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Haliton
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Celestia x OC, buck yeah
Awww, cute, sweet, and playful
So cute in many ways.
You sir are a Bro, a Gentleman, a Scholar, and WINNING!
Looks like Celestia had the best day off she could have imagined.
If I ever decide to write down the journeys of my OC and his Love, when I do a Day Off chapter, I'd hope to base it off of this story... that is if it would be ok with you. Aside from grammer errors/spelling mistakes,
Well that was cute
Meh... lacks girth.
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I know, but I wasn't sure what more to add. Anything more you can say about it?
Maybe a "Who is this random human? Why is he here? Why is he dating Celestia?" You wrote only a date, not a whole story.
It's short and sweet, but a little too short, and a little too bland.
It lacks any real character too, it's just kind of cutesy.
You definitely have talent, and can certainly write, but challenge yourself more.
(Another thing is I can't stand 2nd person, but hey, that's just my opinion.)
The human is lacking any real characterization aside from "Hey I'm dating Celestia." Even 2nd person fics can have characterized leads.
Read Desire and Deep water if you haven't. It's a good example of a well characterized 2nd person fiction.
If I had to ask you to do any one thing, it would be to make me care about this OC and his relationship with Celestia, Because right now... meh.
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Interesting. It is meant to be a self-insert of the reader, it's really not a proper.. character that I can define without breaking immersion. I'm doing second person because I think it would be more immersive for the reader, but if you think first person is better for that, I'll see how many others would prefer it first person too.
I did try to drop a few hints about the pony lover's position and so on, but I guess they were too vague. I might read what you recommended if I have the time. Also, if anyone wants to add on to this by saying if they prefer first or second person, feel free!
Love it. Celestia x OC is one of my fav's.
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Not enough celestia x OC fics. Thank you for adding this!
I'm sorry but I found it hard to read due to numerous mistakes, especially grammar.
As a short 2nd person clopfic, it's pretty good. As anything else, it's too short and too lacking in detail. Human fics are always begging to have the basic questions answered: how did the human get there? What's his role? And so forth. This one's just too short and too sparse to do much with, as is. But again, for what it's meant to be - not bad.
Take clop away it make good everyone fanfic too
its nice, but why all ocs are men? we pegasisters never get any love...i can't be the only one that wants some of these made for women! we love celestia and crysalis and all the rest just as much as u bronies do!
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Odd? Interesting, in what way?
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Yeah, I don't like commanding 'you' in second person fics. I give a direction to the atmosphere and a vague train of thought to have 'your' actions flow, but other than that everything you say and do is your own. My first person ones will have more 'proper' interaction though, since I can focus on developing the viewer character as well instead of keeping it a slate.
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Well, most people who love ponies in 'that' way are male! Although I do have a special treat planned for those who wish the main 6 were handsome stallions.
My OC is brother to Celestia, so I think this would be incest on my part. Great job by the way!!!!!
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thats a nice thought, tho for me that woudl be even worse....
This... makes me think less going on a date with a pony, and more being in lust with a horse. Kind of a difference there.
A very enjoyable short story featuring my one of my favorite ponies! Though after seeing the cover pic, I was a little disappointed that you didn't have the OC, sneak into the shower with Celestia. That would have been sweet!
Still, I really enjoyed the different approach, having the "you" ride Celestia around the halls of the castle. One of my newer followers told me to consider that even though the ponies seem quite human, they are in fact still ponies. I've been adapting the ear stroking and scratching to my stories, as well as considering other possible aspects that would cater to their more equine sides.
All in all, I enjoyed this. Yeah, there were some minor spelling and grammar issues, but limited ones don't break immersion for me, besides I make plenty of typos myself.
The love/clop scene was done nicely, maybe a tad short, but I'm glad you did it tastefully. It's been my belief and practice that you can add somewhat detailed sex to a fic and still keep it and the story tasteful. I'm happy this was added to my Celestia Is The Best Pony group! Thanks for sharing this story! 
Ohh yeah don't bucking stop
A must read for any brony who considers Princess Celestia their 'waifu'.
The image of riding Princess Celestia makes me wish she was a mount in WoW.
Well done. I liked it.
2507310 ALL OF MY YES!
ALL! OF! IT!
Mm, fairly decent. Nice to see a clopfic where Celestia isn't 1-Dimensional Molestia from start to finish. Wasn't really a fan of anon riding celestia and treating her like a horse. And the sex just felt kind of "eh" to me, like it wasn't presented in a mind blowing fashion. But the writing and diction was fine, it wasn't written with any eye-gouging or tired phrases that I've seen in countless other fics.
Yeah, I'll give this an upvote.
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Thanks!
Never liked Molestia, there's so much more you can do with a less unhinged extrapolation of Princess Celestia. And frankly, if you don't like the ponies for their personalities, what else could you like them for?
Sex has increasingly been more and more of an excuse for me to just think up a lot of cute scenes for a human/pony fic. I just thought riding her was pretty cute.
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Late reply, but yeah. There are many things you can do with ponies that you can't do with humans, so you should find those advantages. Especially big ones like Celestia and Luna.
And speaking of Luna, soon. I was thinking of just going first person, but people seem to like the way I do second person. What would you like?
gj m8
A shame that this story is only a oneshot though, I thoroughly enjoy your writing
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Personally, I've always enjoyed 2nd person over 1st person, as well as 3rd person. You style of second person is done quite nicely as well. But, you are the writer. Make sure your story is something you'll enjoy as well.
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I doubt I can carry on anything long with second person. Besides, one particular pony takes up too much of my time.
Nicely done.
Surprisingly wholesome story
Very warm
Sweet!