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Ever since the beginning of recorded history, witches have been labelled as the evil of Equus, and they live up to the title as well. One of the biggest threats to Equestria, and through the recent Changeling fey attack, they have struck down the Sun Princess herself.

An ailment none of the doctors are able to heal. A curse no researcher is able to break.

Twilight is afraid. Afraid of losing the only mother she has ever known, she fears that she will be kept from being with her until it's too late. Twilight is a good witch, of that she is sure. She has been molded and taken care of by the kindest, most wonderful mare on Equus, ever since her birth mother abandoned her, and she has not looked back.

But why was it fair now that she has the ability, but lacks the knowledge to give to one who has given her everything? Should she delve into that part of her soul screaming to be let free, or shall she wait and put the fate of her beloved mentor in luck’s palms? Still ridden with doubts over the Wedding, she can do naught but research, beg and hope as she waits outside her mother’s chambers day by day, waiting for the Solar Diarch to finally allow her access.

Luna is desperate. Why was it fair that they were brought together for three mere years after a millennia, only for fate to bring Celestia down so low, right in front of her eyes? Despite all her efforts, she can do naught but look on day by day as her sister’s condition seemingly deteriorates, helpless as the witches take advantage of the situation to push back at the chains binding them, seeking to reclaim their rightful place on the hierarchy. She has nowhere to go, nopony she could turn to... And the worst thing? She knows that one of the claims in the previous sentence is a lie.

Aurelia is uncertain. Uncertainty had become very common lately, and she wasn’t sure she like it. Luna was once her friend - her best friend - and yet she had broken her unwavering trust, stole from her and betrayed her. There was also the fact that she certainly wished for nothing to do with somepony who only wore masks and crafted facades as smoothly as a witch. If it were up to her, Celestia could burn in Tartarus for all she cared.

On the other hand, her father’s last wish not something she would ever break, even for petty revenge, and her.. daughter’s cries each night still shredded the soul from where she’d come from. Aurelia has the ability and she has the knowledge. But would it be wise to risk revealing herself to the public eye, to the eyes of the Sisters, the other witches, her daughter, just for Celestia? She wasn’t sure.

Perhaps it was time to embrace every part of herself. Perhaps it was time to own up to the mistake which had cost her her very first friend, her closest friend. Perhaps it was time for her to face the one she’d abandoned and the world she’d shut herself off to.

There is hope for Celestia and there is hope for mending fences, but hope is a fickle thing, and a wrong move could break spirits, crush budding relationships, and topple a kingdom into ruins.


Thank you to:

Meowofy

For your generous support and effort in the making of this story. (And also for teaching me the reins of how to write using FimFiction)

and

My Brother

For encouraging me to finally make an actual account after a whole year of being on this site.


Cover made from various parts of talented artworks pieced together and edited by Meowofy. Thank you!

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 35 )

:trollestia:...Charmed and Awed...:moustache:

I am charmed by your description. Though, I am curious at what Shining Armors role was or is...considering his...mother abandoned...them?

You have laid out the situation in captivating manner. Enthralling with three characters that have much to lose...and hope for.

One thing that stuck out though. I am hoping that you humanize? Humanise? Celestia? Like from the description I am seeing two faces that gaze at Celestia.

One...A loving daughter that...worships her...mother? Concerning, lol. This could go so many ways its very spicy.

Two. A witch that abandoned her daughter and...son? That fears what her presence could bring for all...a coward...but, not wrong none the less. Celestia seems to be paying something? A price for deed's done?

One has to wonder if she was so concerned with who Celestia is...why would she let her daughter be raised by a supposed...monster?

Ps. Just some thoughts that I had before reading the first chapter. Great job! Liked and favorite for that alone. :twilightsmile:

:applecry:...Expanded Thoughts...:eeyup:

Perhaps, Shining could know of his mother? What of their father?...curious.

I had thought what if...She feared what Celestia would do to her daughter if she approached her? Hmm.

My only thought that I hope does not happen...is Celestia is given to be written as perfect being that can not be held accountable. I have read in the past stories where she has literally commited genocide. But no one! In story acknowledges this or the hypocrisy that she did this...its ok? You know?

Further to expand...even further. what if...both Twilights mother and Celestias have crimes. But the thought that echos in my mind...whos crimes are greater?

And who among each was brought to justice? What even is justice? Since Luna was sent to the moon for her crimes?

Ultimately does Celestia deserve to die? And what would consquences be if she doesnt?

Who is Celestia when she awakens from her turmoil? Her old self? Or what has always been? Or her kindess?

And is their a reason that witch reviell Celestia? What do the witchs think of Luna and her own dark deeds being forgiven?

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Well, actually, Shining Armor isn’t going to be Twilight’s brother in blood here, only a surrogate brother.

For the rest, well... you’ll just have to wait and see! :raritywink:

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ah, cool. Thanks. Im excited! Thats probably apparent.:twilightblush:

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So what’s the romance tag for? I noticed in the description that Twilight is getting married? Who is she marrying? Who is the pair that warrants the romance tag?

it is 11:00 pm for me, my dad is asleep in the room next to mine, and I am currently screaming. I literally added this to my tracking before I even started reading it just because of the description, and I was not disappointed when I actually read the first chapter.

*reads summary*

...I think I missed a trilogy or two.

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No, sorry, the Wedding - if that’s what you’re talking about - is for the Canterlot Wedding of Shining and Cadence. Romance will develop later.

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So the romance tag is for Shining Armor and Cadence?

So curious, reading anatomy - they are basically Umamimi, I take it? Like, Kemono-style, more or less?

Definitely fascinated by level of detail and worldbuilding here, have a like and fav :)

It is evident that those two are very close, they are so cute:rainbowkiss: it is almost certain that impotence will push Twilight to the limit.:fluttercry:

I'm glad you decided to write, this looks promising!:twilightsmile:

What a coincidence! I also have an oc named Aurelia (^_^)

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Then who is it for lol

alright this Looks like it can be Really Good

So, Twi is Aurelia*s daughter?

Wow...this is good. Super screwed up. Like your going to parley...now when you want something? Hmm? Not much of a leg to stand, ah,...Luna?

I am loving the witchs. Very ooh and aaah.

The cover is beautiful!:raritystarry: Whoever did this did a great job!:yay:

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Cover art was made from various parts of talented artworks pieced together and edited by Meowofy. I’ll be sure to pass on your praise! :twilightsmile:

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Sorry to say But First one was Right Twilight is Aurelia's daughter, its part of the Cover Text

Aww, that first part was very sweet, thanks for sharing!

Are you trying to make me cry? for damn that was a Close one, Good job :twilightsmile: that last bit hit hard

if you change the settings, characters to something more original but kept the style of the coverart. I would have thought this is a korean LN/Manhwa. Don't take this as criticism, its meant as a compliment :3

Those lines. Thats some really shade from mommy dearest. Excellent with those last few lines...then

Nothing. Really makes you imagine all the ways shes hurt. And sad. :fluttercry:

It makes you wonder all the ways she way grow. Who is she? Who will she become? What will her mother be to her...at the end?

How adorable! It would be great to see more scenes from Twilight's past before she goes to Ponyville, but only if you intend to, I don't want you to feel pressured.

I have a question, it's in chapter 1, how old is Twilight? or an approximate? Is she a child (which I don't think), a teenager or a young adult? It's just that I'm learning the language and sometimes the context or some words confuse me or I'm not sure if my interpretation is correct.

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I believe Twilight is a young teenager here, maybe 15-16 years old?

This was postively smashing! And letting his daughter raise or help his students that he loved more! Ugh! Such feelings! Great Stuff!

YOOOOO I RECOGNIZE THAT ART STYLE

That was a bit hard to follow But else Good

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Thanks for helping me understand!:twilightsmile: I thought of that option as the most likely one.

Hello. I just found out about your story and I think it's great ! Every word is detectable ; it is rare that I feel such pleasure reading a story (only 6 stories have this effect on me to date). Three of those stories are by Meowofy, so given that Meowofy is helping you with A Good Witch, maybe it's related. In any case, well done for your work, it's remarkable ^^

I have three questions regarding this chapter :
N°1 : In the first part of the chapter, Celestia calls Twilight "filly". However, marriage and Chrysalis are mentioned (without forgetting the Changeling attack mentioned in the summary). So I figured that the plot would take place with A Canterlot Wedding at the end of season two. But in the series, Twilight is an adult at the time. Why then, does Celestia call Twilight "filly" ? Is it because in your story Twilight is younger than in the series ? Or maybe there is another explanation ?

N°2 :

Twilight stood, and Celestia noted that she was at eye level with her sitting down. ‘ She grows so fast...’ She mused wistfully.

In this passage, Twilight is standing and comes up to Celestia's eye level when she is seated. Since people are human/pony hybrids but have a humanoid build, I imagined their sizes was similar to that of humans (at Know currently I'm assuming Twilight is an adult). Celestia being taller than the other ponies in the series, I imagine Twilight to be around 1m60 and Celestia around 1m70 or 1m75. But with those sizes, Twilight couldn't get to Celestia's eye level if she was sitting on the floor and Twilight was standing. My question is therefore : what sizes have you given to your characters ?

N°3 : Elvira has minnow eyes, which one is sapphire color ? And which one is amethyst ?

I hope my English is correct, as it is not my native language, my English maybe bad. I'm sorry if this is the case.

In any case, this story is superb and the plot is very interesting, well done ^^

Ps : Elvira is too cute ^^

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Hi Nalhya,

BrownieCat has hit a particularly rocky part of their life, and hasn’t really felt like sparing much time to spend on FimFic, so I hope you don’t mind me giving you some answers! (Though I assure you she has read your comment, and thanks you! :))

N°1 :

In the first part of the chapter, Celestia calls Twilight "filly". However, marriage and Chrysalis are mentioned (without forgetting the Changeling attack mentioned in the summary). So I figured that the plot would take place with A Canterlot Wedding at the end of season two. But in the series, Twilight is an adult at the time. Why then, does Celestia call Twilight "filly" ? Is it because in your story Twilight is younger than in the series ? Or maybe there is another explanation ?

Well, she is 16/17, I’d assume so, at least, (it isn’t something Brownie and I have actively discussed) and she was around 15 when she first met the Main 6. I don’t really know what Twilight’s age was in canon, but I’d assume it was older than it is in our AU. As for why Celestia calls Twilight filly, not only is it sorta logical if you think about it, given that she’s much older than anybody else, it also stems from their relationship and how she sees Twilight - somepony she’s bought up from foalhood. It's only natural that Twilight remains the same filly she’s ever been! ^.^

N°2 :

In this passage, Twilight is standing and comes up to Celestia's eye level when she is seated. Since people are human/pony hybrids but have a humanoid build, I imagined their sizes was similar to that of humans (at Know currently I'm assuming Twilight is an adult). Celestia being taller than the other ponies in the series, I imagine Twilight to be around 1m60 and Celestia around 1m70 or 1m75. But with those sizes, Twilight couldn't get to Celestia's eye level if she was sitting on the floor and Twilight was standing. My question is therefore : what sizes have you given to your characters ?

The part you quoted is probably incorrect, now that you’ve pointed it out, hehe :twilightsheepish:. I’ve told Brownie, and they’ve promised to change it, thanks!

“Twilight stood, and Celestia noted absentmindedly that Twilight was now a whole head taller with her sitting down. She still remembered a time where the unicorn had to stand on tiptoes, just to reach the top of Celestia’s calves. ‘ She grows so fast...’ She mused wistfully.”

As for your question, I’ll quickly sketch you up a reference:
cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/527948429259702283/872414857947906048/image0.png
There you go, a bit rushed (and Celestia seems to be floating), but you get the idea. Purple is Twi and White is Celestia.

N°3 :

Elvira has minnow eyes, which one is sapphire color ? And which one is amethyst ?

I’ll admit I was a bit confused by this question, (as ‘minnow’ appears to be a type of fish), but here’s a picture of how Elvira’s eyes are like. The amethyst symbolizes her magical bond with Aurelia, who has amethyst eyes. More will be revealed in later chapters ;)
media.discordapp.net/attachments/527948429259702283/872417400895725568/image0.png?width=669&height=562

I hoped this helped!
~Meowofy

PS.

Ps: Elvira is too cute ^^

Haha, tell me about it! You don’t know how much I squealed when Brownie bought me the picture! (Fun fact, we actually bonded over our love of cats :raritywink:)

Comment posted by Meowofy deleted August 5th
Comment posted by Meowofy deleted August 5th

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Hello Meowofy. Thank you for your reply and of course I don't mind that it was you who replied and not BrownieCat. I hope there will be improvement on his side, both physically and psychologically. And you're welcome ^^

Well, she is 16/17, I’d assume so, at least, (it isn’t something Brownie and I have actively discussed) and she was around 15 when she first met the Main 6. I don’t really know what Twilight’s age was in canon, but I’d assume it was older than it is in our AU. As for why Celestia calls Twilight filly, not only is it sorta logical if you think about it, given that she’s much older than anybody else, it also stems from their relationship and how she sees Twilight - somepony she’s bought up from foalhood. It's only natural that Twilight remains the same filly she’s ever been! ^.^

Okay, I understand better now, thanks. And indeed, that Celestia calls Twilight "filly" seems to me rather logical now. I almost feel like idiot for not understanding it sooner.

The part you quoted is probably incorrect, now that you’ve pointed it out, hehe :twilightsheepish:. I’ve told Brownie, and they’ve promised to change it, thanks!

“Twilight stood, and Celestia noted absentmindedly that Twilight was now a whole head taller with her sitting down. She still remembered a time where the unicorn had to stand on tiptoes, just to reach the top of Celestia’s calves. ‘ She grows so fast...’ She mused wistfully.”

As for your question, I’ll quickly sketch you up a reference:
cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/527948429259702283/872414857947906048/image0.png

There you go, a bit rushed (and Celestia seems to be floating), but you get the idea. Purple is Twi and White is Celestia.

You're welcome.

The scene seems clearer to me this way.

Very nice sketches, well done ! And it gives a good idea of the sizes of Twilight and Celestia, thanks.

I’ll admit I was a bit confused by this question, (as ‘minnow’ appears to be a type of fish), but here’s a picture of how Elvira’s eyes are like. The amethyst symbolizes her magical bond with Aurelia, who has amethyst eyes. More will be revealed in later chapters ;)

I'm sorry for the confusion with fish. In French (my native language), "minnow" translates to "vairon". The term vairon is used to write eyes of different colors (which is the case of Elvira). But it is also the name of a fish (which I had totally forgotten). I should have talked about heterochromia, it would have been much clearer.

Thanks for the picture, I have a better idea of his eyes now. And it is very pretty ^^

I look forward to reading new chapters.

Haha, tell me about it! You don’t know how much I squealed when Brownie bought me the picture! (Fun fact, we actually bonded over our love of cats :raritywink:)

I can imagine it. I understand, one of my friendships started for the same reason ^^

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