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One spaceship, twenty thousand frozen ponies, one unidentified malfunction

In Bay 3, Wing A lies a cryogenic pod. Inside, an unlikely hero, asleep for a hundred years.

Her time has come.

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 10 )

Hmm, image of ship over... Horse head nebula? Oddly fitting.

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Not bad, not bad at all. One quick tip though, you might want to italicize the sound effects to make them stand out, I read them as text and it's a little jarring; but that's up to you. Keep it up.

This is... actually quite good.

I have the feeling that any questions that I may have at this point will be answered soonish in future chapters.

Please continue. You have my attention.

I foresee....a lot more dead corpses.....

Don't ask where I got that impression, just write whatever you wish.

It's only one possibility.:trixieshiftright:

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Good choice, even though I prefer Asimov myself

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