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We have our host Discord, along with his co-host Fluttershy hosting a race through different universes, and the real world to win the grand prize of 500000. 14 teams from Equestria, 9 from the Mushroom Kingdom, and one mystery team will be competing. Who will win it all?

This is similar to Starlight Fan's story "The Fantastic Crossover Race", but he was inspired by my original one on my Fanfiction.net account.

Note: This takes place right in between the finale of Season 4 of My Little Pony and after the events of Rainbow Rocks.

Enjoy!!

Chapters (18)
Comments ( 14 )

I must point out that you called Vinyl an earth pony in her introduction.

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I fixed that. Also, do you have a favorite team?

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There are several classic teams, but I'm going to wait to see how they interact before picking a favorite.

The highly decorated box a mummy rests inside is called a sarcophagus. In modern times, you place a body in a simple coffin.
A tomb is the structure you put the sarcophagus in. A pyramid is a special type of tomb.

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Ok, thanks for letting me know.

the grand prize of 500000.

500000 what?

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Five hundred thousand dollars. Depending on who wins.

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You know pony doesn't use... dollar right?

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Yes, they use bits as currency.

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the real world to win the grand prize of 500000.

500,000 of what? This sentence is vague.

Applejack: Hoo boy, this is gonna be one heck of race, and what better to do it than with your own little sis. (Applejack ruffles her sister's mane)

Apple Bloom: Ah know this is gonna be so exciting. It's just like the Sisterhooves Social, but bigger.

Applejack: Yep.

No, you can't do this thing in your fic.

Koopa: My legs were aching from all that stair climbing they made us do, and on top of all that, I had to carry you the rest of the way.

Paratroopa: Well can you blame me for that? I felt like I was going to collapse. Worst of all, I cannot even use my wings.

Why you put these thing in your fic?

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500 thousand dollars or bits depending on who wins.

Also, the reason is because it's my first time and my first story. I'm trying my best.

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the real world to win the grand prize of 500000.

I gonna write like this, "the real world to win the grand prize with 500,000 of that country's currency where they live.


Protip: Don't write like this.

Applejack: Hoo boy, this is gonna be one heck of race, and what better to do it than with your own little sis. (Applejack ruffles her sister's mane)

Apple Bloom: Ah know this is gonna be so exciting. It's just like the Sisterhooves Social, but bigger.

Applejack: Yep.

You can fix it, can't you. I will fix your first sentence for example

Applejack: Hoo boy, this is gonna be one heck of race, and what better to do it than with your own little sis. (Applejack ruffles her sister's mane)

Write like this more better.

"Hoo boy, this is gonna be one heck of race, and what better to do it than with my own little is," Applejack ruffles her sister's mane.

That not count as AJ's accent though.

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I'll work on revising episodes 3-11 to make it like episodes 1, 2 and 12. Expect episode 13 soon.

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