Shouldn't have attacked humanity (part 2)
"Sir! Three unknown targets are approaching from the air! They're heading right this way!" A soldier rushed up to the group of gathered generals from each nation.
"Don't worry sirs, I'll take care of this. Probably a false alarm, the ponies are still an hour away," said General Holden, before getting up from his seat and following the soldier to an observation room.
Upon reaching the room, he looked through the screen of the camera. The camera itself was one of the cameras situated outside Utopia, observing the general area, and the AI had detected the targets, and zoomed in on them. Upon reaching the observation room, he found that there were indeed three targets, and it wasn't a false alarm. The targets themselves were three Alicorns, with the pink one pulling a flying carriage filled with wooden boxes and barrels, who had just teleported ahead of the army.
They had a plan in mind. Upon the recent revelation that they were being watched, it was immediately obvious that the Utopians might've indeed had time to prepare and whip out the big guns, so they needed to improvise. Their current plan was to launch a surprise attack and destroy their heavy weapons and vehicles swiftly so that they couldn't be used, and get out of there before the enemy had time to react. They had already failed at the 'surprise' part of the attack, but the humans still had no idea what they were up to.
"What? What the hell are they up to? Their army's an hour behind them, it makes no sense for them to just come here ahead of them. Attacking solo would be incredibly dangerous and stupid, especially considering they're their leaders. They're literally flinging their most valuable people directly at us," said Holden. "Though, I can think of another reason why they would travel ahead of the pack. They might've come to negotiate," he added.
"Shall we deploy the drones sir?" One of his men asked.
"No, no. How many men are still on the ground?" Holden asked.
"Now? About a hundred. The lift is still on its way to pick them up. It'll reach the surface in about two minutes," the man replied.
"Tell them not to enter the lift. Have them be prepared to deter the targets if they prove to be aggressive, and to escort them in if they come in peace," said Holden.
"Look sister, the remnants of Tartarus," said Luna. A large portion of what used to be Tartarus was now covered with rubble, along with various large vehiclular looking pieces of equipment being left there, most of which were tractors. Just beyond the rubble lay hundreds of tents, arranged in an organised manner. Along with the tents were dozens of cages, containing the creatures that had been imprisoned in what used to be Tartarus, and around most of the creatures were various pieces of complicated looking scientific equipment. Lastly, surrounding the camp was a sturdy looking metal fence that had been laid out along the entire perimeter. What was strange was the fact that there was clearly a large presence here, but all of the tents, equipment, and even the creatures of Tartarus had seemingly just been left there.
"They knew we were coming, and it looks like they just up and left. Do you think they fled?" Cadence asked.
"It would seem that wa - " Celestia was the first to spot it. Twenty six neatly arranged jets, all facing an area where the trees were cleared, forming a makeshift runway. "No, that's not possible. They wouldn't just leave some of their most powerful weapons here," she pointed a hoof at the jets.
"Then where are they?" Luna asked, "This place is empty."
As if on cue, a group of First Humans made their presence known as they stepped out from the cover of the rubble. A row of rubble was cleared out first to allow ease of access towards the lift leading down to the bunker, forming a sort of trench that unintentionally hid the humans' presence. Of course, the princesses didn't know that, and immediately jumped to conclusions.
"Look!" Luna directed their attention towards the emerging group. "They're trying to ambush us!" She stated, and given all the information they had, the other two princesses immediately assumed the same thing.
"Towards the flying vehicles! Quickly!" Celestia said, and they immediately began to form a beeline towards the group of jets, which were situated about a kilometer to the right of the group.
"What the hell are they doing?" Holden asked, confused, "They saw the group and rather than attack or make contact, they're… retreating?"
"No sir, it appears they're heading towards the group of jets we have posted," said one of the soldiers.
"What? How many guards do we have posted there?" Holden asked.
"None sir, the last guard shift is currently with the last group that was being recalled," the man replied.
"God dammit! They're trying to go for our drones!" Holden shouted in frustration, "Have them take off, now!" They were too late however, and couldn't take off fast enough. The alicorns were already upon them.
Celestia levitate a wooden barrel and three crates full of gunpowder, and Luna did the same with her own mixture of crates and barrels. They took aim at the nearest jet, followed by throwing the explosives at them, and upon the wooden containers making contact with the jet, they either bounced off or got destroyed upon impact. The three of them then began charging energy blasts, aiming for the crates that were still intact. Then, they released their shot.
Upon the the powerful energy blasts hitting the crates the gunpowder immediately exploded, causing a chain reaction that lit up the rest of the gunpowder, generating one big explosion. That wasn't the end of it however, as the vehicle itself then lit up, making the explosion even bigger. That still wasn't enough however, as the fifteen high yield missiles within the jet, together with the one hundred small yield missiles then lit up, making the explosion even bigger. Even that wasn't the end for it though, as the explosion was now large enough to engulf the jet next to it, making the explosion even bigger. There was still one final part to the compilation of explosions however, as a chain reaction was made, with each drone creating an explosion big enough to destroy the ones next to it, and so on until eventually all twenty six drones were reduced to a pile of scrap.
General Holden then took a long, deep breath. "FUUUUUUUUUUUUCCCCCCK!!"
The princesses stared in awe at the destruction before them. Never in all their years had any of them witnessed anything on such a level… well, except for Discord and Tirek.
"How did… what did…" Cadence was lost for words, "T- there's no way… no way a few kegs of gunpowder could do that."
"I don't think it was the gunpowder," Celestia replied. "It think it was their vehicles expl - " she was cut off as machine gun fire suddenly came from the distance, causing Celestia and Luna to instinctively begin retreating from the area at a quickened pace. Cadence had never fought in the war, so she didn't have that 'run when you hear gunfire' instincts in her yet, but she immediately picked up on why they were retreating, and quickly followed after the alicorn sisters. Since the soldiers were shooting upwards at them, they were quickly able to get out of the range of their guns, and the soldiers weren’t able to hit any shots while they were in range either due to the distance.
The princesses had no idea guns had a limited range however, and continued to fly away in a quickened and panicked manner. “Quickly! Teleport back!” Luna called out, and the three of them disappeared in a flash of light.
“Ahh, General Holden. You do realise you’ve woken me up an hour early, right?” Felix asked upon seeing him in the Central Control Room.
“Well, sir… The problem is that we aren’t gonna be able to quickly and efficiently decimate the entire army like what was outlined in the report. We aren’t gonna be able to bomb them to death, but worry not, we still have other ways of defending ourselves. I just thought I should inform you, since you’re the president,” said Holden.
“And why is it that we can’t just blow them up?” Felix asked.
“Well…” he then began explaining the events that had occurred, and how three primitive pony princesses were able to destroy twenty six of their jets.
“Heh…” Felix didn’t know how to react.
“Heh? You’re not mad?” Holden asked.
“Normally I would be, but this was entirely out of your control, and you did say you still have other ways of defending ourselves, correct? Well, lay it on me,” Felix replied.
“Remember when I said we have a hundred thousand drones ready to go? We’re planning to use some of those hundred thousand drones. We could use all of them, but that would just be overkill,” said Holden.
“Okay, a hundred thousand sounds enough. So, would you please tell me about the new plan?” Felix asked.
“The plan is simple. We have about a hundred and fifty Apex drones that we’ve managed to transport to the sub-hangars by way of train. They’re larger than the Swarm Drones and pack a bigger punch but much smaller than the jets. The fact that they were larger, however, meant that they were harder to transport, hence why we only have a hundred and fifty of these drones at the ready,” Holden then showed Felix an image of the drones in question on his tablet.
“As you can see, these ones are equipped with both several small yield missiles and one medium yield missile, along with two miniguns and two precision fire machine guns. These drones by themselves should be able to decimate their army,” said Holden, “But we’ve prepared the drones from the swarm just in case. The, although basic, state of the art Swarm drones come equipped with a singular precision fire minigun, and will be making up the bulk of the drones that we are going to send out. We have over ninety thousand of these ready, and around ten thousand already within the sub-hangars that can be deployed within a moment’s notice.”
“Well general, you really have outdone yourself this time. I trust that not a single soldier will need to be deployed, and we won’t have to risk any actual lives, correct?” Felix asked.
“That is correct sir,” Holden answered.
“And I assume the other nations’ generals have already been notified of the situation and are currently informing their nations’ leaders, correct?” Felix asked.
“Yes sir, they have already been informed,” Holden replied.
“Excellent. Now, how long until the pony army arrives? Do I still have time to get to the Golden Plate for breakfast before watching the show?” Felix asked.
“You should have enough time. They’ll be here within approximately forty five minutes,” Holden replied. And with that, they said their goodbyes and Felix headed off for breakfast… which was actually lunch because of his messed up sleeping schedule.
"We're almost there! Prepare to attack the camp!" Princess Luna spoke to her army using the Royal Canterlot Voice, "Keep your eyes sharp for any potential ambushes and prepare to charge on my command!"
They walked slowly through the trees of the forest, knowing there could be enemies already lying in wait. The fenced off military/research camp was already in sight, as was the fence. It was just a few hundred meters off.
"Stop!" Luna commanded, and the rest of the army immediately came to a halt. Luna then turned to her sister. "Something's not right. There's not a single First Human in sight," said Luna.
"Well, they were hiding amongst the rubble in an attempt to ambush us the last time we came here," Celestia stated.
"They're either hiding inside their camp, or hiding amongst the trees outside the camp, waiting to ambush us," said Luna, not knowing that the camp wasn't even a real part of Utopia, and assuming that was the First Humans' base.
"It's either that, or they fled after we destroyed their flying machines. We should still occupy the area though, and subdue them if they're still here. Although we should take extra caution to make sure we aren't ambushed," Celestia told Luna.
"You're right, we should send in a scouting party to scope out the area, they should be able to warn us of any surprises we might encounter," Luna replied. She then addressed the troops with the RCV. "Seventy fourth pegasi division, scout out the area in an around the camp and warn us of any potential amb- " she cut herself off as she spotted a lone drone slowly heading towards them.
"What is that?" A voice asked.
"Is it a bird?" Another voice came from the army.
"It looks like metal," stated another observer.
It was at this point Cadence had flown to the front lines, approaching Celestia and Luna. "Is that what I think it is?" She asked.
"Seems a little small for a steel 'dragon'," Ember said mockingly as she gathered with them as well.
"That's what they plan to use to fight us?" King Steel Horn asked mockingly as he walked towards them. "I don't know what you were all so worried about in the first place. I mean…" he began to laugh mockingly as well. They're… they're using a f- flying box to f- fight us?" He asked in between laughs.
"Take aim!" Luna ordered, and her soldiers began aiming their bows and arrows. Before Luna could order them to fire however, the drone stopped about fifty meters away from them, and began to 'speak'.
"Attention ponies and… other creatures, you are currently approaching Utopian territory. Vacate the area immediately or we will use lethal force. You have five minutes to comply," the Swarm Drone said, before 'retreating'.
It didn't get far though, before Celestia spoke to it. "Where are the bearers of the elements of harmony?!" She asked angrily. The drone then began to slowly rotate.
"The what?" The drone asked.
"The ponies you foalnapped! Where are they?!" Ember asked.
"They are currently within our custody. They are being treated well, and will be returned to you after Princess Twilight has completed her task," the drone replied.
"What task?" Luna asked.
"As the leader of your nation, you should be fully aware of the reason we required her services," the drone replied.
"And where are they, exactly? Don't say within your custody, I demand to know their location," Celestia insisted.
"Well, I guess since you're demanding… we have to tell you now. We no longer have a choice," the drone replied, and stifled laughter could be heard in the background. "But very well, the leaders of Utopia shall humour you. The 'bearers' are underneath you," the drone replied, before leaving, ignoring any further inquiries on the matter.
"Umm… world leaders… President Felix, do you think it was a good idea to give them our location?" General Holden asked.
"It doesn't change anything," said Felix.
"So, what now? Are we finally going to kill all their soldiers and capture their leaders?" Aladeen asked impatiently.
"That depends on whether they leave or not," Holden replied, "We'll stand by our word and give them five minutes to leave. If they attack us or choose not to leave, which they probably will, we'll launch the drones."
"Why can't we just destroy them now?" Aladeen asked.
"Because, if we are seen as the aggressors, they'll have the moral high ground. It might restrict our ability to make demands and impose sanctions on them if this escalates into a war," Felix explained.
"We can just invade their country," Aladeen pointed out.
"Yes, quite easily. But we only have around two hundred thousand soldiers. We won't be able to maintain control over their territory," Alexi pointed out.
Suddenly, a loud war cry was heard coming from one of the speakers, diverting all of their attentions towards the camera screen.
"Is it happening?" Aladeen asked.
"Yes, it is," Holden replied as a swarm of thirty thousand armored ponies began running towards Utopia. They separated into three groups, with the main group of twenty thousand soldiers along with the leaders of Equs going for a direct frontal assault, while two groups of five thousand troops broke off towards the left and right side of the base, flanking around the enemy to surround them if possible. The unicorns and earth ponies began running towards the fence, prepared to bring it down, while the pegasi, princesses, dragons and the few undisguised changelings flew above it.
"Now, if you'll excuse me, the other generals and I have to deal with this," Holden said, before the other generals came together to direct their soldiers and oversee the battle.
"Increase voltage of perimeter fence to maximum capacity," one of the generals calmly ordered.
"Increasing voltage," one of the men at a control panel said, "Electric fence running at maximum output."
"There's literally nobody there. What exactly are they attacking?" Aladeen asked.
"Well, at the moment, nothing, but we still can't let them try to attack us freely and without consequence. And looking at their level of barbarism, they'll most likely destroy the camp, and we have a lot of valuable scientific equipment there," said Holden, before he directed his attention back towards the battle.
Suddenly, and alarm sounded, and the voice of Alise came over the speakers, "Intruder alert! Several unknown entities have bypassed the perimeter!" With the alicorns taking charge, the first few pegasi had already flown over the fence.
"Sir, care to do the honours?" Holden asked Felix, opening the plastic cover of a large red button on one of the control panels.
"Yes, of course," Felix replied, stepping towards the big red button, "Do you have the song ready?"
"The song's ready," Holden replied.
"Well then…" Felix paused for dramatic effect. "Hit it!" He said as he smashed the button down.
From all the speakers set up around the camp for announcements, a song began playing. Several doors that were built into the ground, leading to the sub-hangars then opened.
"FOR EQUESTRIA!" A group of earth ponies and unicorns collectively yelled out as they reached the metal perimeter fence, about to cut through it with ease or simply climb over it if they couldn't. Or, at least, that's what they thought. The soldiers in the frontlines, who were made up of earth ponies, positioning themselves to give the fence a hard buck. Then, they began kicking hard at the fence with their back legs, and the soldiers of the frontlines began dropping like flies. All of the ponies that had reached the fence and attempted to damage it, began violently convulsing as their bodies began to emit smoke. Everpony who tried to pull their comrades away from the fence began to get electrocuted themselves the moment they touched their allies, creating a string of ponies getting electrocuted. Most of their screams of agony were lost, unable to be heard over their war cries.
"Stop! Stop!" The soldiers who had noticed what was going on tried to stop their fellow ponies from advancing.
"Stop advancing!" A soldier shouted.
"Go back! Go back!" Another called out.
"Don't touch them! The curse moves through them!" A more observant soldier tried warning the others.
"Retreat! Retreat!" A more cowardly one exclaimed.
"What's going on back there?" Cadence asked as she noticed the unicorns and earth ponies had halted their advance.
"No worries Cadence, the fence was quite reinforced. They're probably trying to get through it or go over it," said Celestia, completely unaware of the rest of the army's predicament.
"We should land, aerial reconnaissance is proving ineffective. We might be able to more easily locate the First Humans' hiding spots if we land," Luna suggested.
"Luna's right," said Thorax, "We're not getting anywhere."
"Very well, if we're all agreed," Celestia then began to speak to the pegasi with the Canterlot Voice, "Prepare to land!"
Before they could land however, a loud song began playing, its source being the speakers that were on top of large poles around the camp. In the distance, nine large doors arranged in three rows of three then began opening at the very back of the camp, at the area opposite of where the main assault force had approached Utopia. They were spaced a good distance apart, with the nine doors and the space in between them covering over a kilometer of the ground themselves. What made it extremely strange was that these doors were outside the perimeter fence, and they were over a kilometer away.
"What is that irritating noise? And what are those doo - " Ember tried to question the song and the doors, but was cut off as hundreds, then thousands of large flying dots began emerging from the holes in the ground. "This is bad, right?" She asked.
"Oh no…" Cadence simply said. She didn't know what those things were or what they did, but considering where they were, they were definitely sent by the First Humans. And knowing what she did about the First Humans, it couldn't be good. Both Ember and Thorax felt the same way, but the princesses were just frozen... or rather hovering on the spot and lost for words since they would plummet to their deaths if they were to freeze.
Their eyes were wide in both fear and surprise. The two princesses were the only ponies in the world who were still alive who had fought against the First Humans. They knew the power of First Human machines, which were devastating whenever they were deployed. They were the only ones who had been at the receiving end of First Human war machines. But the Vega Corporation never had such a large quantity of their death machines. They had never thought they would experience the same kind of fear they experienced when they fought against the First Humans the first time. They were wrong. The moment they saw the sheer number of the emerging drones, they immediately knew one thing. They fucked up.
"Attention all Apex drone pilots, on ground based targets. Your missiles will fare better on clumped up grounded targets than they would against aerial targets. Swarm drone pilots, focus on aerial targets, your bullets will do very well in bringing down the winged ones," General Holden ordered through the intercom, allowing every Utopian drone pilot to hear him, "And don't attack their leaders… at least, not yet. That order comes directly from the world leaders, so if you harm them, you're gonna have to answer to them. Oh, and also, drone fleets one to ten intercept the group flanking at nine o clock, and fleets ten to twenty intercept the flanking group at three o clock. Good luck."
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I'm still waiting for the CUTTING!
RUN! RUN! RUN! wait... wrong verb. I mean GALLOP! GALLOP! GALLOP!
Anyway, are the Mane 6 watching the action?
Just so you know, modern missiles, bombs, etc. must be armed in order to explode. Other then that detail this was a good chapter. I look forward to seeing the equestrian army get stomped and (hopefully) the negotiations that follow.
Personally, I would've played Fortunate Son.
Que flight of the valkyries
Let there be carnage.
A great chapter as usual
Hope we get some tanks in the next chapter, we'll see how gunpowder barrels fare against them.
Why do i get RA3 vibes?
https://m.(00:09-00:17)
Dear Utopian leader,
Today i learned a very important lesson. First of all: don't f*ck up with humanity. I learned that I should never act out of prejudice and bad experiences with humans.
I also learned that i should never attack before trying to do everything peacefully and diplomatically. Especially when you were given a warning.
Your future 'guest',
Princess Celestia
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This is gold, especially the last line
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Okay let's be serious the humans are this as bad as the pony. There is a reason that we have not seen any other humans other than the first human.
That doesn't work like that
There is a thing called arming a missile
Pulling a carriage full of barrels you fucking retard?!
Felix is a fucking retard
This guy is worse than President Hathaway from Monsters Vs. Aliens
I would understand an order to injure them or capture them but not attacking them is just stupid and won't accomplish anything.
These species leaders are combatants unlike human leaders who are noncombatants
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I mean, the entire vehicle did explode. Wouldn't that much 'turbulence' cause the missiles to explode?
Well, Sunbutts and Moonbutts surprise strike, and the allied attack itself, made them pretty much the first-aggressors here IMO. And it most likely plays against them in the negotiations that hopefully follow the upcoming curb-stomp.
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They wouldn't explode
The only thing that can cause an explosion would be fuel tanks.
Military builds them and ammunition to be as secure as possible.
That are standards of modern equipment
Fuel tanks are secured and damage limited, the same how tanks house and secure their ammunition, in a separate armored compartment with blow up panels that if the fuel would ignite the panels would funnel the explosion out.
Especially this Will jet fuel explode?
The flash point of Diesel is much higher when compares to that of Gasoline (Petrol) and hence it would not ignite with a lighter as a liquid, but will as a vapor. Diesel will only ignite under high pressure.
I don't think there was time for vapor.
Especially form temperature of a exploding barrel of gun powder
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To be fair, the drone exploding is a bit of a stretch too, but no. The military design their explosives to be as durable as possible. This is to prevent scenarios such as this were you get a chain reaction. While not impervious, an explosion caused by jet fuel detonating would not be enough. In fact, gun powder wouldn't have been enough to detonate the drones gas tak either. This is however, a work of fiction of which you are the author. Just keep in mind you are using real world nations and people will hold you to the expectations of those nations.
How they teleported the whole chariot of barrels full of gunpowder and three of them?
Teleportation needs time no matter the power shoved there.
This should have taken them some time and that would give every leader and army to prepare after the spy drones were discovered
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Let's hope someone is there when he gets coffee...
You already forgot what happened last time you send a scouting party?
Please don't stress yourself!
You can't force inspiration to follow a schedule. You would hurt both yourself and the story.
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Heh.
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Nice choice in music. Think General Holden will be reminded of Kingsmen witnessing the battle and play “Free Bird at some point?
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Surprisingly, no, missiles wouldn't go off from that, though i can understand why you might think so with Hollywood and all. Brace yourself, I'm a Navy Brat and this is kinda my wheelhouse, so yeah, long post. sorry.
Modern missile systems are designed so that, no matter how hard you hit them, even if caught in an explosion, you're not going to cook off the explosives in them. It's done on purpose to mitigate possible damages from enemy attack or from a catastrophic systems failure. A good example of the importance of this system is Aircraft Carriers. A standard F/A-18 Hornet jet has 9 hardpoints for operational equipment with a standard loadout of 6 sidewinder missiles. A typical aircraft carrier has 130 of these craft on board. If one of these planes were to suffer a catastrophic failure and detonation of it's weapon systems, because of how they are loaded out one immediately next to the other on a carrier, it would cook off the missile rack of all nearby planes, which in turn would set off those next to it, causing a chain reaction that would effectively cripple the aircraft carrier as 780 missiles across the entire surface of the ship went off, wiping out the runway and effectively rendering the carrier worthless from just a single missile failure. The missile systems have to function in such a way that this can't happen, even if you hit the planes with a direct missile impact, otherwise taking out an aircraft carrier would be effectively a cakewalk by just hitting a single missile. With the systems that are in place on these weapons systems, you could sit there and hose down a missile with a flamethrower and STILL not set it off. It's actually pretty wild to think about that. But yeah, you can't set off an aircraft's payload with some gunpowder barrels. Best they could realistically hope to do with barrels of gunpowder would be to damage the planes enough that they wouldn't have the time to actively repair the planes for that specific battle, but they would be fixable, and likely repaired in time for subsequent operations. If those planes are built superior to modern standards, then the barrels certainly wouldn't be able to penetrate the hull armor of the craft far enough to inflict enough damage to take any of those craft out permanently, as even modern jets are built with enough hull armor to be able to withstand pretty significant punishment. This is why missile warheads are directed charges, to be able to penetrate that armor plating. An indirect explosion like a detonating gunpowder barrel loses a ton of it's power because the force of the blast is just spread in all different directions, and anywhere the blast isn't directly resisted by a surface is lost power from the detonation. It's the same principle that causes a fragmentation grenade to easily kill soft targets like soldiers, but to be unable to effectively take out a tank. All of the power of the explosion is lost because it sprays in directions with less resistance, so tank armor will ignore it, but a human can be simply killed with the fast moving shrapnel or the direct force of the blast itself.
Now, all said and done, I did rather like this chapter. It sets up for a good combat scene, with high stakes and significant ramifications in the future. It displays the two sides and their methods of combat well, with humanity operating on the defensive, ponies being highly aggressive and still operating under mistaken impressions of who they are actually up against, still presuming it to be a much weaker organization of First Humans than what they really have to contend with. But, I'm also offering my critiques because I want to see this story do well, so here's what I noticed.
Felix feels too.... I want to say immature to be an effective president. He comes off as lacking in reasoning skills, with giving an enemy who just attacked you the location of your prisoners. Any leader, heck, even just a common soldier, would know that you never give your enemy the location of the thing they are asking for, especially high value prisoners. He seems immature with a need for dramatic effect and musical scores accompanying his troops as well. This is my opinion as a navy brat however, but any commander who blared music of any kind over their loudspeaker before an assault would be facing pretty harsh reprimand for such a complete and immature display of a lack of discipline and proper military decorum. Holden doesn't seem to have much deductive reasoning skills if he completely misses a carriage full of barrels being pulled by enemy units, regardless of rank, and thinks they are coming to negotiate when they have a massive army at their back and given their propensity to attack without any thought for negotiation that has repeatedly been displayed. Last point I wanted to make is the order not to attack the leaders. Realistically, mission there should be incapacitate, not simply "don't attack". They already know the enemy leaders are exceptionally powerful beings from previous chapters and the information they got from the captured soldiers. So they should know they will be the biggest threat that needs to be neutralized as quickly as possible. incapacitation and capture of them should be, realistically, priority one. Based on what the humans know of the ponies, taking their leaders quickly removes the biggest threat from the field, removes the enemy command structure and gives them a major bargaining chip. As revered as the humans would know the Alicorns are by their people, they wouldn't risk action that could harm their leaders and they have no way of feasibly recovering them.
That being said, again, I really did enjoy this chapter. You did fantastic at setting up the engagement, showing how the various world leaders really don't get along, much like they don't in our modern world. Everyone's personality is clear and consistent and pony characters do act relatively in character with how their personalities would feasibly be adjusted in a world where humans being enslaved was a norm. You established a strong pacing for the story that doesn't feel rushed, but doesn't feel like it drags unnecessarily either, and have a good buildup of tensions that has me excited for each new chapter. Everything you write is clear and concise, and you have an interesting story premise with a lot of potential for where you can take the story from here. Honestly, keep it up! Seriously, this story is really good, and probably one of the top Human v pony stories on the site that i've read. Can't wait for the next chapter wherever you take it, and really looking forward to seeing how the ponies handle the realization that they were drastically mistaken about who these humans are.
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Everything you said mirrors my thoughts exactly. Concerning Felix, I wouldn't say he is immature either. I just think that he as well as all the rest of the human characters in the story lack any concept of "there's a time and a place." When he was first introduced, he was actually portrayed as a serious no nonsense guy who was privately nervous about the role that was thrust upon him. Now he is very arrogant and conducts himself in an unbecoming way in front of others.
I'm not gonna lie this story is starting to fall out of intrest for me in all honesty, the decisions made by the Utopian military in this fic are going from kinda absurd but nessesary to advance the story, dumb but forgivable under the circumstances to complete tactical and rational retardation. Especially from Felix himself and by extension Holden.
The sheer incompetence from these people is just... Incredible
Why would you tell them that though, that's just kindly asking them to dig tunnels into utopia
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Good luck for the Equestrians trying to dig 3km deep only to find a 4-inch thick concrete wall that would be impossible to dig through.
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I know right? I mean I love this fic, but this is just getting frustrating. What’s more frustrating is how they keep giving those ponies chance after chance despite it being incredibly obvious the ponies don’t give a shit. They’ve got a massive army marching to your location, but sure let’s just wait for them to come just so we can say we aren’t aggressive (even though attacking an invading army is completely justified, the ponies already took the first shot at those diplomats and they enslaved humanity thus clearly putting them in the wrong). It’s like their actively trying to fuck up.
If you ask me, negotiating with the ponies now is out of the question. I can see this is pretty much like Planet of the apes last frontier scenario.
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Are you some kind of psychic? Because I was literally gonna put that song in, I was debating between this one and free bird, but I decided to use free bird during the next battle.
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Well, I knew it was going to be a bloodbath, likely with at least one human drone just completely mowing through Equestrian combatants like Collin Firth did in the church scene. So, with Holden and Felix's flare for the dramatic, it seems like a logical choice of music.
Considering your stories' logic with certain things, this is definitely supposed to be more of a Hollywood-style kind of story as opposed to exactly real life, which I LOVE, so I just kind of put my Movie hat on and thought to myself, which movie song would work here?
Can't wait to see how you use Free Bird in the next chapter. I'll be waiting with baited breath.
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Dont worry, this is the last straw for Equestria. Utopia isn't gonna allow this attack to go unanswered.
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Well, considering everything they've seen, the other races of Equs dont have the capabilities to dig 7km underground.
I FUCKING KNEW IT U DID PULL A BS MOVE AND GAVE PLOT ARMOUR TO THE HORSES
10983770
No, they are gonna get slaughtered
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Hey, thanks for that essay of a comment. It was super insightful, and I won't make the same mistake about the explosiveness of missiles in the future. Since you are well versed in military stuff, I wanna ask if you would mind me messaging you directly for any other things concerning the military.
Next, I would like to really thank you for the encouraging words, and your little review of my story. It's always good to get a review.
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bois, get out the BBQ, beer, and camera's. this nights going to be a bloodbath.
Ponies in general XD
*Celestia and Luna show Cadence and other leaders Equestrian new armor, with picture of a human skull on the helmets*
Cadence:"Celestia .......are we the baddies?"
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10983039
I think Sabaton music would have been better,it both epic and scary for enemies hearing it ,especially if it's played on such volume, like in a concert,making it impossible hearing anything else around you
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Starts playing Sabaton music
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Well, first there is the diamond dogs which are considered to be able to dig through stone due to the few we have seen living in stone tunnels, then theres also the gunpowder which they can use to boost the mining process.
Even old mining methods could reach that depth if they intended to do so, but unfortunately for the ponies this would take quite some time so it would not be a very resource appropriate way to enter utopia unless the war somehow ends up getting lengthened long enough to bother or a stalemate gets reached, both are very unlikely
Then theres the matter of the 4 inch concrete wall, which is most definitely NOT impossible to dig through, even if it had rebar put in it for structural support. If there was a thick metal wall for one reason or another on the other side of the concrete one, they wouldn't be getting through that one anytime soon... Unless celestia uses a sun magic beam and melts it.
TLDR: It is completely possible for the ponies to get into utopia that way, its just time consuming and not worth the effort at this current point in the conflict
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And also the fact that the humans aren't just gonna stand there and watch them dig 7km underground. And also, it's super hard to dig just like 1km underground, let alone 7.
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Well yeah, there is the fact that humans WILL pick up the seismic activity, but it's not that its super difficult for mines to go below 1km, its just that they don't generally go too deep as they are digging for minerals and ores not an Underground city
It's possible to do so, just aint gonna happen in this scenario
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Waiting for the last part they start giving out sin
P.S when are we going to see a non first world human we have only heard things about them we haven't seen how they really are other than that one time when they were being observed by the human. I'm curious to see are they really as bad as the ponies Bank or are they exaggerating.
Waiting for the third part to come out to start giving people their sins
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Oh i have a good idea about the reason that the explosives worked so well in causing the chain reaction. I don't remember which fan fiction story i heard this from but basically the rainbow boom was caused by the magic in the world wanting fast things to go even faster. So who is to say that the magic in the air doesn't react differently to chemical reactions because as you said the magic reacts to the ponies will and allows things that would normally not happen to become standard. Add on top of that that the equipment was out in the open and surrounded by the magic and/or that when a magic explosion meets a non magic explosive the magic in the air super charges it or activates the non magic one or something. The funny thing about magic is that their are 2 types of it, hard magic where their are set rules and rituals that will always repeat the same results all the time(D&D) or soft magic where its dependent on the persons will or thought process or belief(Mage the Ascension or hell Star Wars the Force).
10983790then why did the drones explode mutions are safe lined to make sure chain reactions dont happen
10983900
gunpowder makes the mine collapse and everyone dies
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I assumed Utopia's walls were made out of titanium or some other corrosion-resistant metal.
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Because I didn't know