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Reactception


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1 month after the fall formal Sunset Shimmer is now “friends” with the girls who defeated her.

And even though all of the girls have accepted her as a person she thinks their only her friend because of Twilight asking them. So she plans to kill herself...... what will happen when her plan begin to fall apart?


(Another cliche Sunset Shimmer redemption story that’s been done before..... but I wanted to try it for myself)

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Dark Sunset is Sunset’s darker and more sinister villain side while Soft Sunset is Sunset’s newfound loving and emotional dare I say fluttershyish side.

I want to say that they aren’t multiple personalities rather different aspects of Sunset’s personality and her deep thought process is using these characters to work through her more complicated problems.

Look i get what Luna is doing, but COME ON!!!!
She can't have the student who attacked Sunset arrested for attempted assault?
Or suspended?

“Your here so you’re fellow students don’t mistreat you for that incident if they think I scolded you they most likely won’t seek revenge.” Luna explains in the most logical and know it all voice I’d ever heard her speak in.

Rainbow Dash looked up very confused by the principal strange logic and opened her mouth to speak.

Don’t worry, rainbow dash. The princesses and their counterparts aren’t known for their logic.

“I’ll be their Pinkie” I said without thinking it through or knowing the future consequences of my response.

Consequences? What consequences could come from going bowling?

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Actually, that might not be such a good idea.

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That'd depend on where CHS is. After all, a lot of schools have a zero tolerance policy so all 3 of the students involved would be suspended pending expulsion. Self defense or aiding someone else is not a defense.

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Luna is being kinda stupid but also pretty smart because all of the other students would realize Sunset and Rainbow dash are not in trouble and would pick on them even more.

And don’t worry Luna also has a plan for now to “punish” him

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Luna and Celestia are known for making dumbass calls.

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Thank god. I’m glad I’m not the only one that’s noticed.

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Well she better, and make him a example, while i understand why everyone hold grudges, attacking someone who even refuses to defend themselves is wrong.

Though I really hate these fics where Sunset just becomes a door mat or punching bag and lets everyone hurt her out fo guilt or so.
She could at least taser or mace them, and it can happen outside of school as well.

Mm hm... keep going, keep going...🤔

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I literally pictured that and laughed.

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That’s kinda the point of my story it’s Sunset realizing she doesn’t deserve all of the things that are done to her and that she can be happy again.

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Wait, she doesn’t? My bad. I thought the point was although she deserved it she can bounce back.

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Glad to see you’re here, too.

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You too, 20 questions :pinkiehappy:

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Okay good point 😅

You are correct.

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Is that a new nickname?

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Oh good. Got a little confused for a second.

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Cool. Although, would 20 statements be more accurate?

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Nah, you ask more questions than anything else:ajsmug:

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Really? I always thought they were mostly statements or jokes.

Very interesting story so far I look forward to seeing where it goes.

Not bad so far😏 Can't wait to see what happens next 😘

Told you this was a waste of time! My “shoulder demon” says as she continues to sit their in silence.

No! Don’t listen to that villain. My “shoulder angel” exclaims as angry as the good side of a person could.

Is she having a debate with herself?

Weakly I peered over the crevice of my neon red seat to look up behind her at the pay station. Only to see Principal Celestia in a bright red Hawaiian bowling shirt with pink and red flowers on it.

And standing next to her is Vice Principal Luna in a matching bowling shirt but in neon green with orange and yellow flowers.

Is this a reference to one of the mlp episodes?

No. I can’t deal with Celestia last time I saw her....the fall formal she looked so disappointed in me.

Would you rather have someone look at you with disappointment or hate?

Is my life always gonna suck this bad? Sunset thinks annoyed for what she though was the 8th time that day.

Depends on the author.

You don’t show weakness to bullies or people persecuting you so don’t show weakness to anyone especially not………Yourself.

That’s because most of them can’t stand up for themselves.

“Maybe they want to dump you like the Princess did and twist the knife as it were? Or maybe their loyalty to Twilight is stronger then you thought?”

I’ll be honest, I had that thought for a while.

I’m afraid that’s all the time we have for today Miss Shimmer but it was a helpful session. The demon say’s now wearing huge clunky glasses and holding a clipboard.

Wait what?

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Thanks for your thoughts

1: yes.

2: it is indeed a reference to the royal sister episode in season 9

3: she can handle hate she understands hate but disappointment hurts Sunset more

4: we’ll she were I fall on that scale

5: true

6: when I first watched Rainbow Rocks that’s what I thought

7: therapy joke

Gosh darn it another cliff😭 and its one I willingly jump into🤣

Thank you for another awesome chapter😘

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You’re welcome.

7. I’m so glad I’m not the only one that thought that.

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Glad you enjoyed and I apologize the cliffhangers are gonna be fairly frequent. :facehoof::raritywink:

And I’m glad someone enjoyed it even though it took awhile.

He’ll probably just use it to protect himself & maybe even other’s. “my shoulder angel” suggests

Actually, that’s not a bad idea. I actually would have never thought about that.

……I could care less if anyone at that school gets they’re secrets spilled or their social status ruined.

And with one touch of my screen I had Airdropped everything on everyone at the school straight to Runt. & to be honest I could care less.

Ok, that’s kinda f*cked up. I kinda felt sorry for her a little bit at first, but now I don’t know.

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My original version of the story had him leaking secrets to protect himself from bully’s but I changed it and I thought that would be a good reference that only I’d understand.

Yeah! It is but she’s about to die so why would she care about the people who have been mistreating her for weeks.

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Nice reference.

Aren’t they mistreating her because she f*cked with them. That’s like playing with a rattlesnake and getting angry when the snake bites.

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Human nature even if it’s deserved you might still hold something over someone who mistreated you or got revenge on you.

Also good rattlesnake analogy…..

….I might just steal that for the story.

(P.S. sorry not trying to argue)

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I guess that makes sense.

Thanks, but I feel like I probably could have come up with something better.

Go right ahead. It’s not like I’m gonna put it to good use or anything.

(P.S. it’s all good)

“I’ll be their Pinkie” I said without thinking it through or knowing the future consequences of my response.

That should be "there"

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Thanks for pointing it out.

Fixed!

Didn't this story used to have more chapters?

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Nope!
Only 3 chapters and counting

Thanks for the chapter but where is the next part stupid cliff 😫 but i keep willing jumping down into it🤣

If you need a reference to Runt’s smile look up Sai from Naruto and his fake smile’s that’s where I got my reference point.

Good story so far. I noticed a few typos. I'll point out the ones that stood out to me.


I know it's a lot easier and quicker to type out, but don't use an ampersand(&), spell out and.

Celestia having obviously heard the plan walks next to Applejack and ask’s “how can we help?”

As we entered Sugarcube corner we were greeted by Mrs. Cake “welcome girls what can I do you for?”

Pinkie’s hair goes slightly down like a limp balloon as she says “Oh.” And walk over to the display case for the cakes.

Capitalization needed at the beginning of each sentence and commas needed before the quotes.

“Welcome dear’s. What can I do you for?” Mrs. Cake greets as usual while nodding.

No apostrophe in dears.

Their’s more I can tell…..

there's

“S-Sunset tried to-to kill herself.” Pinkie splutters loudly her tear’s falling again.

Comma needed after the quote.

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Thanks. I appreciate people who point out the typos rather then saying you’re bad at spelling and or grammar.

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No problem. It happens to me too. I appreciate it when folks point out my typos and other things so I can do better.

Are they literally saying what happened in front of someone?

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Nice reference

Andddd wait That's IT!? NOOOO MORE PLEASE THAT CLIFF😭

I’m so pathetic. Release is just hours away and now I’m considering backing out of it. But I know I can’t back out it’s better for everyone if I die.

This is going to be me in two months.

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Hope that’s a joke if not please reconsider you’re choice.

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