5

There were some awkward sentence constructions that did not read well, such as “And from it leapt six familiar figures, the Elements of Harmony who appeared to look tired and beat up, and of course Celestia, who still looked fresh despite fighting an entire army just to get here.” But apart from that, there were few errors.

It’s a pretty good story for what it’s achieving. There were plenty of funny moments to go around. Meta aspects were handled well. This sort of prank is also in character for Discord.

That said, I expected more craziness and build-up. Twilight could have been even more of a conspiracy nut, seeing as she’s the source of most of the conspiracies. More chaos is something that would have fit the story, especially since dreams are already naturally chaotic. A dream created by Discord could really be wild. More crazy events and higher stakes would also make the simple resolution of the conflict more of a surprise.

Roleswap originality/utilization 1 / 5 

The student-mentor swap is not very original. 

You only really talked about how Twilight was now the source of all the canonical antagonists. Due to the story being quite short, there wasn’t much more room to talk about how other relationships were affected. This doesn’t speak against story quality, but it does mean you didn’t focus much on the roleswap. 

Prompt utilization 1 / 3

This story did not address the theme of “Reunion” at all. While the swapped Celestia meeting Twilight could be considered a reunion, you did not focus on that aspect at all. (Pastries are good, though.) Nothing else in this story could be relevant towards talking about a reunion.

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